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Reviewer: AJona1992 ( talk · contribs) 02:25, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

Comments from AJona1992

• Is "following the under-performance" - really necessary? Also "first single" isn't that a lead single?

• Such details give readers a better view of what can be expected forward. I have changes to lead single and linked it. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 16:16, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• Too many sentences have the word "the song" - needs a variety

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "charted" is not necessary, just start it off with "It peaked at number ..."

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• It also charted in Belgium and Switzerland. - and what were those peaks?

• It's only a lead. So not necessary. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• An accompanying music video ---> The single's accompanying music video ...

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "portrays Houston and her girlfriends taking time out and spending time at spa and a club" - is missing two words

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 16:18, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "the mini-concert" - sounds orish

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 16:16, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "In an interview with entertainment website" - no need for "entertainment website"

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "album: "One of Those Days" and "Dear John Letter"" - there's no need for a semi-colon. Try this Shek'speare and Reynolds penned three songs that day, two of which are featured on the album, "One of Those Days" and "Dear John Letter".

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• A 4-track CD single was released on the next day - (1) The way you start off this sentence weakens the prose (2) A CD single does not include 4 tracks, this sounds more like a maxi single if anything.

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "an exclusive" - is orish

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• The Isley Brothers (is wikilinked twice), Between the Sheets (is wikilinked twice)

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• Houston begins the song by declaring her stress: "This is just for me [...] Got to take time out [...] You don't know what I'm going through." - is just a mess. Look at Amor Prohibido (song) for a better way of representing the lyrics.

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• File:Houston ThoseDays.ogg needs a "further rational". See File:Amor Prohibido.ogg as an example.

• More than enough for a GA. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "The German newspaper," is not necessary at all.

• It is not a common newspaper. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• Neither is The Dallas Morning News, but you don't see me putting: The Texas newspaper ... Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 16:11, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• I assure you that it is. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 16:15, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "the issue dated November 16, 2002" - remove
• "the issue dated November 9, 2002" - remove
• "the week dated January 4, 2003" - remove

• Billboard charts are 13 days in advance. That's why we use issue dated and week ending. 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC)

• Well just saying its peak is okay, BTW can you provide any GAs that have this? Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 16:11, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• See all GAs by Beyonce. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 16:15, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "and having a massage at sauna" - a word is missing here

• I am confused. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "a" is needed before "sauna". Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 16:11, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 16:18, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "Houston performed the song as the opening number of the concert to a crowd of about 4000 people" - where's the comma for 4000?

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• "on December 10, 2002" - redundant, since you gave the date in the first sentence.

• Done. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• Please fix these concerns before I do a spotcheck and a reference check. Happy holidays, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 02:25, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

• Okay. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 16:15, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

Reference checking

• FN#34 is not consistent with other Billboard publishers. Which one is it?
• Please fix this issue before passing. Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC) reply

Billboard was acquired by Prometheus Global Media in 2009. I was told by some experienced editors that the publisher for all BB links, before 2009 should be Nielsen Business Media and after 2009 Prometheus. That's why they look different. Novice7 ( talk) 06:43, 1 January 2012 (UTC) reply

Comment from another editor

• Nowhere in the WP:WIAGA does it say references must be consistent.

From Wikipedia:What the Good article criteria are not:

• "Importantly, the GA criteria are a standard, not the opinion of individual reviewers."

• (2) Factually accurate and verifiable

• Mistakes to avoid (excerpted):

• Requiring the use (or non-use) of citation templates.
• Requiring consistently formatted, complete bibliographic citations. (If you are able to figure out what the source is, that's a good enough citation for GA.)

MathewTownsend ( talk) 22:11, 28 December 2011 (UTC) reply

It's common sense. A "good article" does not need to have inconsistency, look at a few other experienced GAN reviewers and check out their reviews. Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 15:35, 2 January 2012 (UTC) reply

Novice7 is right. Whatever he has done is 100% right and I bet on it. Billboard was acquired by Prometheus Global Media only in 2009. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:39, 2 January 2012 (UTC) reply

And reference 4 is from Google Book, that is the physical copy ofBillboard. Jivesh1205 ( Talk) 15:42, 2 January 2012 (UTC) reply