No archived versions :( A consensus was reached that until CAPIF's site is on again (it'll be on soon i think, since it was hacked) the sources stay. —
Hahc21 13:34, 22 June 2012 (UTC)reply
It doesn't have an official translation, since its like "Little Clothes", but not totally.
Nothing does, but it is a Spanish language album and therefore an English translation would be great try using {{lang-en}} to do this.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I still don't understand the usefulness of the template, but i'll add it XD. — Preceding
unsigned comment added by
Hahc21 (
talk •
contribs)
You may not understand the usefulness because you understand Spanish, users like myself who don't understand see the usefulness. Best,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 12:03, 22 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Who released the album?
Ricardo Arjona. it's on the lead.
No Arjona did not release the album, according to the infobox its
Warner Music. Please fix accordingly,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
A drastic change from his past albums, Poquita Ropa was made trying to use the last number of musical instruments as possible, with the goal of leaving the songs "almost as they were born" without adding them much sounds, and achieving a production that seemed to be a capella performances, with the singer commenting that "music and women look better with little clothes." The result was named as to be Arjona at his "most naked". - is a run-on, on top of that there are no periods.
And the point is? Please elaborate further. Should be any periods within the paragraph?
Yes there should be a few periods in this paragraph that seems to keep going and going that's a run on.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I modified the paragraph to include some periods. —
Hahc21 13:34, 22 June 2012 (UTC)reply
and also topped the lists in Argentina and Mexico. - instead of linking the countries which are
common, replace them with their music organizations respectively.
The album was certified Platinum in Argentina and Mexico, and reached Gold status in Chile, Colombia and the United States. - and these denotes? (sales or shipments and what are the numbers?)
Since they are different (i mean, shipments in a country and sales in another), i prefered to explain that on the article body. —
Hahc21 00:40, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
The album received in 2011 a Grammy Award nomination for Best Latin Pop Album. - try this The album was nominated at the
53rd Grammy Awards for "
Best Latin Pop Album".
"Puente", a caribbean song with Cuban influences, was released as the lead single off the album and became a moderate success for Arjona. - why? In other words, prove this sentence with peak positions and sales of the single if any
No numbers. Only No.36 on the Latin Pop Songs. I rewrote as this: ""
Puente", a caribbean song with Cuban influences, was released as the lead single off the album and reached No.36 on the BillboardLatin Pop Songs chart". —
Hahc21 00:40, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Instead of embarking on another worldwide tour, Arjona promoted the album with a film that was broadcasted on HBO and A&E, and featured Edith González. - why? what was the film about? what was it called? who filmed it? what was the genre?
Added film name and director to lead. —
Hahc21 00:40, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Composition
In, Poquita Ropa he drastically changes his musical style. who does?
Also, newspaper La Nación compared it with a song released by Fito Páez in 1999, "Habana" - (a) why start if off with "also"? (b) No the newspaper did not compared it an editor did.
Done. I added the editor and fixed the phrase. —
Hahc21 00:52, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Why does this section only talks about the composition to only one song? Why do you start off with the composition of the song(s)? Where's the background and production sections? Who wrote the songs? who produced them? when was the album written? where? who? where did the concept of the album came about?
This is a latin album. Not much of that information is available, sadly. As the lead single and the song considered the standout of the album, it was the only properly covered by media. —
Hahc21 00:52, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Take a look at Amor Prohibido and Selena Live! both are Latin albums and have a background and production sections. This album can have one as well just have to look for those sources in google.news and/or google.books. Have you tried those sources yet?
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Selena is different. Ricardo Arjona writes and produces all of his songs and rarely comments about how they are made. I've thoroughly searched and everything about the album is here. Nothing else. Remember that you have to review the article taking into consideration the information available, not desirable. —
Hahc21 13:32, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Well I don't know much of him so I assumed that like many other artists there would be interviews and/or commentary reviews on each or most of the tracks. This is fine,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 14:58, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Lyrics and content
I believe "Lyrical content" is a suitable heading.
Mmmm. Yeah, i'll change it. —
Hahc21 01:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Talking about the theme of his song "Puente", is just POVish and
WP:OR at its best. This sentence is written as if a fan was writing this article (which seems to be true).
Please re-read the entire phrase: "Talking about the theme of his song "Puente", Arjona commented: "Although many believe is a treshed topic, it isn't for a cuban, be it on the island or Florida. The status of this dispute hasn't changed since 1959..." And so on. Also, it is what the ref says. I don't like POV and just write what is covered by the references. —
Hahc21 01:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
You keep saying that it is in the reference so are you copying this sentence "Talking about the theme of his song "Puente""? And it actually does sound like what a newspaper would say not Wikipedia. We already know the song is his song but starting if off with "Talking about the theme" is not a good start. Maybe starting if off with "The central theme explored on "Puente"..."? Does this fit with the coming quote?
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Well, yes. I'll changed it. I see your point. —
Hahc21 14:08, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
it on the island or Florida. - delink both Florida and Cuba
As with Arjona's past releases, there's no deluxe edition but an iTunes Bonus Track. this sentence is not needed. Rewrite it A deluxe edition was released on iTunes, it contained the track "Estas Ganas de Llorar"
The music video shows the problematic about the migration on Cuba, was filmed between Mexico and Argentina, with the collaboration of children from 5 to 13 age old irrelevant
The song, which music video tells the story of a son's relationship with his father on the last days of life. - is a run off, and the music video is irrelevant
Its music video was filmed in Mexico and directed by Argentinian filmmaker Joaquín Cambre, and shows Arjona playing guitar and sitting on a couch while singing. irrelevant
In the music video for the song, Edith Gonzalez appears dancing for a gentlemen, who pays her for her services. Alongside, Arjona can be seen playing the piano and drinking wine, recalling "Marta irrelevant
Also, on the same week it debuted on that chart, Poquita Ropa debuted atop the Latin Pop Albums component chart needs to be rewritten, does not make any sense
On the year-end charts of 2010, Independiente was the 43th best-selling album on the Latin Albums chart, and the 12th best-selling album on the Latin Pop Albums chart. who?
In the United States, Poquita Ropa was certified Gold (Latin) by the Recording Industry Association of America for 50,000 copies sold. no it shipped 50,000 copies it did not sell 50,000 copies
El Carabobeño stated that Poquita Ropa was "an album of ghetto and concept, with flawless production and carried out with the right amount of instruments. no an editor, please add his name as the contributor of the statement.
It doesn't have a recognized author. Usually, latin american newspapers doesn't credit the writers of the news. —
Hahc21 00:31, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Yea I know lolz but you can say "An editor from..." because the newspapers don't make reviews.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Think I've fixed all. Thanks for the review. —
Hahc21 01:22, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I have left some more comments. I'll continue on the review with the references once these are addressed. Best,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Done. Refs will be easy. I'm very strict when writing references, so almost everything should be fine with them. —
Hahc21 14:25, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
References
FN#2, FN#35 link
El Informador and italicize it since it is a printed source. Also is the source Spanish?
I think i've fixed all. if i ommited something, please tell me. Thanks. —
Hahc21 18:40, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I've tagged what you have not placed a {{done}} to the issues above. Please fix or say that you have fixed them before continuing the review. Best,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 12:03, 22 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Ok. I already fixed all before you tagge them but forgot to write it here >.<. About the CAPIF site, there is no replacement. However, the site will go on somewhere in the near future, since they are a certif. authority (and the reason why it's down is because the site was hacked). —
Hahc21 13:34, 22 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Further comments (second look)
"Poquita Ropa was produced trying to use the last number of
musical instruments as possible" you mean "least number"? However Arjona tried to use the least number of instruments as possible. is found later in the article. Please fix accordingly.
Fixed.
"The result was named as to be Arjona at his "most naked"." this sentence does not make any sense, what are you trying to convey the reader?
Removed. Nothing worthy.
"
Puente", a Caribbean song with Cuban influences." you mean Caribbean-influences?
No, only influences from cuban music. It has, however, a caribbean sound because it's a mixture of salsa and merengue, that's why it's caribbean. But, notwithstanding, its main influences (apart from being a salsa/merengue song) is Cuban music. —
Hahc21 01:15, 23 June 2012 (UTC)reply
How can it be a Caribbean song if the artist is from Guatemala? Caribbean is not a music genre.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 00:16, 25 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Mmm, i see what you mean. I removed the "Caribbean" word. It's only a song with Cuban influences. —
Hahc21 03:21, 26 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"This album was the first since Adentro (2005), that Arjona worked without
Tommy Torres." ---> Poquita Ropa marked the first time that
Tommy Torress did not work with Arjona, whose last production was for Adentro (2005).
Fixed but, as you suggestion introduced "whose last production was for", then Adentro is incorrect, since the last production on which Torres was present was 5to Piso (2008).
"is crafted in eight and a half minutes" poor English
Fixed.
""Puente" is mainly similar to Arjona's work on Galería Caribe (2000)" sounds
orish to me
The reference says: "Like Galería Caribe, the Arjona effort to which it's most reminiscent". I can removet if it's totally OR XD.
Again you can't copy what a source says, you need to rewrite it in your own words.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 00:16, 25 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I re-read the source and it says thet the album is reminiscent of Galería Caribe, not the song. So, i moved the statement and rewrote it to comply with the source. —
Hahc21 03:21, 26 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"Mónica Maristain from newspaper La Nación compared it with a song released by
Fito Páez in 1999, "Habana"." ---> Mónica Maristain of La Nación compared it to
Fito Páez' 1999 single "Habana".
Mmm, nah. The reference only says the song was made by Paez in 1999. It doesn't says it's a single, but only a song. So, writing "1999 single" is OR, since that info is unverifiable.
"
La Habana is the main theme in lead single "
Puente", talking about two separated brothers." ----> La Habana is the central theme explored in "Puente", which talks about two separated brothers.
Fixed.
"The central theme explored on "Puente", Arjona commented" can you just give a central theme about the song instead of going straight into
another quote? Maybe saying "The central theme explored in "Puente" [is...]"
Mmmm , i rewrote as this: "When asked about "Puente"'s main theme, Arjona commented: (the quote)" It's not something that could be described without the quiote. I spent hours thinking about it, but the only way to properly express what is about is with the quote :(.
I've read it, but thhs is not a review; is only a comment Arjona made about the song's political theme. —
Hahc21 03:21, 26 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"It became the third consecutive single of Poquita Ropa not to chart in the United States." I thought that only two of the three single did not chart?
O.o Fixed. Thanks. I leave some mistakes while writing.
"The film was directed by Joaquín Cambre, is co-starred by Arjona himself, Mexican telenovela actress Edith Gonzalez, who also appears on the music video for "Marta", Edgar Vivar, Daniel Arenas, Mimi Morales and Kenny. Poquita Ropa - Una Historia Apasionada was produced in Argentina and Mexico" missing a word
Which one? Sorry but i'm tired and cannot read well :(. I dont' find it
.
Reread The film was directed by Joaquín Cambre, is co-starred by Arjona himself.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 00:16, 25 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I think i have fixed it :( —
Hahc21 03:21, 26 June 2012 (UTC)reply
The missing word is "the" before "is co-starred".
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 23:41, 27 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Do you mean The film was directed by Joaquín Cambre, the is co-starred by Arjona himself? It doesn't make any sense (to me). —
Hahc21 01:29, 28 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Fixed (slightly different solution). Also trimmed repetition of González info, and cut parts of a quote that unnecessarily promoted HBO.
BlueMoonset (
talk) 14:17, 2 July 2012 (UTC)reply
"The film was directed by Joaquín Cambre, who also directed the music videos for "Puente", "Vida" and "Marta"." you already stated that he is the director in the previous section why keep mentioning it?
Done. Another of my leftovers.
"becoming the his highest entry on that chart." source?
I think it's done. Thanks again! —
Hahc21 03:21, 26 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Note that the sound files need to be fixed; there's a copyright issue raised yesterday about them on the article page because they're of too-high quality.
BlueMoonset (
talk) 14:17, 2 July 2012 (UTC)reply
Thanks Moonset. I will handle them soon, since I have some issues and stuff. Cheers! —
Hahc21 01:51, 3 July 2012 (UTC)reply
I've uploaded 64kbps versions of the samples. —
Hahc21 17:48, 4 July 2012 (UTC)reply
After a 3rd re-read of the article I believe it can pass GA. Great work on another interesting article. Best,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 21:51, 4 July 2012 (UTC)reply
No archived versions :( A consensus was reached that until CAPIF's site is on again (it'll be on soon i think, since it was hacked) the sources stay. —
Hahc21 13:34, 22 June 2012 (UTC)reply
It doesn't have an official translation, since its like "Little Clothes", but not totally.
Nothing does, but it is a Spanish language album and therefore an English translation would be great try using {{lang-en}} to do this.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I still don't understand the usefulness of the template, but i'll add it XD. — Preceding
unsigned comment added by
Hahc21 (
talk •
contribs)
You may not understand the usefulness because you understand Spanish, users like myself who don't understand see the usefulness. Best,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 12:03, 22 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Who released the album?
Ricardo Arjona. it's on the lead.
No Arjona did not release the album, according to the infobox its
Warner Music. Please fix accordingly,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
A drastic change from his past albums, Poquita Ropa was made trying to use the last number of musical instruments as possible, with the goal of leaving the songs "almost as they were born" without adding them much sounds, and achieving a production that seemed to be a capella performances, with the singer commenting that "music and women look better with little clothes." The result was named as to be Arjona at his "most naked". - is a run-on, on top of that there are no periods.
And the point is? Please elaborate further. Should be any periods within the paragraph?
Yes there should be a few periods in this paragraph that seems to keep going and going that's a run on.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I modified the paragraph to include some periods. —
Hahc21 13:34, 22 June 2012 (UTC)reply
and also topped the lists in Argentina and Mexico. - instead of linking the countries which are
common, replace them with their music organizations respectively.
The album was certified Platinum in Argentina and Mexico, and reached Gold status in Chile, Colombia and the United States. - and these denotes? (sales or shipments and what are the numbers?)
Since they are different (i mean, shipments in a country and sales in another), i prefered to explain that on the article body. —
Hahc21 00:40, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
The album received in 2011 a Grammy Award nomination for Best Latin Pop Album. - try this The album was nominated at the
53rd Grammy Awards for "
Best Latin Pop Album".
"Puente", a caribbean song with Cuban influences, was released as the lead single off the album and became a moderate success for Arjona. - why? In other words, prove this sentence with peak positions and sales of the single if any
No numbers. Only No.36 on the Latin Pop Songs. I rewrote as this: ""
Puente", a caribbean song with Cuban influences, was released as the lead single off the album and reached No.36 on the BillboardLatin Pop Songs chart". —
Hahc21 00:40, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Instead of embarking on another worldwide tour, Arjona promoted the album with a film that was broadcasted on HBO and A&E, and featured Edith González. - why? what was the film about? what was it called? who filmed it? what was the genre?
Added film name and director to lead. —
Hahc21 00:40, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Composition
In, Poquita Ropa he drastically changes his musical style. who does?
Also, newspaper La Nación compared it with a song released by Fito Páez in 1999, "Habana" - (a) why start if off with "also"? (b) No the newspaper did not compared it an editor did.
Done. I added the editor and fixed the phrase. —
Hahc21 00:52, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Why does this section only talks about the composition to only one song? Why do you start off with the composition of the song(s)? Where's the background and production sections? Who wrote the songs? who produced them? when was the album written? where? who? where did the concept of the album came about?
This is a latin album. Not much of that information is available, sadly. As the lead single and the song considered the standout of the album, it was the only properly covered by media. —
Hahc21 00:52, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Take a look at Amor Prohibido and Selena Live! both are Latin albums and have a background and production sections. This album can have one as well just have to look for those sources in google.news and/or google.books. Have you tried those sources yet?
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Selena is different. Ricardo Arjona writes and produces all of his songs and rarely comments about how they are made. I've thoroughly searched and everything about the album is here. Nothing else. Remember that you have to review the article taking into consideration the information available, not desirable. —
Hahc21 13:32, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Well I don't know much of him so I assumed that like many other artists there would be interviews and/or commentary reviews on each or most of the tracks. This is fine,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 14:58, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Lyrics and content
I believe "Lyrical content" is a suitable heading.
Mmmm. Yeah, i'll change it. —
Hahc21 01:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Talking about the theme of his song "Puente", is just POVish and
WP:OR at its best. This sentence is written as if a fan was writing this article (which seems to be true).
Please re-read the entire phrase: "Talking about the theme of his song "Puente", Arjona commented: "Although many believe is a treshed topic, it isn't for a cuban, be it on the island or Florida. The status of this dispute hasn't changed since 1959..." And so on. Also, it is what the ref says. I don't like POV and just write what is covered by the references. —
Hahc21 01:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
You keep saying that it is in the reference so are you copying this sentence "Talking about the theme of his song "Puente""? And it actually does sound like what a newspaper would say not Wikipedia. We already know the song is his song but starting if off with "Talking about the theme" is not a good start. Maybe starting if off with "The central theme explored on "Puente"..."? Does this fit with the coming quote?
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Well, yes. I'll changed it. I see your point. —
Hahc21 14:08, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
it on the island or Florida. - delink both Florida and Cuba
As with Arjona's past releases, there's no deluxe edition but an iTunes Bonus Track. this sentence is not needed. Rewrite it A deluxe edition was released on iTunes, it contained the track "Estas Ganas de Llorar"
The music video shows the problematic about the migration on Cuba, was filmed between Mexico and Argentina, with the collaboration of children from 5 to 13 age old irrelevant
The song, which music video tells the story of a son's relationship with his father on the last days of life. - is a run off, and the music video is irrelevant
Its music video was filmed in Mexico and directed by Argentinian filmmaker Joaquín Cambre, and shows Arjona playing guitar and sitting on a couch while singing. irrelevant
In the music video for the song, Edith Gonzalez appears dancing for a gentlemen, who pays her for her services. Alongside, Arjona can be seen playing the piano and drinking wine, recalling "Marta irrelevant
Also, on the same week it debuted on that chart, Poquita Ropa debuted atop the Latin Pop Albums component chart needs to be rewritten, does not make any sense
On the year-end charts of 2010, Independiente was the 43th best-selling album on the Latin Albums chart, and the 12th best-selling album on the Latin Pop Albums chart. who?
In the United States, Poquita Ropa was certified Gold (Latin) by the Recording Industry Association of America for 50,000 copies sold. no it shipped 50,000 copies it did not sell 50,000 copies
El Carabobeño stated that Poquita Ropa was "an album of ghetto and concept, with flawless production and carried out with the right amount of instruments. no an editor, please add his name as the contributor of the statement.
It doesn't have a recognized author. Usually, latin american newspapers doesn't credit the writers of the news. —
Hahc21 00:31, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Yea I know lolz but you can say "An editor from..." because the newspapers don't make reviews.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Think I've fixed all. Thanks for the review. —
Hahc21 01:22, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I have left some more comments. I'll continue on the review with the references once these are addressed. Best,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 13:12, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Done. Refs will be easy. I'm very strict when writing references, so almost everything should be fine with them. —
Hahc21 14:25, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
References
FN#2, FN#35 link
El Informador and italicize it since it is a printed source. Also is the source Spanish?
I think i've fixed all. if i ommited something, please tell me. Thanks. —
Hahc21 18:40, 20 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I've tagged what you have not placed a {{done}} to the issues above. Please fix or say that you have fixed them before continuing the review. Best,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 12:03, 22 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Ok. I already fixed all before you tagge them but forgot to write it here >.<. About the CAPIF site, there is no replacement. However, the site will go on somewhere in the near future, since they are a certif. authority (and the reason why it's down is because the site was hacked). —
Hahc21 13:34, 22 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Further comments (second look)
"Poquita Ropa was produced trying to use the last number of
musical instruments as possible" you mean "least number"? However Arjona tried to use the least number of instruments as possible. is found later in the article. Please fix accordingly.
Fixed.
"The result was named as to be Arjona at his "most naked"." this sentence does not make any sense, what are you trying to convey the reader?
Removed. Nothing worthy.
"
Puente", a Caribbean song with Cuban influences." you mean Caribbean-influences?
No, only influences from cuban music. It has, however, a caribbean sound because it's a mixture of salsa and merengue, that's why it's caribbean. But, notwithstanding, its main influences (apart from being a salsa/merengue song) is Cuban music. —
Hahc21 01:15, 23 June 2012 (UTC)reply
How can it be a Caribbean song if the artist is from Guatemala? Caribbean is not a music genre.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 00:16, 25 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Mmm, i see what you mean. I removed the "Caribbean" word. It's only a song with Cuban influences. —
Hahc21 03:21, 26 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"This album was the first since Adentro (2005), that Arjona worked without
Tommy Torres." ---> Poquita Ropa marked the first time that
Tommy Torress did not work with Arjona, whose last production was for Adentro (2005).
Fixed but, as you suggestion introduced "whose last production was for", then Adentro is incorrect, since the last production on which Torres was present was 5to Piso (2008).
"is crafted in eight and a half minutes" poor English
Fixed.
""Puente" is mainly similar to Arjona's work on Galería Caribe (2000)" sounds
orish to me
The reference says: "Like Galería Caribe, the Arjona effort to which it's most reminiscent". I can removet if it's totally OR XD.
Again you can't copy what a source says, you need to rewrite it in your own words.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 00:16, 25 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I re-read the source and it says thet the album is reminiscent of Galería Caribe, not the song. So, i moved the statement and rewrote it to comply with the source. —
Hahc21 03:21, 26 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"Mónica Maristain from newspaper La Nación compared it with a song released by
Fito Páez in 1999, "Habana"." ---> Mónica Maristain of La Nación compared it to
Fito Páez' 1999 single "Habana".
Mmm, nah. The reference only says the song was made by Paez in 1999. It doesn't says it's a single, but only a song. So, writing "1999 single" is OR, since that info is unverifiable.
"
La Habana is the main theme in lead single "
Puente", talking about two separated brothers." ----> La Habana is the central theme explored in "Puente", which talks about two separated brothers.
Fixed.
"The central theme explored on "Puente", Arjona commented" can you just give a central theme about the song instead of going straight into
another quote? Maybe saying "The central theme explored in "Puente" [is...]"
Mmmm , i rewrote as this: "When asked about "Puente"'s main theme, Arjona commented: (the quote)" It's not something that could be described without the quiote. I spent hours thinking about it, but the only way to properly express what is about is with the quote :(.
I've read it, but thhs is not a review; is only a comment Arjona made about the song's political theme. —
Hahc21 03:21, 26 June 2012 (UTC)reply
"It became the third consecutive single of Poquita Ropa not to chart in the United States." I thought that only two of the three single did not chart?
O.o Fixed. Thanks. I leave some mistakes while writing.
"The film was directed by Joaquín Cambre, is co-starred by Arjona himself, Mexican telenovela actress Edith Gonzalez, who also appears on the music video for "Marta", Edgar Vivar, Daniel Arenas, Mimi Morales and Kenny. Poquita Ropa - Una Historia Apasionada was produced in Argentina and Mexico" missing a word
Which one? Sorry but i'm tired and cannot read well :(. I dont' find it
.
Reread The film was directed by Joaquín Cambre, is co-starred by Arjona himself.
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 00:16, 25 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I think i have fixed it :( —
Hahc21 03:21, 26 June 2012 (UTC)reply
The missing word is "the" before "is co-starred".
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 23:41, 27 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Do you mean The film was directed by Joaquín Cambre, the is co-starred by Arjona himself? It doesn't make any sense (to me). —
Hahc21 01:29, 28 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Fixed (slightly different solution). Also trimmed repetition of González info, and cut parts of a quote that unnecessarily promoted HBO.
BlueMoonset (
talk) 14:17, 2 July 2012 (UTC)reply
"The film was directed by Joaquín Cambre, who also directed the music videos for "Puente", "Vida" and "Marta"." you already stated that he is the director in the previous section why keep mentioning it?
Done. Another of my leftovers.
"becoming the his highest entry on that chart." source?
I think it's done. Thanks again! —
Hahc21 03:21, 26 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Note that the sound files need to be fixed; there's a copyright issue raised yesterday about them on the article page because they're of too-high quality.
BlueMoonset (
talk) 14:17, 2 July 2012 (UTC)reply
Thanks Moonset. I will handle them soon, since I have some issues and stuff. Cheers! —
Hahc21 01:51, 3 July 2012 (UTC)reply
I've uploaded 64kbps versions of the samples. —
Hahc21 17:48, 4 July 2012 (UTC)reply
After a 3rd re-read of the article I believe it can pass GA. Great work on another interesting article. Best,
Jonayo!Selena 4 ever 21:51, 4 July 2012 (UTC)reply