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I don't think that this can be defined an american company, but I'm waiting to do the change to see if I misunderstood something. For me it's a Switzerland-based multinational company. — Preceding unsigned comment added by MarioPaolucci ( talk • contribs) 11:22, 6 September 2015 (UTC)
Hi All! I'm Sarah and I work with Philip Morris International. I'm pretty new to editing, but my goal is to make minor edits to numbers and fact-based content, and I look forward to working with other editors to develop future content updates. Please let me know if and when I've made any mistakes and how I can correct them in the future. Thanks a lot! Sarah at PMI ( talk) 15:21, 6 August 2018 (UTC)
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Hello, I am a new editor who has a conflict of interest with this material. I have added the request edit tag, as the following issues I noted are still present. I think the changes I've requested are reasonable, but would be happy to discuss.
Note, "reference 38" is now "reference 41" after revision by others. Thank you,
Sarah at PMI (
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Fix broken link, reference 38 (Our Charitable Giving Program)The link is broken because the website was updated since the current reference was accessed: Current text: The company says that it gives $25 million per year to charitable causes including domestic violence, emergency housing, education, combating poverty and teaching sustainable agriculture techniques in Africa. [1] Proposed text: The company says it contributed nearly USD 30 million in 2017 to causes and programs including education for the underprivelaged, empowering women, and disaster preparedness and relief efforts. [2] Research sectionLanguage here is a bit rough, with potential weasel words (claims, for example). I propose the following changes to that section. This makes the language is more clear, provides a few points of updated information, and yet does not substantially change the section. For the reference tagged as unreliable, I've updated that statement and supported with new references. Also recommend moving the last paragraph in this section. Current text: In 2018, Philip Morris will focusing their next investment of 290 million euro with the start of building a new manufacturing in Dresden (Germany) to produce tobacco sticks (cigarettes) for iQOS. [4] unreliable source? Responding to Philip Morris starting the Foundation for a Smoke-Free World in 2017, the American Cancer Society stated, "This attempt by Philip Morris International to paint itself as a public health partner is manipulative and dangerous. It is a new twist out of the tobacco industry’s deadly playbook, but nobody should be fooled. It’s a continuation of a decades-long effort to paint over tobacco’s role in spreading death and misery around the globe." [5] Proposed text: -->I don't have changes to the paragraph that begins "Responding to Philip Morris stating…" However, it contains no information about the company's research, nor on independent research. It talks instead about the critical response to the creation of the Foundation for a Smoke-Free World. This is why I recommend moving that part to the controversy section. References
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I don't think that this can be defined an american company, but I'm waiting to do the change to see if I misunderstood something. For me it's a Switzerland-based multinational company. — Preceding unsigned comment added by MarioPaolucci ( talk • contribs) 11:22, 6 September 2015 (UTC)
Hi All! I'm Sarah and I work with Philip Morris International. I'm pretty new to editing, but my goal is to make minor edits to numbers and fact-based content, and I look forward to working with other editors to develop future content updates. Please let me know if and when I've made any mistakes and how I can correct them in the future. Thanks a lot! Sarah at PMI ( talk) 15:21, 6 August 2018 (UTC)
This edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest was declined. The requested text's references are not formatted according to the citation style predominantly in use with the subject article ( WP:CITEVAR). Any additions made to the article must have references formatted according to the style already in use with the article. Please see the Reply section below for more information about this issue. |
Hello, I am a new editor who has a conflict of interest with this material. I have added the request edit tag, as the following issues I noted are still present. I think the changes I've requested are reasonable, but would be happy to discuss.
Note, "reference 38" is now "reference 41" after revision by others. Thank you,
Sarah at PMI (
talk) 16:50, 28 November 2018 (UTC)
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Fix broken link, reference 38 (Our Charitable Giving Program)The link is broken because the website was updated since the current reference was accessed: Current text: The company says that it gives $25 million per year to charitable causes including domestic violence, emergency housing, education, combating poverty and teaching sustainable agriculture techniques in Africa. [1] Proposed text: The company says it contributed nearly USD 30 million in 2017 to causes and programs including education for the underprivelaged, empowering women, and disaster preparedness and relief efforts. [2] Research sectionLanguage here is a bit rough, with potential weasel words (claims, for example). I propose the following changes to that section. This makes the language is more clear, provides a few points of updated information, and yet does not substantially change the section. For the reference tagged as unreliable, I've updated that statement and supported with new references. Also recommend moving the last paragraph in this section. Current text: In 2018, Philip Morris will focusing their next investment of 290 million euro with the start of building a new manufacturing in Dresden (Germany) to produce tobacco sticks (cigarettes) for iQOS. [4] unreliable source? Responding to Philip Morris starting the Foundation for a Smoke-Free World in 2017, the American Cancer Society stated, "This attempt by Philip Morris International to paint itself as a public health partner is manipulative and dangerous. It is a new twist out of the tobacco industry’s deadly playbook, but nobody should be fooled. It’s a continuation of a decades-long effort to paint over tobacco’s role in spreading death and misery around the globe." [5] Proposed text: -->I don't have changes to the paragraph that begins "Responding to Philip Morris stating…" However, it contains no information about the company's research, nor on independent research. It talks instead about the critical response to the creation of the Foundation for a Smoke-Free World. This is why I recommend moving that part to the controversy section. References
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In the extended section below titled Citation style, I have illustrated two examples: one showing how the edit request was submitted, and another showing how requests should be submitted in the future:
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In the example above the references have been formatted according to Citation Style 1, which shows the author, the source's name, date, etc., all information which is lost when only the links are provided. As Wikipedia is a volunteer project, larger edit requests such yours are generally expected to have this formatting done before the request is submitted for review. |
Kindly rewrite your edit request so that it aligns more with the second example shown in the collapsed section above, and feel free to re-submit that edit request at your earliest convenience. If you have any questions about this formatting please don't hesitate to ask myself or another editor. Regards, Spintendo 19:08, 28 November 2018 (UTC)
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It is normal practice to defer to the style used by the first major contributor or adopted by the consensus of editors already working on the page, unless a change in consensus has been achieved. If the article you are editing is already using a particular citation style, you should follow it.
Part of an edit requested by an editor with a conflict of interest has been implemented. Please see the reply section below for additional information about this request. |
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tag has too many names (see the
help page).References
Sarah at PMI ( talk) 11:09, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
Below you will see where proposals from your request have been quoted with reviewer decisions and feedback inserted underneath, either accepting, declining or otherwise commenting upon your proposal(s). Please read the enclosed notes within the proposal review section below for information on each request.
Spintendo 12:10, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
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