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Hi, this is my first GAR, but I'll do my best. When I conclude the review I will probably ask another reviewer for a second opinion.
The article does not have serious issues that justify a quick-fail.
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Specific comments on prose:
Genesis: I think the first sentence should briefly introduce Thompson, even if he is bluelinked. The second paragraph ends rather abruptly. Done
Version 1.0: There is a sudden shift in tense when you begin to describe the features. Was this intentional? The latter half of the third paragraph overuses "noted" ("review x noted ..."). This should be easy to fix. Done
"allowing half of the spam e-mail in the inbox"..to what? I believe the intended meaning was that only half of the incoming spam mail was blocked, but the way it was written I think it is slightly ambiguous. Done
Version 2.0: Typo in second sentence. I find that the repeated use of "now", makes the prose a little repetitive Done
Version 3.0: Two consecutive sentences start with "Safe Web...". I found "Safe Web color codes..." a little confusing because I didn't immediately recognize "[to] color code" as a verb. In the last p., the significance of the support session, and which issue would be addressed was unclear. Done
I am of course watching this, but if you have specific comments or questions do not hesitate to leave a message or {{ tb}} on my talk page. decltype ( talk) 11:41, 15 May 2009 (UTC)
Update: please leave a checkmark or a comment to show which issues you have addressed. That would make it a lot easier. decltype ( talk) 17:43, 15 May 2009 (UTC)
I see that work has been done to improve this. I would still like to see the lede changed, though. I will conclude the review by the end of the week. decltype ( talk) 03:52, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
I have done a brief ce. The only problem I can see is that there is a fact tag in the article. decltype ( talk) 16:28, 20 May 2009 (UTC)
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Hi, this is my first GAR, but I'll do my best. When I conclude the review I will probably ask another reviewer for a second opinion.
The article does not have serious issues that justify a quick-fail.
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Specific comments on prose:
Genesis: I think the first sentence should briefly introduce Thompson, even if he is bluelinked. The second paragraph ends rather abruptly. Done
Version 1.0: There is a sudden shift in tense when you begin to describe the features. Was this intentional? The latter half of the third paragraph overuses "noted" ("review x noted ..."). This should be easy to fix. Done
"allowing half of the spam e-mail in the inbox"..to what? I believe the intended meaning was that only half of the incoming spam mail was blocked, but the way it was written I think it is slightly ambiguous. Done
Version 2.0: Typo in second sentence. I find that the repeated use of "now", makes the prose a little repetitive Done
Version 3.0: Two consecutive sentences start with "Safe Web...". I found "Safe Web color codes..." a little confusing because I didn't immediately recognize "[to] color code" as a verb. In the last p., the significance of the support session, and which issue would be addressed was unclear. Done
I am of course watching this, but if you have specific comments or questions do not hesitate to leave a message or {{ tb}} on my talk page. decltype ( talk) 11:41, 15 May 2009 (UTC)
Update: please leave a checkmark or a comment to show which issues you have addressed. That would make it a lot easier. decltype ( talk) 17:43, 15 May 2009 (UTC)
I see that work has been done to improve this. I would still like to see the lede changed, though. I will conclude the review by the end of the week. decltype ( talk) 03:52, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
I have done a brief ce. The only problem I can see is that there is a fact tag in the article. decltype ( talk) 16:28, 20 May 2009 (UTC)