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Reviewer: The person who loves reading ( talk · contribs) 15:18, 10 May 2023 (UTC)
The review will be finished within a month. (a little busy) The person who loves reading ( talk) 15:28, 10 May 2023 (UTC)
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The station consists of two island platforms in a two floor configuration which are connected to street level via two underground concourses."two floor" --> "two-floor"
The station is fully accesible as there are lifts linking the two concourses with both the platforms and street level."accesible" --> "accessible"
Parliament station opening in 1983 with the station being being named after the Parliament of Victoria which is located just east of the station.change to "Parliament station opened in 1983, and the station was named after the Parliament of Victoria which is located just east of the station."
Parliament station is one of the three underground stations in the City Loop which served by eleven lines organised into four groups."which served" --> "which is served"
The station is also served by two tram routes on Bourke Street, four tram routes on Macarthur street and one tram route on Spring Street"Macarthur street" --> "Macarthur Street"
The station is also served by two tram routes on Bourke Street, four tram routes on Macarthur street and one tram route on Spring Street, The journey to Flinders Street railway station is approximately 4.2 kilometres (2.6 mi) and takes 7 minutes by train." Spring Street, The" --> " Spring Street. The"
Parliament station consists of a two island platforms in a two level configuration."a two" --> "two" "two level" --> "two-level"
In additon to the two platform levels there is also two underground concourses."additon" --> "addition" "levels there is" --> "levels, there are"
The northern concourse is connected to street level via an exit on Lonsdale Street where as the southern concourse is connected to street level via an exit on Macarthur Street and two exits on Spring Street."where as" --> "whereas"
Melbourne Underground Rail Loop Authority (MURLA) was formed in 1971 to oversee construction of the brand new City Loop."oversee construction" --> "oversee the construction" "brand new" --> "brand-new"
The plan included construction of three underground stations including Parliament station."construction" --> "the construction"
Each platform is an individual tunnel, and is linked to the other platforms at the same level by a number of cross tunnels."tunnel," --> "tunnel" "a number of" --> "many"
In 31 January 2021 a major timetable rewrite was done to allow for the operation of High Capacity Metro Train as well as more frequent services on both the Nothern and Caulfield Groups."In 31 January 2021 a major" --> "On 31 January 2021, a major" "of High Capacity Metro Train" --> "of the High Capacity Metro Train"
This included removal of Frankston, Sandringham and Werribee lines from the City Loop."removal" --> "the removal"
The Frankston line however will return to the City Loop in 2025, once the Metro Tunnel is opened."line however" --> "line, however,"
In 2022 works had been complete for the first stage which the installment of a new intruder alarm system.change to "In 2022, work had been completed for the first stage which was the installment of a new intruder alarm system."
On 6 February 2023 early works had commenced for stage 2 at Parliament station and are expected to be complete by late 2023.change to "On 6 February 2023, early works commenced for stage 2 at Parliament station and are expected to be complete by late 2023."
Replacing existing celling pannelschange to "Replacing existing ceiling panels"
Parliament station is currently served by 11 lines which are seperated into 11 groups and are operated by Metro Trains Melbourne."seperated" --> "separated"
Services operate counter clockwise through the City Loop, first travelling towards Flinders Street before travelling together towards Dandenong where the line splits into two."counter clockwise" --> "counterclockwise"
Services on both lines run express between South Yarra and Caulfield ( Malvern during off-peak)."run express" --> "run the express"
Services patterns alternate during the day between clockwise and counter clockwise operations."Services" --> "Service" "counter clockwise" --> "counterclockwise"
Service patterns alternate during the day between clockwise and counter clockwise operations."counter clockwise" --> "counterclockwise"
Route 35 serves the tram stop on Spring Street, route 86 and 96 serve the tram stop on Bourke Street and routes 11, 12, 48 and 109 serve the tram stop on Macarthur Street."route 86 and 96" --> "routes 86 and 96"
The station consists of two island platforms in a two-floor configuration which are connected to street level via two underground concourses.change to "The station has two island platforms in a two-floor configuration connected to street level via two underground concourses."
Each platform is an individual tunnel, and is linked to the other platforms at the same level by several cross tunnels."tunnel," --> "tunnel"
Does "Parliament station" need to be changed to "Parliament Station"? The person who loves reading ( talk) 04:06, 11 May 2023 (UTC)
Request second opinion: I'll not edit Wikipedia for a long time. Can someone review the rest? The person who loves reading ( talk) 14:11, 26 May 2023 (UTC)
I'll review this article. — Golden talk 20:03, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
The station is fully accessible- What does this mean? How can a station not be accessible?
In 1971, the Melbourne Underground Rail Loop Authority was formed. During this time, three new underground stations, including Parliament, were said to be built.- This is irrelevant for the lead. I suggest you remove it.
Parliament station opened in 1983, and the station was named- Suggest changing this to "Parliament station opened in 1983, and it was named" to avoid three "station"s in one sentence.
During the station's construction, the platforms were built through tunneling.- Suggest changing this to "Platforms of the station were built through tunneling." to avoid three "the station"s in one sentence.
it was the longest escalator-> "it had the longest escalator"
The journey to Flinders Street railway station is approximately 4.2 kilometres (2.6 mi) and takes 7 minutes by train.- Why is this relevant to Parliament station?
Victoria 3000- What does 3000 refer to? Is it the address? Also, I don't think it's necessary to list Victoria and Australia after Melbourne. Instead, you could write Melbourne, Australia
The station is approximately 4.3 kilometres (2.7 mi), or around a 7-minute train journey, from Flinders Street.- Why is Flinders Street important enough to mention its proximity to Parliament Station? Why aren't other streets/stations mentioned instead?
Parliament station currently- Suggest changing this to "The station currently" to avoid having three consecutive paragraphs that begin with "Parliament [railway] station".
The station is fully accessible as there are lifts linking the concourse with both the platforms and street level.- Again, aren't all stations fully accessible? The way it's currently written, it seems like Parliament Station is unique in this regard.
responsible in the construction-> "responsible for the construction"
Melbourne Underground Rail Loop Authority (MURLA) was formed in 1971 to oversee the construction of the brand-new City Loop. The plan included the construction of three underground stations including Parliament station.- You can change the sentence structure here to shift the focus onto Parliament station: "Parliament station was one of three underground stations included in the construction plan of the new City Loop, overseen by the Melbourne Underground Rail Loop Authority (MURLA) formed in 1971".
but it has since been surpassed- Do we know when it was surpassed?
The Frankston line, however, will return to the City Loop in 2025, once the Metro Tunnel is opened.- We can't predict the future. I suggest adding "planned to" or something similar, as well as specifying who is planning to do this. The sentence could look something like this: "The Frankston line, however, is planned by [insert name] to return to the City Loop in 2025, once the Metro Tunnel is opened."
In 31 January 2021-> "On 31 January 2021"
In 2022 and early 2023 works had begun to upgrade safety features at the three city loop stations. In 2022, work had been completed for the first stage which was the installment of a new intruder alarm system.- Does this include Parliament Station? If so, no changes are needed.
On 6 February 2023, early works commenced for stage 2 at Parliament station and are expected to be complete by late 2023.- Expected by whom?
Parliament station is currently served by 11 lines- Replace "currently" with something else per MOS:CURRENTLY.
Services clockwise through the City Loop, first stopping at Jolimont and then travelling together until Clifton Hill where the line splits into two.- A word is missing in this sentence.
From 2025 onwards, the Cranbourne and Pakenham lines would be removed from the City Loop and will instead be rerouted through the Metro Tunnel. As a result services on the Frankston line will serve the loop instead.- Same as previous points. "Planned to"/"Expected to" etc. and clarify by whom.
From 2025 onwards, the Sunbury line would be removed from the City Loop and will instead be rerouted through the Metro Tunnel- Same as above.
As a result services-> "As a result, services"
Parliament station is owned by VicTrackwithout a source. — Golden talk 18:10, 23 August 2023 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: The person who loves reading ( talk · contribs) 15:18, 10 May 2023 (UTC)
The review will be finished within a month. (a little busy) The person who loves reading ( talk) 15:28, 10 May 2023 (UTC)
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
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The station consists of two island platforms in a two floor configuration which are connected to street level via two underground concourses."two floor" --> "two-floor"
The station is fully accesible as there are lifts linking the two concourses with both the platforms and street level."accesible" --> "accessible"
Parliament station opening in 1983 with the station being being named after the Parliament of Victoria which is located just east of the station.change to "Parliament station opened in 1983, and the station was named after the Parliament of Victoria which is located just east of the station."
Parliament station is one of the three underground stations in the City Loop which served by eleven lines organised into four groups."which served" --> "which is served"
The station is also served by two tram routes on Bourke Street, four tram routes on Macarthur street and one tram route on Spring Street"Macarthur street" --> "Macarthur Street"
The station is also served by two tram routes on Bourke Street, four tram routes on Macarthur street and one tram route on Spring Street, The journey to Flinders Street railway station is approximately 4.2 kilometres (2.6 mi) and takes 7 minutes by train." Spring Street, The" --> " Spring Street. The"
Parliament station consists of a two island platforms in a two level configuration."a two" --> "two" "two level" --> "two-level"
In additon to the two platform levels there is also two underground concourses."additon" --> "addition" "levels there is" --> "levels, there are"
The northern concourse is connected to street level via an exit on Lonsdale Street where as the southern concourse is connected to street level via an exit on Macarthur Street and two exits on Spring Street."where as" --> "whereas"
Melbourne Underground Rail Loop Authority (MURLA) was formed in 1971 to oversee construction of the brand new City Loop."oversee construction" --> "oversee the construction" "brand new" --> "brand-new"
The plan included construction of three underground stations including Parliament station."construction" --> "the construction"
Each platform is an individual tunnel, and is linked to the other platforms at the same level by a number of cross tunnels."tunnel," --> "tunnel" "a number of" --> "many"
In 31 January 2021 a major timetable rewrite was done to allow for the operation of High Capacity Metro Train as well as more frequent services on both the Nothern and Caulfield Groups."In 31 January 2021 a major" --> "On 31 January 2021, a major" "of High Capacity Metro Train" --> "of the High Capacity Metro Train"
This included removal of Frankston, Sandringham and Werribee lines from the City Loop."removal" --> "the removal"
The Frankston line however will return to the City Loop in 2025, once the Metro Tunnel is opened."line however" --> "line, however,"
In 2022 works had been complete for the first stage which the installment of a new intruder alarm system.change to "In 2022, work had been completed for the first stage which was the installment of a new intruder alarm system."
On 6 February 2023 early works had commenced for stage 2 at Parliament station and are expected to be complete by late 2023.change to "On 6 February 2023, early works commenced for stage 2 at Parliament station and are expected to be complete by late 2023."
Replacing existing celling pannelschange to "Replacing existing ceiling panels"
Parliament station is currently served by 11 lines which are seperated into 11 groups and are operated by Metro Trains Melbourne."seperated" --> "separated"
Services operate counter clockwise through the City Loop, first travelling towards Flinders Street before travelling together towards Dandenong where the line splits into two."counter clockwise" --> "counterclockwise"
Services on both lines run express between South Yarra and Caulfield ( Malvern during off-peak)."run express" --> "run the express"
Services patterns alternate during the day between clockwise and counter clockwise operations."Services" --> "Service" "counter clockwise" --> "counterclockwise"
Service patterns alternate during the day between clockwise and counter clockwise operations."counter clockwise" --> "counterclockwise"
Route 35 serves the tram stop on Spring Street, route 86 and 96 serve the tram stop on Bourke Street and routes 11, 12, 48 and 109 serve the tram stop on Macarthur Street."route 86 and 96" --> "routes 86 and 96"
The station consists of two island platforms in a two-floor configuration which are connected to street level via two underground concourses.change to "The station has two island platforms in a two-floor configuration connected to street level via two underground concourses."
Each platform is an individual tunnel, and is linked to the other platforms at the same level by several cross tunnels."tunnel," --> "tunnel"
Does "Parliament station" need to be changed to "Parliament Station"? The person who loves reading ( talk) 04:06, 11 May 2023 (UTC)
Request second opinion: I'll not edit Wikipedia for a long time. Can someone review the rest? The person who loves reading ( talk) 14:11, 26 May 2023 (UTC)
I'll review this article. — Golden talk 20:03, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
The station is fully accessible- What does this mean? How can a station not be accessible?
In 1971, the Melbourne Underground Rail Loop Authority was formed. During this time, three new underground stations, including Parliament, were said to be built.- This is irrelevant for the lead. I suggest you remove it.
Parliament station opened in 1983, and the station was named- Suggest changing this to "Parliament station opened in 1983, and it was named" to avoid three "station"s in one sentence.
During the station's construction, the platforms were built through tunneling.- Suggest changing this to "Platforms of the station were built through tunneling." to avoid three "the station"s in one sentence.
it was the longest escalator-> "it had the longest escalator"
The journey to Flinders Street railway station is approximately 4.2 kilometres (2.6 mi) and takes 7 minutes by train.- Why is this relevant to Parliament station?
Victoria 3000- What does 3000 refer to? Is it the address? Also, I don't think it's necessary to list Victoria and Australia after Melbourne. Instead, you could write Melbourne, Australia
The station is approximately 4.3 kilometres (2.7 mi), or around a 7-minute train journey, from Flinders Street.- Why is Flinders Street important enough to mention its proximity to Parliament Station? Why aren't other streets/stations mentioned instead?
Parliament station currently- Suggest changing this to "The station currently" to avoid having three consecutive paragraphs that begin with "Parliament [railway] station".
The station is fully accessible as there are lifts linking the concourse with both the platforms and street level.- Again, aren't all stations fully accessible? The way it's currently written, it seems like Parliament Station is unique in this regard.
responsible in the construction-> "responsible for the construction"
Melbourne Underground Rail Loop Authority (MURLA) was formed in 1971 to oversee the construction of the brand-new City Loop. The plan included the construction of three underground stations including Parliament station.- You can change the sentence structure here to shift the focus onto Parliament station: "Parliament station was one of three underground stations included in the construction plan of the new City Loop, overseen by the Melbourne Underground Rail Loop Authority (MURLA) formed in 1971".
but it has since been surpassed- Do we know when it was surpassed?
The Frankston line, however, will return to the City Loop in 2025, once the Metro Tunnel is opened.- We can't predict the future. I suggest adding "planned to" or something similar, as well as specifying who is planning to do this. The sentence could look something like this: "The Frankston line, however, is planned by [insert name] to return to the City Loop in 2025, once the Metro Tunnel is opened."
In 31 January 2021-> "On 31 January 2021"
In 2022 and early 2023 works had begun to upgrade safety features at the three city loop stations. In 2022, work had been completed for the first stage which was the installment of a new intruder alarm system.- Does this include Parliament Station? If so, no changes are needed.
On 6 February 2023, early works commenced for stage 2 at Parliament station and are expected to be complete by late 2023.- Expected by whom?
Parliament station is currently served by 11 lines- Replace "currently" with something else per MOS:CURRENTLY.
Services clockwise through the City Loop, first stopping at Jolimont and then travelling together until Clifton Hill where the line splits into two.- A word is missing in this sentence.
From 2025 onwards, the Cranbourne and Pakenham lines would be removed from the City Loop and will instead be rerouted through the Metro Tunnel. As a result services on the Frankston line will serve the loop instead.- Same as previous points. "Planned to"/"Expected to" etc. and clarify by whom.
From 2025 onwards, the Sunbury line would be removed from the City Loop and will instead be rerouted through the Metro Tunnel- Same as above.
As a result services-> "As a result, services"
Parliament station is owned by VicTrackwithout a source. — Golden talk 18:10, 23 August 2023 (UTC)