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Reviewer: Bilorv ( talk · contribs) 09:24, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
I'll start reviewing this now. — Bilorv (talk) (c) (e) 09:24, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
|alt
parameters aren't required by GA criteria, but I think it would nice to include it anyway (e.g. |alt=A smiling pink starfish wearing green trunks
).
|relatives
. I'm not sure any of the relatives listed in the infobox are essential to understanding Patrick; I suppose one could make a case for Herb and Margie, but the others all seem to be collections of trivia (or
fancruft, to put it harshly) from various episodes. In my opinion, the only important relationship to understanding Patrick is his relationship with Spongebob, and maybe Squidward. If they don't get a place in the infobox, neither should Patar. Possibly, these characters could be mentioned in the "Role in Spongebob Squarepants" or "Reception" section if they've got significant coverage anywhere.
|lbl21
and |data21
), which could be used to put a "Friends" heading and "SpongeBob" in there, but I'm not sure it should. Either way, I still don't think that Patrick's relatives should be listed there.
He holds no form of occupation except for several very brief stints...
— There are two episodes sourced for this. "Several", to me, indicates at least four or five. If there are more episodes where he has held these positions (which strikes me as reasonably likely), they need to be mentioned here as well (you could perhaps include a bullet pointed list of every relevant episode inside a reference, to save space).
For the show's characters, Hillenburg started to draw and used character designs from his comic book——including starfish, crab, and sponge.[16] He described Patrick as "probably the dumbest guy in town".[25] Patrick was conceived as a starfish to embody the animal's nature: according to Hillenburg, starfish look "dumb and slow", but they are "very active and aggressive" in reality, like Patrick.[26]
...writing
its pilot episode in 1997...
— I think "its" should be outside the link.
The cast members record as a whole cast, which Fagerbakke describes, "It works so much better."
— The grammar here doesn't quite make sense.
I'll carry on with the review soon. — Bilorv (talk) (c) (e) 10:56, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
"The episodes included [
sic] are hilarious..."
— I could be missing something obvious, but what's the point of the "[
sic]" here?
its 2014 ceremony
).
Hillenburg responded about the SpongeBob's sexual orientation, saying SpongeBob is "[a] cheerful character [but] is not gay."
— This seems like it would fit in
SpongeBob SquarePants (character), but not here.
"win the biggest costume contest.".[60][60]
includes both two periods and two of the same reference; remove one of each.
fictional character
is a bit of an
excessive link.
Patrick is unemployed and a self-proclaimed expert in the "art of doing nothing"[1].
its 2015 sequel
should not be linked.
Okay, I'm putting this article on hold for seven days. As it stands, the article has some prose issues, doesn't fully follow MOS:LEAD, contains some irrelevant detail [about SpongeBob] and utilises potentially unreliable sources. I cannot pass the article for GA until these issues are fixed. — Bilorv (talk) (c) (e) 13:36, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Bilorv ( talk · contribs) 09:24, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
I'll start reviewing this now. — Bilorv (talk) (c) (e) 09:24, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
|alt
parameters aren't required by GA criteria, but I think it would nice to include it anyway (e.g. |alt=A smiling pink starfish wearing green trunks
).
|relatives
. I'm not sure any of the relatives listed in the infobox are essential to understanding Patrick; I suppose one could make a case for Herb and Margie, but the others all seem to be collections of trivia (or
fancruft, to put it harshly) from various episodes. In my opinion, the only important relationship to understanding Patrick is his relationship with Spongebob, and maybe Squidward. If they don't get a place in the infobox, neither should Patar. Possibly, these characters could be mentioned in the "Role in Spongebob Squarepants" or "Reception" section if they've got significant coverage anywhere.
|lbl21
and |data21
), which could be used to put a "Friends" heading and "SpongeBob" in there, but I'm not sure it should. Either way, I still don't think that Patrick's relatives should be listed there.
He holds no form of occupation except for several very brief stints...
— There are two episodes sourced for this. "Several", to me, indicates at least four or five. If there are more episodes where he has held these positions (which strikes me as reasonably likely), they need to be mentioned here as well (you could perhaps include a bullet pointed list of every relevant episode inside a reference, to save space).
For the show's characters, Hillenburg started to draw and used character designs from his comic book——including starfish, crab, and sponge.[16] He described Patrick as "probably the dumbest guy in town".[25] Patrick was conceived as a starfish to embody the animal's nature: according to Hillenburg, starfish look "dumb and slow", but they are "very active and aggressive" in reality, like Patrick.[26]
...writing
its pilot episode in 1997...
— I think "its" should be outside the link.
The cast members record as a whole cast, which Fagerbakke describes, "It works so much better."
— The grammar here doesn't quite make sense.
I'll carry on with the review soon. — Bilorv (talk) (c) (e) 10:56, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
"The episodes included [
sic] are hilarious..."
— I could be missing something obvious, but what's the point of the "[
sic]" here?
its 2014 ceremony
).
Hillenburg responded about the SpongeBob's sexual orientation, saying SpongeBob is "[a] cheerful character [but] is not gay."
— This seems like it would fit in
SpongeBob SquarePants (character), but not here.
"win the biggest costume contest.".[60][60]
includes both two periods and two of the same reference; remove one of each.
fictional character
is a bit of an
excessive link.
Patrick is unemployed and a self-proclaimed expert in the "art of doing nothing"[1].
its 2015 sequel
should not be linked.
Okay, I'm putting this article on hold for seven days. As it stands, the article has some prose issues, doesn't fully follow MOS:LEAD, contains some irrelevant detail [about SpongeBob] and utilises potentially unreliable sources. I cannot pass the article for GA until these issues are fixed. — Bilorv (talk) (c) (e) 13:36, 1 July 2015 (UTC)