"which authorized the Treasury to purchase toxic assets from banks and other financial institutions, and the auto industry bailout" - Link auto industry bailout to
Automotive industry crisis of 2008–10?
"Ryan supports the privatization of social security and Medicare and block granting Medicaid to the states." - Wikilink Medicare on its first usage here. Otherwise, this sentence doesn't read right to me.
"Ryan supported the Medicare Part D prescription drug benefit, and opposes the Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act (ACA), also known as "Obamacare." - No comma necessary after benefit.
"He denied the characterization of his position by interviewer Chuck Todd as "party over country". - Same here (and check throughout the rest of the article).
"In 1995, as the top legislative aide for freshman representative Sam Brownback of Kansas, Ryan helped lead the policy team for a group of conservative freshman representatives who called themselves the New Federalists and advocated shrinking the federal government by eliminating federal government departments, spending cuts, and restructuring entitlement spending." - Can we split this sentence?
"His positions on fiscal policy have included tax cuts, freezes on discretionary spending, cuts to entitlement programs, privatization of social security, Medicare, Medicaid, and education, deregulation, and the elimination of inflation increases in calculating budget baselines." - Same here.
Reworded for clarity; this sentence is a rather long series because it serves as topic sentence to introduce the longest section of the article, fiscal policies, which follows. Thank you.
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"The three budget reform bills were not approved by either the House or Senate and died.[citation needed]" - Tackle this.
"NARAL Pro-Choice America has noted that Ryan has "cast 59 votes" (including procedural motions and amendments which did not have co-sponsors[136]) "on reproductive rights while in Congress and not one has been pro-choice"." - This may be true now, but given that Ryan is an active member of Congress and will conduct more votes, its probably best to put a "through 2017" identifier somewhere.
"which authorized the Treasury to purchase toxic assets from banks and other financial institutions, and the auto industry bailout" - Link auto industry bailout to
Automotive industry crisis of 2008–10?
"Ryan supports the privatization of social security and Medicare and block granting Medicaid to the states." - Wikilink Medicare on its first usage here. Otherwise, this sentence doesn't read right to me.
"Ryan supported the Medicare Part D prescription drug benefit, and opposes the Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act (ACA), also known as "Obamacare." - No comma necessary after benefit.
"He denied the characterization of his position by interviewer Chuck Todd as "party over country". - Same here (and check throughout the rest of the article).
"In 1995, as the top legislative aide for freshman representative Sam Brownback of Kansas, Ryan helped lead the policy team for a group of conservative freshman representatives who called themselves the New Federalists and advocated shrinking the federal government by eliminating federal government departments, spending cuts, and restructuring entitlement spending." - Can we split this sentence?
"His positions on fiscal policy have included tax cuts, freezes on discretionary spending, cuts to entitlement programs, privatization of social security, Medicare, Medicaid, and education, deregulation, and the elimination of inflation increases in calculating budget baselines." - Same here.
Reworded for clarity; this sentence is a rather long series because it serves as topic sentence to introduce the longest section of the article, fiscal policies, which follows. Thank you.
13.54.152.171 (
talk)
19:35, 6 July 2017 (UTC)reply
"The three budget reform bills were not approved by either the House or Senate and died.[citation needed]" - Tackle this.
"NARAL Pro-Choice America has noted that Ryan has "cast 59 votes" (including procedural motions and amendments which did not have co-sponsors[136]) "on reproductive rights while in Congress and not one has been pro-choice"." - This may be true now, but given that Ryan is an active member of Congress and will conduct more votes, its probably best to put a "through 2017" identifier somewhere.