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Reviewer: Bilorv ( talk · contribs) 12:13, 7 January 2023 (UTC)
I'm delighted to see the progress being made in Better Call Saul articles and the teamwork that goes into them. Lots of positives here. The article is broad and focused, with all the content I'd expect in an episode article. There's good use of free images and a detailed fair use rationale for the promotional poster. The plot summary is a good length (330 words, with a 400 word limit from MOS:TVPLOT). There's no issues with copyvio, stability etc. Spotchecks didn't raise any verifiability issues. I do have a couple of concerns that need to be addressed for the GA criteria, and some smaller nitpicks that might improve the article:
However, if Rotten Tomatoes has a sample of 10 reviews for an independent film, the sample is not large enough for the score to be statistically accurate.I'd normally suggest quoting the Critics Consensus but it's actually just a copy-and-paste job of their Consensus for the sixth season as a whole.
"brilliant and wholly unexpected stand-alone episode"(Vulture), I'd have no idea which episode or even which series this was written about. (Also note that Vulture gave it a five-star rating.) There's more reviews as well if you want them— Den of Geek, The A.V. Club. I'd like to see at least two or three paragraphs that flow well, where comments are clearly organised by theme/subject.
Nitpicks:
... disrupting the timing of the scheme, but Gene buys time ...– To avoid repetition of "time" in quick succession, the latter part could be "... but Gene delays ..."
... the third Better Call Saul episode to be directed by Michelle MacLaren after the first season's " Mijo" ...– I think a comma is needed following the word "after" to change the meaning from "it was the third time it happened since 'Mijo' and 'Breathe'" to "it was the third time it happened; the first two were 'Mijo' and 'Breathe'".
The cab driver Jeff, who had previously been portrayed by Don Harvey, was recast to Pat Healy– More concise as "The cab driver Jeff, previously portrayed by Don Harvey ..."
Healy had originally auditioned for the role of Jeff– Slightly simpler as "Healy originally auditioned for the role of Jeff".
Healy emphasized that the recast was not due to Odenkirk's heart attack during the production of a previous episode in the sixth season, as he was cast before that.– This took me a minute to understand. It's pedantic, but the meaning is that the recast was not due to scheduling changes after Odenkirk had a heart attack. With addition of a source that mentions that filming had to accommodate Odenkirk's health, we could say something like:
The recast was unrelated to the filming changes to accommodate Odenkirk's health after a heart attack during production of a previous episode in the season, as Healy had already been cast by then.
"walk like you've got hemorrhoids."and
"... I was practically falling out of my chair because I was laughing so hard."– The period should go outside of the quotes per MOS:LQ.
Bob Odenkirk also received praise for his performance as Jimmy McGill/Gene Takavic– Perhaps simpler just to say "performance as Gene Takavic", as he's acting in that role for the whole episode and that Gene is a guise for Jimmy has already been mentioned.
This is on hold for seven days, but I'm happy to give more leeway if progress is being made. Looking forward to bringing this up to GA status! —
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Reviewer: Bilorv ( talk · contribs) 12:13, 7 January 2023 (UTC)
I'm delighted to see the progress being made in Better Call Saul articles and the teamwork that goes into them. Lots of positives here. The article is broad and focused, with all the content I'd expect in an episode article. There's good use of free images and a detailed fair use rationale for the promotional poster. The plot summary is a good length (330 words, with a 400 word limit from MOS:TVPLOT). There's no issues with copyvio, stability etc. Spotchecks didn't raise any verifiability issues. I do have a couple of concerns that need to be addressed for the GA criteria, and some smaller nitpicks that might improve the article:
However, if Rotten Tomatoes has a sample of 10 reviews for an independent film, the sample is not large enough for the score to be statistically accurate.I'd normally suggest quoting the Critics Consensus but it's actually just a copy-and-paste job of their Consensus for the sixth season as a whole.
"brilliant and wholly unexpected stand-alone episode"(Vulture), I'd have no idea which episode or even which series this was written about. (Also note that Vulture gave it a five-star rating.) There's more reviews as well if you want them— Den of Geek, The A.V. Club. I'd like to see at least two or three paragraphs that flow well, where comments are clearly organised by theme/subject.
Nitpicks:
... disrupting the timing of the scheme, but Gene buys time ...– To avoid repetition of "time" in quick succession, the latter part could be "... but Gene delays ..."
... the third Better Call Saul episode to be directed by Michelle MacLaren after the first season's " Mijo" ...– I think a comma is needed following the word "after" to change the meaning from "it was the third time it happened since 'Mijo' and 'Breathe'" to "it was the third time it happened; the first two were 'Mijo' and 'Breathe'".
The cab driver Jeff, who had previously been portrayed by Don Harvey, was recast to Pat Healy– More concise as "The cab driver Jeff, previously portrayed by Don Harvey ..."
Healy had originally auditioned for the role of Jeff– Slightly simpler as "Healy originally auditioned for the role of Jeff".
Healy emphasized that the recast was not due to Odenkirk's heart attack during the production of a previous episode in the sixth season, as he was cast before that.– This took me a minute to understand. It's pedantic, but the meaning is that the recast was not due to scheduling changes after Odenkirk had a heart attack. With addition of a source that mentions that filming had to accommodate Odenkirk's health, we could say something like:
The recast was unrelated to the filming changes to accommodate Odenkirk's health after a heart attack during production of a previous episode in the season, as Healy had already been cast by then.
"walk like you've got hemorrhoids."and
"... I was practically falling out of my chair because I was laughing so hard."– The period should go outside of the quotes per MOS:LQ.
Bob Odenkirk also received praise for his performance as Jimmy McGill/Gene Takavic– Perhaps simpler just to say "performance as Gene Takavic", as he's acting in that role for the whole episode and that Gene is a guise for Jimmy has already been mentioned.
This is on hold for seven days, but I'm happy to give more leeway if progress is being made. Looking forward to bringing this up to GA status! —
Bilorv (
talk)
12:13, 7 January 2023 (UTC)