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Abnormalcy333 ( talk) 17:44, 15 November 2022 (UTC)
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Nominator: Abnormalcy333 ( talk · contribs) 17:05, 12 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: IanTEB ( talk · contribs) 13:08, 3 July 2024 (UTC)
Comments with the fox emoji 🦊 come from cross-checking reviewer. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 02:21, 6 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewing this is as part of the July 2024 backlog. This has been awaiting review for a while, so happy to get this to you. Since I fall under unexperienced reviewer (under six reviews) I will need another editor to close this when its done, but I'm hoping that this goes swiftly.
'Pismo-Glava' was first announced as the lead single of Jelena Rozga's third studio album Moderna Žena at the end of November 2016 on Narodni radio" - what source is supporting this?
The song had its exclusive one-time airplay on 2 December on Naxi Radio" - I would change "exclusive one-time airplay" to "one-time airplay" and change the bolded "on" to "via" Done
preceding the album's release by 8 days" - change "8" to "eight" per MOS:NUMERAL Done
A writer for Croatian newspaper Jutarnji list and a writer of the Slovenian website si21.com both described the song as 'wonderful'" - to seperate subjective commentary from the objective description of the composition, I would start this sentence with "Critically,". A personal preference, but I also think "the song was described as 'wonderful' by writers of both the Croatian newspaper Jutarnji list and the Slovenian website si21.com" would flow better Done
recognizable pop sound of the singer" - per WP:ELEVAR, "the singer" should be changed to "[Rozga]" Done
who in a review of the album Moderna Žena- "the album" can be removed since it has already been introduced Done
elegant red night dress" - I would remove "elegant" to sound less POV Done
photographer wearing glasses also appears next to Rozga" - "also" can be removed Done
The singer's fashion style" - as above, change "the singer" to Rozga Done
As of October 2022, the video has garnered over 10 million views on the platform" - primary sources to YouTube for view counts are generally discouraged Done: I removed the sentence altogether.
The singer performed" - change to Rozga per above comments Done
many of the singer's concerts" - change to Rozga Done
is an emotional slow-tempo ballad" - the slow-tempo is not in the body Done
Several music critics praised the song's sound, which they recognized as typical for the singer" - "Several" can be removed. I would also change ", which they recognized as typical for the singer" to "who thought it was in the typical style of Rozga" since the current text could imply they said that a good style was typical. Done
on the singer's official YouTube channel" - change the singer to Rozga Done
shows Rozga lip-syncing to the camera" - the music video section just uses "singing". Movie cameras is also not specified in the body Done
The singer's fashion style" - change to Rozga Done
I know I nagged about a lot of things, but this article is very good; I've put it on hold. I hope you can respond to all my comments. IanTEB ( talk) 13:08, 3 July 2024 (UTC)
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Abnormalcy333 ( talk) 17:44, 15 November 2022 (UTC)
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Reviewing |
Nominator: Abnormalcy333 ( talk · contribs) 17:05, 12 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: IanTEB ( talk · contribs) 13:08, 3 July 2024 (UTC)
Comments with the fox emoji 🦊 come from cross-checking reviewer. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 02:21, 6 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewing this is as part of the July 2024 backlog. This has been awaiting review for a while, so happy to get this to you. Since I fall under unexperienced reviewer (under six reviews) I will need another editor to close this when its done, but I'm hoping that this goes swiftly.
'Pismo-Glava' was first announced as the lead single of Jelena Rozga's third studio album Moderna Žena at the end of November 2016 on Narodni radio" - what source is supporting this?
The song had its exclusive one-time airplay on 2 December on Naxi Radio" - I would change "exclusive one-time airplay" to "one-time airplay" and change the bolded "on" to "via" Done
preceding the album's release by 8 days" - change "8" to "eight" per MOS:NUMERAL Done
A writer for Croatian newspaper Jutarnji list and a writer of the Slovenian website si21.com both described the song as 'wonderful'" - to seperate subjective commentary from the objective description of the composition, I would start this sentence with "Critically,". A personal preference, but I also think "the song was described as 'wonderful' by writers of both the Croatian newspaper Jutarnji list and the Slovenian website si21.com" would flow better Done
recognizable pop sound of the singer" - per WP:ELEVAR, "the singer" should be changed to "[Rozga]" Done
who in a review of the album Moderna Žena- "the album" can be removed since it has already been introduced Done
elegant red night dress" - I would remove "elegant" to sound less POV Done
photographer wearing glasses also appears next to Rozga" - "also" can be removed Done
The singer's fashion style" - as above, change "the singer" to Rozga Done
As of October 2022, the video has garnered over 10 million views on the platform" - primary sources to YouTube for view counts are generally discouraged Done: I removed the sentence altogether.
The singer performed" - change to Rozga per above comments Done
many of the singer's concerts" - change to Rozga Done
is an emotional slow-tempo ballad" - the slow-tempo is not in the body Done
Several music critics praised the song's sound, which they recognized as typical for the singer" - "Several" can be removed. I would also change ", which they recognized as typical for the singer" to "who thought it was in the typical style of Rozga" since the current text could imply they said that a good style was typical. Done
on the singer's official YouTube channel" - change the singer to Rozga Done
shows Rozga lip-syncing to the camera" - the music video section just uses "singing". Movie cameras is also not specified in the body Done
The singer's fashion style" - change to Rozga Done
I know I nagged about a lot of things, but this article is very good; I've put it on hold. I hope you can respond to all my comments. IanTEB ( talk) 13:08, 3 July 2024 (UTC)