"He made his debut in the independent circuit on 7 April 2000, competing in promotions throughout Texas." - his debut involved him competing in multiple promotions on the one day? Reword, I think.
"London made his debut in Ring of Honor (ROH)" - he went from studying at Texas Uni to appearing on ROH? There must be something in between (how'd they choose him (or however it works))?
which led to both London and Shane brawling" - brawling implies them fighting against each other?If so remove the "both". If not, then I have no idea what it's saying...
"London competed in ZERO1 for several months, beginning in January 2003, before turning down a contract." - a bit confusing; wouldn't he have needed a contract to compete in the first place?
In the universe of pro wrestling, wrestlers can compete for promotions in
dark matches (or try-outs) without contracts. I read the source, it stated that Zero-one is a japan promotion, and japanese promotions call wrestlers from North America to wrestle for their promotion without a contract, so when he wrestled a couple of shows, they were impressed and offered him a contract, which he turned down.--SRX--LatinoHeat18:34, 2 July 2008 (UTC)reply
"On 2 February 2007, London and Kendrick suffered a non-title loss to the rookie team Deuce 'n Domino.[58] In a title rematch at No Way Out, however, London and Kendrick retained the championship - sounds awkward to name them twice in two sentences... perhaps reword to "however, they regained..." or something like that?
It seems like a blog site, but It doesn't seem like anyone can edit it, only established personnel. So it seems okay. Plus it is a Q&A.
WP:SPS - is there any way of confirming that "James A." is reliable and didn't (say) make up the entire thing? That's the main issue. —Giggy08:25, 3 July 2008 (UTC)reply
Well, the reference is used to say that he worked at Urban Outfitters and that his brother is a music video director. Could we leave that info out? I can replace the brother one with
this if it's considered reliable. Also, on a side note, is
this reliable? It mentions how he began working for TNA in it. ♥
Nici♥
Vampire♥
Heart♥
15:16, 3 July 2008 (UTC)reply
The 411mania site should be fine per
this. Not so sure about the other one but I'll let it go as it's probably only a minor deal. Passing now, —Giggy00:07, 4 July 2008 (UTC)reply
"He made his debut in the independent circuit on 7 April 2000, competing in promotions throughout Texas." - his debut involved him competing in multiple promotions on the one day? Reword, I think.
"London made his debut in Ring of Honor (ROH)" - he went from studying at Texas Uni to appearing on ROH? There must be something in between (how'd they choose him (or however it works))?
which led to both London and Shane brawling" - brawling implies them fighting against each other?If so remove the "both". If not, then I have no idea what it's saying...
"London competed in ZERO1 for several months, beginning in January 2003, before turning down a contract." - a bit confusing; wouldn't he have needed a contract to compete in the first place?
In the universe of pro wrestling, wrestlers can compete for promotions in
dark matches (or try-outs) without contracts. I read the source, it stated that Zero-one is a japan promotion, and japanese promotions call wrestlers from North America to wrestle for their promotion without a contract, so when he wrestled a couple of shows, they were impressed and offered him a contract, which he turned down.--SRX--LatinoHeat18:34, 2 July 2008 (UTC)reply
"On 2 February 2007, London and Kendrick suffered a non-title loss to the rookie team Deuce 'n Domino.[58] In a title rematch at No Way Out, however, London and Kendrick retained the championship - sounds awkward to name them twice in two sentences... perhaps reword to "however, they regained..." or something like that?
It seems like a blog site, but It doesn't seem like anyone can edit it, only established personnel. So it seems okay. Plus it is a Q&A.
WP:SPS - is there any way of confirming that "James A." is reliable and didn't (say) make up the entire thing? That's the main issue. —Giggy08:25, 3 July 2008 (UTC)reply
Well, the reference is used to say that he worked at Urban Outfitters and that his brother is a music video director. Could we leave that info out? I can replace the brother one with
this if it's considered reliable. Also, on a side note, is
this reliable? It mentions how he began working for TNA in it. ♥
Nici♥
Vampire♥
Heart♥
15:16, 3 July 2008 (UTC)reply
The 411mania site should be fine per
this. Not so sure about the other one but I'll let it go as it's probably only a minor deal. Passing now, —Giggy00:07, 4 July 2008 (UTC)reply