I have one initial point: the lead should provide a more useful summary per
WP:LEAD. Examine each section of the career and early life in turn, then think carefully about merging them.
The article needs a thorough copyedit. Sentences that start "And indeed," are unencyclopedic; grammar (and capitalisation) is off throughout:
refs without spaces after them;
refs with spaces before them ("success, [18]")
hyphens where dashes are intended;
missing words ("Minister of Planning of the Castelo Branco dictatorial government Roberto Campos")
at least one spaced
em-dash("—") when unspaced or an en-dash is intended;
incorrect sentence formation "Something he expressed in a mix of pro-Americanism and Left radicalism."
References should use at least partially consistent notation, eg. "p" or "pg" or "page" but not all three (and sometimes without).
Please renominate when these issues have been addressed - there is no minimum period for good faith nominations. You may find it helpful to place request at teh Guild of Copyeditors (
here). Grandiose(
me,
talk,
contribs) 20:36, 21 December 2011 (UTC)reply
I have done some, but rather awkward translations of some Portuguese sources leave some of the content somewhat obscure. Perhaps a Portuguese-speaking translator might be of help in providing closer renditions?
Rumiton (
talk)
15:15, 27 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I have made a request for further copy editing. I would only add that some of the obscurities you found come, I'm afraid, from Francis's intentional obscurity, which was a trademark for his very particular brand of literary journalism
Cerme (
talk)
16:46, 30 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I have one initial point: the lead should provide a more useful summary per
WP:LEAD. Examine each section of the career and early life in turn, then think carefully about merging them.
The article needs a thorough copyedit. Sentences that start "And indeed," are unencyclopedic; grammar (and capitalisation) is off throughout:
refs without spaces after them;
refs with spaces before them ("success, [18]")
hyphens where dashes are intended;
missing words ("Minister of Planning of the Castelo Branco dictatorial government Roberto Campos")
at least one spaced
em-dash("—") when unspaced or an en-dash is intended;
incorrect sentence formation "Something he expressed in a mix of pro-Americanism and Left radicalism."
References should use at least partially consistent notation, eg. "p" or "pg" or "page" but not all three (and sometimes without).
Please renominate when these issues have been addressed - there is no minimum period for good faith nominations. You may find it helpful to place request at teh Guild of Copyeditors (
here). Grandiose(
me,
talk,
contribs) 20:36, 21 December 2011 (UTC)reply
I have done some, but rather awkward translations of some Portuguese sources leave some of the content somewhat obscure. Perhaps a Portuguese-speaking translator might be of help in providing closer renditions?
Rumiton (
talk)
15:15, 27 June 2012 (UTC)reply
I have made a request for further copy editing. I would only add that some of the obscurities you found come, I'm afraid, from Francis's intentional obscurity, which was a trademark for his very particular brand of literary journalism
Cerme (
talk)
16:46, 30 June 2012 (UTC)reply