Use abbreviations. For example, U.S. Route 50 (US 50) the first time, US 50 every subsequent time.
"NJ xx" violates
WP:SRNC. For that you need to use "Route xx."
The paragraphs in 1.2 are a bit long.
How many times do you need to use "Here," in a paragraph?
Cut down on "A short distance later," and *any* phrase that you keep repeating.
Residential, woodland, farmland...
You need to remove more.
Still need to remove more. It's showing up several times in the same paragraph.
"Past this interchange, Route 50 widens to a four-lane divided highway and coming to a partial interchange with the Atlantic City Expressway that has access to and from the westbound direction of the Atlantic City Expressway." - comes
Again with "It continues to
Tuckahoe and come to CR 669. "
On hold This article needs serious work. Please, before you nominate any more articles to GAN, fix them up so that they are not full of indiscriminate details. --
Rschen7754 (
TC)
06:08, 15 October 2009 (UTC)reply
I have cut down on several repeated words such as "where" and forms of "intersect". I have also removed details about the surroundings to the point where I feel further reductions would make the physical description too undescriptive.
Dough4872 (
talk)
17:03, 16 October 2009 (UTC)reply
Use abbreviations. For example, U.S. Route 50 (US 50) the first time, US 50 every subsequent time.
"NJ xx" violates
WP:SRNC. For that you need to use "Route xx."
The paragraphs in 1.2 are a bit long.
How many times do you need to use "Here," in a paragraph?
Cut down on "A short distance later," and *any* phrase that you keep repeating.
Residential, woodland, farmland...
You need to remove more.
Still need to remove more. It's showing up several times in the same paragraph.
"Past this interchange, Route 50 widens to a four-lane divided highway and coming to a partial interchange with the Atlantic City Expressway that has access to and from the westbound direction of the Atlantic City Expressway." - comes
Again with "It continues to
Tuckahoe and come to CR 669. "
On hold This article needs serious work. Please, before you nominate any more articles to GAN, fix them up so that they are not full of indiscriminate details. --
Rschen7754 (
TC)
06:08, 15 October 2009 (UTC)reply
I have cut down on several repeated words such as "where" and forms of "intersect". I have also removed details about the surroundings to the point where I feel further reductions would make the physical description too undescriptive.
Dough4872 (
talk)
17:03, 16 October 2009 (UTC)reply