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Reviewer: Mike Christie ( talk · contribs) 09:39, 9 July 2018 (UTC)
I'll review this. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 09:39, 9 July 2018 (UTC)
First, here are some points that are not requirements for GA, but which you may wish to fix anyway:
GA issues:
The Worlds include competitions: isn't "Worlds" singular here? So it should be "includes"?
It has played a role in the globalisation of Irish stepdance and Irish stepdance generally: some repetition here.
Irish stepdance and Irish dance generally. Triptothecottage ( talk) 11:03, 9 July 2018 (UTC)
and, in the 21st century, has been held in both the British Isles outside of Ireland and in North America: not sure what the relevance is of "in the 21st century". Do you mean it has only been held outside Ireland since 2000?
particularly because of a perceived over-representation of delegates from the Gaelic League: I don't follow this. Was this over-representation in An Coimisiún? What does it mean to say the Gaelic League was over-represented? Why would it have been an issue anyway?
the majority of overseas teachers who continued to support the event enabled preparations to continue: suggest "the majority of overseas teachers continued to support the event, and this enabled preparations to continue".
Michael Flatley, the first North American winner of the World Championships, recalled that his preparation for Oireachtas Rince na Cruinne: I think it would be useful to the reader to know when Flatley first competed -- if it was around 1970, then his recollections are relevant to the early history being described; if later, then it's less relevant.
the perceived inferiority of overseas competitors persisted into the early 21st century: whose perception? That of the judges? Or did the Americans and Australians also feel themselves to be inferior to the Irish dancers?
-- More this evening. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 10:14, 9 July 2018 (UTC)
Continuing:
caused excessive demand for the North American National Championships: I don't think you mean "excessive". Perhaps "excess", or just "additional"?
Each of the secondary qualifiers is open to international entrants, with the exception of the Australian Championships, but dancers may only qualify at their local secondary qualifier.I don't follow this at all; it seems to directly contradict itself.
Elsewhere (no primary qualifier): where does this refer to? Anywhere in the world that has no primary qualifier? E.g. if a dancer is in South America or Asia, they have no primary, and then their secondary is the All-Ireland or Scottish secondary qualifiers? Another small-Roman-numeral note within the table would be good to explain this.
This includes dancers whom they have taught in the previous two years, to whom they are related, or whom have been taught by their relatives in the previous two years: suggest "This includes dancers whom they (or their relatives) have taught in the previous two years, or to whom they are related".
From the group selected, a ballot is publicly drawn on each morning of the Championships to determine the makeup of adjudication panels for each of the day's sections, from Wulff (2007), which seems to be the only mention of the timeframe -- perhaps that's no longer the case? Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 10:45, 11 July 2018 (UTC)
As of January 2018, exemptions to the new system remained under consideration: I'm not sure what "exemptions" could mean here.
Michaela Hinds retired from competitive Irish dance in 2017 after winning 7 solo championships, more than any other North American in the history of Oireachtas Rince na Cruinne: seems odd to give this statistic without saying who has won the most solo championships overall.
That's it for the body of the article. I still have to spotcheck some of the sources against the content; I will do that this evening if I get time. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 09:53, 10 July 2018 (UTC)
I've struck one more point and added a note above; just a couple of points left now. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 23:55, 11 July 2018 (UTC)
Will need a couple of days to fix the last two points. Sorry to hold it up. Triptothecottage ( talk) 00:34, 14 July 2018 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Mike Christie ( talk · contribs) 09:39, 9 July 2018 (UTC)
I'll review this. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 09:39, 9 July 2018 (UTC)
First, here are some points that are not requirements for GA, but which you may wish to fix anyway:
GA issues:
The Worlds include competitions: isn't "Worlds" singular here? So it should be "includes"?
It has played a role in the globalisation of Irish stepdance and Irish stepdance generally: some repetition here.
Irish stepdance and Irish dance generally. Triptothecottage ( talk) 11:03, 9 July 2018 (UTC)
and, in the 21st century, has been held in both the British Isles outside of Ireland and in North America: not sure what the relevance is of "in the 21st century". Do you mean it has only been held outside Ireland since 2000?
particularly because of a perceived over-representation of delegates from the Gaelic League: I don't follow this. Was this over-representation in An Coimisiún? What does it mean to say the Gaelic League was over-represented? Why would it have been an issue anyway?
the majority of overseas teachers who continued to support the event enabled preparations to continue: suggest "the majority of overseas teachers continued to support the event, and this enabled preparations to continue".
Michael Flatley, the first North American winner of the World Championships, recalled that his preparation for Oireachtas Rince na Cruinne: I think it would be useful to the reader to know when Flatley first competed -- if it was around 1970, then his recollections are relevant to the early history being described; if later, then it's less relevant.
the perceived inferiority of overseas competitors persisted into the early 21st century: whose perception? That of the judges? Or did the Americans and Australians also feel themselves to be inferior to the Irish dancers?
-- More this evening. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 10:14, 9 July 2018 (UTC)
Continuing:
caused excessive demand for the North American National Championships: I don't think you mean "excessive". Perhaps "excess", or just "additional"?
Each of the secondary qualifiers is open to international entrants, with the exception of the Australian Championships, but dancers may only qualify at their local secondary qualifier.I don't follow this at all; it seems to directly contradict itself.
Elsewhere (no primary qualifier): where does this refer to? Anywhere in the world that has no primary qualifier? E.g. if a dancer is in South America or Asia, they have no primary, and then their secondary is the All-Ireland or Scottish secondary qualifiers? Another small-Roman-numeral note within the table would be good to explain this.
This includes dancers whom they have taught in the previous two years, to whom they are related, or whom have been taught by their relatives in the previous two years: suggest "This includes dancers whom they (or their relatives) have taught in the previous two years, or to whom they are related".
From the group selected, a ballot is publicly drawn on each morning of the Championships to determine the makeup of adjudication panels for each of the day's sections, from Wulff (2007), which seems to be the only mention of the timeframe -- perhaps that's no longer the case? Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 10:45, 11 July 2018 (UTC)
As of January 2018, exemptions to the new system remained under consideration: I'm not sure what "exemptions" could mean here.
Michaela Hinds retired from competitive Irish dance in 2017 after winning 7 solo championships, more than any other North American in the history of Oireachtas Rince na Cruinne: seems odd to give this statistic without saying who has won the most solo championships overall.
That's it for the body of the article. I still have to spotcheck some of the sources against the content; I will do that this evening if I get time. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 09:53, 10 July 2018 (UTC)
I've struck one more point and added a note above; just a couple of points left now. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 23:55, 11 July 2018 (UTC)
Will need a couple of days to fix the last two points. Sorry to hold it up. Triptothecottage ( talk) 00:34, 14 July 2018 (UTC)