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I'll take this one, comments will follow in due course.
Zawed (
talk) 09:44, 5 October 2023 (UTC)reply
Comments as follows:
Lead
This reads OK
Background
This reads OK
Nieuport 10 Triplane
Do we have a time frame for construction; presumably it was in 1915 if this is when the staggered wing arrangement was invented?
It was patented on 10 Jan 1916, so presumably built in 1915, but no date of first flight is available.
The aircraft was tested by the French in 1916,: presumably this testing was done by the French Army Aviation? Also approx timeframe?
No more specific date is known.
Nieuport 17 Triplane
Trenchard ordered the aircraft transferred to home for more thorough testing which were : suggest swapping out 'home' for 'England'. Also 'were' for 'was'
Good idea to be more specific, but I'm not sure what you comment about swapping "were" for "was" applies to.
The summary report showed: I would add 'RFC' ahead of 'summary'
Over all is one word.
Nieuport 17bis triplane
The fighter retained the same layout as the earlier single seater.: I assume you mean wing layout. Also specify which single seater
The Nieuport 10 version was a two seater.
Dur. Uppercut self-administered.
Zawed (
talk) 08:48, 22 October 2023 (UTC)reply
may have been because the biplane may have been : repeated 'may have been'
Bibliography
The Owers ref lacks sufficient info for place of publication
The n.p. means no place of publication given
It suddenly came to me a few days afterwards what that n.p. meant, but by then you had already responded. A further uppercut self-administered.
Zawed (
talk) 08:48, 22 October 2023 (UTC)reply
Other stuff
No dupe links
Image tags look fine.
That's it for me.
Zawed (
talk) 10:21, 14 October 2023 (UTC)reply
Thanks for taking the time to review this. See if my changes are satisfactory.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 00:38, 18 October 2023 (UTC)reply
All the changes look acceptable to me, and I made a couple more tweaks to close this all off. Happy to pass as GA as I believe that the article meets the necessary criteria.
Zawed (
talk) 08:48, 22 October 2023 (UTC)reply
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I'll take this one, comments will follow in due course.
Zawed (
talk) 09:44, 5 October 2023 (UTC)reply
Comments as follows:
Lead
This reads OK
Background
This reads OK
Nieuport 10 Triplane
Do we have a time frame for construction; presumably it was in 1915 if this is when the staggered wing arrangement was invented?
It was patented on 10 Jan 1916, so presumably built in 1915, but no date of first flight is available.
The aircraft was tested by the French in 1916,: presumably this testing was done by the French Army Aviation? Also approx timeframe?
No more specific date is known.
Nieuport 17 Triplane
Trenchard ordered the aircraft transferred to home for more thorough testing which were : suggest swapping out 'home' for 'England'. Also 'were' for 'was'
Good idea to be more specific, but I'm not sure what you comment about swapping "were" for "was" applies to.
The summary report showed: I would add 'RFC' ahead of 'summary'
Over all is one word.
Nieuport 17bis triplane
The fighter retained the same layout as the earlier single seater.: I assume you mean wing layout. Also specify which single seater
The Nieuport 10 version was a two seater.
Dur. Uppercut self-administered.
Zawed (
talk) 08:48, 22 October 2023 (UTC)reply
may have been because the biplane may have been : repeated 'may have been'
Bibliography
The Owers ref lacks sufficient info for place of publication
The n.p. means no place of publication given
It suddenly came to me a few days afterwards what that n.p. meant, but by then you had already responded. A further uppercut self-administered.
Zawed (
talk) 08:48, 22 October 2023 (UTC)reply
Other stuff
No dupe links
Image tags look fine.
That's it for me.
Zawed (
talk) 10:21, 14 October 2023 (UTC)reply
Thanks for taking the time to review this. See if my changes are satisfactory.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 00:38, 18 October 2023 (UTC)reply
All the changes look acceptable to me, and I made a couple more tweaks to close this all off. Happy to pass as GA as I believe that the article meets the necessary criteria.
Zawed (
talk) 08:48, 22 October 2023 (UTC)reply