The LEAD leaves the reader wondering the following:
Were there any law enforcement actions?
Any judicial rulings?
Any monetary penalties?
As best as I can find, no to all three. It's mentioned later in the article, but, as Russian hadn't actually taken any cash from his victims, he hadn't technically committed a crime. A civil case wasn't pursued due to a lack of money. I have added this information to the lead.
I guess he wasn't really working within the book industry - he had a low-paying job at a single branch of a much larger chain. I have now specified this in the lead.
Do you have a year for "He studied English at Goldsmiths, University of London, but dropped out before the exams"?
No, unfortunately. I would hazard a guess that it was circa 1998, but I can't find any sources to verify that.
This sentence is runon: "He had set up businesses and written unpublished novels, before he took a job working at a branch of Waterstone's in London and then decided that he wanted to produce his own reality television programme."
Rewritten.
Do you have a citation for "Most British reality TV programmes at the time centred on a team of people trying to accomplish a specific goal or target"?
Russian set the contestants tests during the audition phase; some of the tests measured how they responded to practical problems, while others measured their psychological responses. I've changed the word "set" to "given" - is this an improvement?
GA review (see
here for what the criteria are, and
here for what they are not)
The LEAD leaves the reader wondering the following:
Were there any law enforcement actions?
Any judicial rulings?
Any monetary penalties?
As best as I can find, no to all three. It's mentioned later in the article, but, as Russian hadn't actually taken any cash from his victims, he hadn't technically committed a crime. A civil case wasn't pursued due to a lack of money. I have added this information to the lead.
I guess he wasn't really working within the book industry - he had a low-paying job at a single branch of a much larger chain. I have now specified this in the lead.
Do you have a year for "He studied English at Goldsmiths, University of London, but dropped out before the exams"?
No, unfortunately. I would hazard a guess that it was circa 1998, but I can't find any sources to verify that.
This sentence is runon: "He had set up businesses and written unpublished novels, before he took a job working at a branch of Waterstone's in London and then decided that he wanted to produce his own reality television programme."
Rewritten.
Do you have a citation for "Most British reality TV programmes at the time centred on a team of people trying to accomplish a specific goal or target"?
Russian set the contestants tests during the audition phase; some of the tests measured how they responded to practical problems, while others measured their psychological responses. I've changed the word "set" to "given" - is this an improvement?
GA review (see
here for what the criteria are, and
here for what they are not)