"the 2007 event's ratings of 5 and 7.5 out of 10": Why did the previous year's event have two ratings?
There were two event writers, see the source.
Should that not be said there? (or rather in the reception section)
Do you have a suggestion?
"...out of 10 (there were two ratings because two different writers reviewed the show)."
Done.
"for a title shot..." Explain what a title shot is.
Done.
"he could not wait much longer until WrestleMania". Correct grammar.
I think I got it.
"the WWE title". Use proper name
The proper name is "WWE title".
I guess that will do, but I was thinking of WWE Championship.
"That same event". Any way to make it flow better?
Suggestion?
That same night?
Done.
"Following the events of No Way Out". 1) Should change "events' as No Way Out is referred to as an event several times. 2) Explain why Cena felt cheated earlier in the paragraph (I am assuming because Orton purposely disqualified himself)
Done.
"he would join the WWE title match, making it a standard match involving three wrestlers at WrestleMania". Move WrestleMania to right after the WWE title match.
Done.
"retain the title after pinning". Needs a comma.
Done.
"At Backlash, Cena and Triple H challenged..." Fix, as Cena and Triple H would have challenged Orton on Raw.
What?
The actual challenge would have been issued on Raw.
I somewhat wrote it the info. in the Backlash sentence.
"wrestlers switched programs". Replace programs with brands.
"if Batista won the tag team match". Wasn't it Batista's team that had to win?
His team needed to win in order for him to "secure" his title shot.
But it should say that it was his team that needed to win. You can't technically win a tag-team match by yourself.
Done.
In the same paragraph, it mentions Batista's match against the Great Khali as being necessary to finalize the title shot, and then says that he retained the shot. Which is it?
He retained his shot because he defeated Khali.
It seems a bit confusing to me but it's all right,
"That same episode". That same night, perhaps?
Done.
"The main feud on the ECW brand was between ECW Champion Kane (Glen Jacobs) defending the title against The Big Show (Paul Wight) and Mark Henry". Fix grammar.
Done.
"determining the championships for each brand." Unclear at first glance.
What do you mean?
Never mind; I was tired when I was writing the review and I had to reread it.
"The match began with Finlay". In the ring?
Yes.
Should it say that?
Yes.
Then why doesn't it?
Done, jeez. ;)
"Throughout the match, the Miz and Morrison controlled majority of the match." Redundant.
How is it redundant? I see no problem with it, as the Miz and Morrison controlled most of the match.
What about "Throughout the match, the Miz and Morrison were in control."
Basically the pay-per-view only involved titles matches. Michelle McCool became the first WWE Divas Champion, thus having somewhat of a significance to have.
"by the label, Sony Music Entertainment." Remove comma.
Just so you know, I'll extend the on hold period for a few days, because everyone is busy around Christmas. Thanks, Genius101Guestbook 18:51, 25 December 2008 (UTC)reply
"the 2007 event's ratings of 5 and 7.5 out of 10": Why did the previous year's event have two ratings?
There were two event writers, see the source.
Should that not be said there? (or rather in the reception section)
Do you have a suggestion?
"...out of 10 (there were two ratings because two different writers reviewed the show)."
Done.
"for a title shot..." Explain what a title shot is.
Done.
"he could not wait much longer until WrestleMania". Correct grammar.
I think I got it.
"the WWE title". Use proper name
The proper name is "WWE title".
I guess that will do, but I was thinking of WWE Championship.
"That same event". Any way to make it flow better?
Suggestion?
That same night?
Done.
"Following the events of No Way Out". 1) Should change "events' as No Way Out is referred to as an event several times. 2) Explain why Cena felt cheated earlier in the paragraph (I am assuming because Orton purposely disqualified himself)
Done.
"he would join the WWE title match, making it a standard match involving three wrestlers at WrestleMania". Move WrestleMania to right after the WWE title match.
Done.
"retain the title after pinning". Needs a comma.
Done.
"At Backlash, Cena and Triple H challenged..." Fix, as Cena and Triple H would have challenged Orton on Raw.
What?
The actual challenge would have been issued on Raw.
I somewhat wrote it the info. in the Backlash sentence.
"wrestlers switched programs". Replace programs with brands.
"if Batista won the tag team match". Wasn't it Batista's team that had to win?
His team needed to win in order for him to "secure" his title shot.
But it should say that it was his team that needed to win. You can't technically win a tag-team match by yourself.
Done.
In the same paragraph, it mentions Batista's match against the Great Khali as being necessary to finalize the title shot, and then says that he retained the shot. Which is it?
He retained his shot because he defeated Khali.
It seems a bit confusing to me but it's all right,
"That same episode". That same night, perhaps?
Done.
"The main feud on the ECW brand was between ECW Champion Kane (Glen Jacobs) defending the title against The Big Show (Paul Wight) and Mark Henry". Fix grammar.
Done.
"determining the championships for each brand." Unclear at first glance.
What do you mean?
Never mind; I was tired when I was writing the review and I had to reread it.
"The match began with Finlay". In the ring?
Yes.
Should it say that?
Yes.
Then why doesn't it?
Done, jeez. ;)
"Throughout the match, the Miz and Morrison controlled majority of the match." Redundant.
How is it redundant? I see no problem with it, as the Miz and Morrison controlled most of the match.
What about "Throughout the match, the Miz and Morrison were in control."
Basically the pay-per-view only involved titles matches. Michelle McCool became the first WWE Divas Champion, thus having somewhat of a significance to have.
"by the label, Sony Music Entertainment." Remove comma.
Just so you know, I'll extend the on hold period for a few days, because everyone is busy around Christmas. Thanks, Genius101Guestbook 18:51, 25 December 2008 (UTC)reply