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Reviewer: Kusma ( talk · contribs) 06:50, 2 June 2022 (UTC)
Will review this one. Expect comments within a few days. — Kusma ( talk) 06:50, 2 June 2022 (UTC)
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Not far from GA I think. — Kusma ( talk) 22:10, 3 June 2022 (UTC)
"H"-shaped: Just H-shaped looks better to me (and common on Google). The shape is an H, no need for scare quotes.
facadelooks so much better with ç, but Merriam-Webster say your form is more common in AmEng.
Isidore Zimmer, Samuel Resnick, and Frank Locker developed the hotel from 1927 to 1928. The property went into foreclosure shortly after its completionCould you make it more explicit that the hotel was completed in 1928?
The Paramount became popular after Billy Rose's Diamond Horseshoe (now Sony Hall) opened in the basement in 1938.Could you give a short gloss what the Diamond Horseshoe is? The name makes it sound like a casino.
Two large store buildings were nearby, and there was also a small hotel across the street from the Paramount's site.not sure this really is useful information
"H"-shaped.
Along the north elevation (facing 47th Street), the lowest ten stories are obscured by neighboring buildings such as the Brooks Atkinson Theatre, though the 11th through 19th stories are visible.Visible from where? I didn't really understand what the sentence means until I looked at 3D view on Google Maps. And it does seem to me that the lower stories are visible if you stand between the buildings.
facade is generally made of brick, stone, and terracottawhy "generally"? Source 11 didn't work for me (so I could't check its reliability) and Source 12 delighted me by spelling it façade :)
Enough for today, more tomorrow. — Kusma ( talk) 23:14, 2 June 2022 (UTC)
decorated with marble and artlooks like exactly, and I couldn't access the source. I assume ProQuest's headline is an OCR error and it was not actually sold to Hitler in 1945?? If it was, I'd like to see that in the article ;)
custom lamps ... was solddecide on singular or plural
235-241 West 46th Streetshould that be an endash per MOS:DASH? You could also just say "these four lots" and avoid to be overly repetitive with 235s.
remained empty... remained emptyrepetitive.
the Diamond Horseshoe entertainment venueso this is a new venue, also named Diamond Horseshoe? Is the photo of the diamond horseshoe sign related to the first Diamond Horseshoe or to the second Diamond Horseshoe? Please clarify in the caption.
RFR closed ... and he discontinuedRFR isn't a "he".
Well researched and well written overall, I don't really have a lot of comments compared to the length of the article. Nice work! At your current rate, how many years until you're done with all NYC landmarks? — Kusma ( talk) 22:03, 3 June 2022 (UTC)
The lobby is redecorated with stuccoas I don't think that's how the verb "redecorate" is used. But you can convince me if I'm wrong... — Kusma ( talk) 19:18, 5 June 2022 (UTC)
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Will review this one. Expect comments within a few days. — Kusma ( talk) 06:50, 2 June 2022 (UTC)
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Not far from GA I think. — Kusma ( talk) 22:10, 3 June 2022 (UTC)
"H"-shaped: Just H-shaped looks better to me (and common on Google). The shape is an H, no need for scare quotes.
facadelooks so much better with ç, but Merriam-Webster say your form is more common in AmEng.
Isidore Zimmer, Samuel Resnick, and Frank Locker developed the hotel from 1927 to 1928. The property went into foreclosure shortly after its completionCould you make it more explicit that the hotel was completed in 1928?
The Paramount became popular after Billy Rose's Diamond Horseshoe (now Sony Hall) opened in the basement in 1938.Could you give a short gloss what the Diamond Horseshoe is? The name makes it sound like a casino.
Two large store buildings were nearby, and there was also a small hotel across the street from the Paramount's site.not sure this really is useful information
"H"-shaped.
Along the north elevation (facing 47th Street), the lowest ten stories are obscured by neighboring buildings such as the Brooks Atkinson Theatre, though the 11th through 19th stories are visible.Visible from where? I didn't really understand what the sentence means until I looked at 3D view on Google Maps. And it does seem to me that the lower stories are visible if you stand between the buildings.
facade is generally made of brick, stone, and terracottawhy "generally"? Source 11 didn't work for me (so I could't check its reliability) and Source 12 delighted me by spelling it façade :)
Enough for today, more tomorrow. — Kusma ( talk) 23:14, 2 June 2022 (UTC)
decorated with marble and artlooks like exactly, and I couldn't access the source. I assume ProQuest's headline is an OCR error and it was not actually sold to Hitler in 1945?? If it was, I'd like to see that in the article ;)
custom lamps ... was solddecide on singular or plural
235-241 West 46th Streetshould that be an endash per MOS:DASH? You could also just say "these four lots" and avoid to be overly repetitive with 235s.
remained empty... remained emptyrepetitive.
the Diamond Horseshoe entertainment venueso this is a new venue, also named Diamond Horseshoe? Is the photo of the diamond horseshoe sign related to the first Diamond Horseshoe or to the second Diamond Horseshoe? Please clarify in the caption.
RFR closed ... and he discontinuedRFR isn't a "he".
Well researched and well written overall, I don't really have a lot of comments compared to the length of the article. Nice work! At your current rate, how many years until you're done with all NYC landmarks? — Kusma ( talk) 22:03, 3 June 2022 (UTC)
The lobby is redecorated with stuccoas I don't think that's how the verb "redecorate" is used. But you can convince me if I'm wrong... — Kusma ( talk) 19:18, 5 June 2022 (UTC)