Not a lot to nitpick with this one, so up to your usual high standard. I've read it through twice and could only find the following pretty minor things:
there is inconsistency in how the Montebello Islands are presented, also Monte Bello Islands. I think the former is the standard spelling.
Y Standardised on "Montebello". All the sources use "Monte Bello".
should that be Yankuntjatjarra rather than Jangkuntjara? Jangkundjara is a common misspelling, so this may also be such. There are often many different versions.
Y Yes, following the sources. Corrected. Have you heard of the bitter dispute over the spelling of Ngunnawal?
Did the RC conclude that Aboriginal people were exposed to the tests as a result of the inadequate warnings?
I'm left wondering about the Australian (and British) veterans of the tests. Doesn't the Department of Veterans' Affairs look after veterans of these tests? This seems like an area that should be covered in the article.
The problem is that the article is about Totem, and it is hard to separate them from the larger group involved in Maralinga. I've described what the servicemen did. (I really hope you're not expecting the DVA to be like Santa's workshop.)
Hawkeye7(discuss)12:37, 23 October 2018 (UTC)reply
why were monitoring stations established across Australia for later tests? Were they concerned that fallout affected wider areas?
Sort of. The tests revealed hard-to-predict patterns of fallout. In the late 1950s, concerns grew over rising levels of radioactive contamination in the northern hemisphere resulting from atmospheric testing, particularly strontium 90. So the Australian government became more concerned, and more detailed monitoring was put in place.
Hawkeye7(discuss)12:37, 23 October 2018 (UTC)reply
fn 35 "Whewn the Desert Skies Caught Fire" has a typo
This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Nice work!
Peacemaker67 (
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00:07, 24 October 2018 (UTC)reply
Not a lot to nitpick with this one, so up to your usual high standard. I've read it through twice and could only find the following pretty minor things:
there is inconsistency in how the Montebello Islands are presented, also Monte Bello Islands. I think the former is the standard spelling.
Y Standardised on "Montebello". All the sources use "Monte Bello".
should that be Yankuntjatjarra rather than Jangkuntjara? Jangkundjara is a common misspelling, so this may also be such. There are often many different versions.
Y Yes, following the sources. Corrected. Have you heard of the bitter dispute over the spelling of Ngunnawal?
Did the RC conclude that Aboriginal people were exposed to the tests as a result of the inadequate warnings?
I'm left wondering about the Australian (and British) veterans of the tests. Doesn't the Department of Veterans' Affairs look after veterans of these tests? This seems like an area that should be covered in the article.
The problem is that the article is about Totem, and it is hard to separate them from the larger group involved in Maralinga. I've described what the servicemen did. (I really hope you're not expecting the DVA to be like Santa's workshop.)
Hawkeye7(discuss)12:37, 23 October 2018 (UTC)reply
why were monitoring stations established across Australia for later tests? Were they concerned that fallout affected wider areas?
Sort of. The tests revealed hard-to-predict patterns of fallout. In the late 1950s, concerns grew over rising levels of radioactive contamination in the northern hemisphere resulting from atmospheric testing, particularly strontium 90. So the Australian government became more concerned, and more detailed monitoring was put in place.
Hawkeye7(discuss)12:37, 23 October 2018 (UTC)reply
fn 35 "Whewn the Desert Skies Caught Fire" has a typo
This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Nice work!
Peacemaker67 (
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00:07, 24 October 2018 (UTC)reply