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Some text in this article was originally taken from http://www.ninds.nih.gov/disorders/neuroacanthocytosis/neuroacanthocytosis.htm (public domain)
In several sources "neuroacanthocytosis" is listed as a group term, not a single illness. For example, at eMedicine. At the same time, OMIM link for some reason points to choreoacanthocytosis. I'm baffled a little.. Some specialist attention is needed, IMHO. -- CopperKettle 21:59, 18 December 2009 (UTC)
What I came across when I was researching is that Neuroacanthocytosis is a general term and is comprised of those four disease and is sometimes referred to as choreoacanthocytosis or levine-critchley syndrome. I will look into it some more and see if anyone else can help me out! Thanks for your feedback. Saralo16 ( talk) 22:13, 20 March 2010 (UTC)
Colin° Talk 22:19, 23 March 2010 (UTC)
Adrian Danek seems to be the expert here. This book would appear to be a must read for this topic. His homepage makes some papers available. Colin° Talk 22:19, 23 March 2010 (UTC)
This is Tyler from Class I just wanted to say that the article was extremely well written. You are obviously know your stuff. The article was hard to read at times simply because I knew nothing about the disease coming in, but it did give me a very good idea about what it was like and how it was passed on. Some of the words you used that were linked could have been explained a little bit more, especially the ones like "Botulinium toxin injection" because there is no article to actually link to find out what they are. I think it would be easy to go in and add half sentences to these which would say something like: ",which are injections that help to temporarily paralyze the nerves in the body." (I am totally guessing on the meaning there based on the word Botox :] ) Anyways the article was very informative and well sourced. Your pictures helped the article and the data and percentages are an easy way to learn about the topic. One thing I was unsure about was that you said that the life expectancy was 5-10 years and then you said it was 10-20. I know these were in two different sections, but I couldn't tell the difference between the claim. I think this article will go far and people wondering about this disease will be happy to find the article on Wikipedia. Good Job. Trod17 ( talk) 18:08, 11 April 2010 (UTC)
Hi, This is Kaitlin from class. (I said I'd review your aricle) I think that it is very well written, and very factual and to the point. It almost needs more sentences that aren't just facts to make it easier to read. It would add to the flow and sentence variation would defintely help! I also think that instead of doing a separate section for onset, management, and prognosis for each subset of the disease, it would be better to make them a single paragraph in cases where you don't have a lot of information on each category. Overall, I think you article is really good, and I can tell you have spent a lot of time on it! hersh016 ( hersh016) —Preceding undated comment added 17:59, 16 April 2010 (UTC).
Hi, this is Jake from class, sorry it took me so long to review your article, I've been very busy lately. Your article looks VERY good though, it really seems that you know what your talking about. I only have two suggestions to improve the article and the first would be to add an infobox. My article for Roberts Syndrome has one so you can look at that if you need help with that. Second, I would suggest defining more of the complicated terms better, I know what you are talking about but the average person looking at the article for information may have no clue what things such as spiculated shape mean. I did see that you tried to define some of the more complicated terms, which is good but it can be difficult to determine what people do and don't know. Having said that, the article is great!!! MooreSvn ( talk) 13:20, 22 April 2010 (UTC)
Your reviewer Colin had some interesting sources to use, and I suggest you follow up on the one that is web-based (Danek). (as I suggested before) Otherwise, the article is moving forward well. Be careful with your spelling. Be sure to link to the actual articles, and pipe the word usage you want to use. This [[Napoleon I|Nappy]] gives you Nappy. Otherwise you end up with a lot of redlinks (no article) that actually are there. You might put the two autosomal recessive diseases together, perhaps even under the same heading, or not. But at least sequentially. They have some similarities of transmission. I've moved a few things around, trying to set up the group of diseases up front. Your headers need to follow the wikipedia style: first word is capitalized, subsequent words are not unless they are proper nouns. Auntieruth55 ( talk) 03:41, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
Reviewer: Jimfbleak - talk to me? 07:00, 26 April 2010 (UTC) Comments soon
More comments on text to follow, but I think the article basically needs a good copy-edit Jimfbleak - talk to me? 07:32, 26 April 2010 (UTC)
Jimfbleak, I've read some of your comments on this article. This is the student's first wikipedia article, and some of your wiki-cabulary is beyond her ken. I'll help with the copy edit, but could you help us clean up the images and white space(I don't know how to do that either). Auntieruth55 ( talk) 19:08, 26 April 2010 (UTC)
Saralo16, I added the stub for Bassen Kornzweig's disease, but you'll need to add a stub for the Huntington's Disease-like etc. Auntieruth55 ( talk) 22:23, 26 April 2010 (UTC)
AuntieRuth, thanks for your comments, help and translation, I'll be gentle. I don't know how to fix the whitespace either, and I won't make it a deal-breaker, but it would be good if it could be fixed - I'll ask around. I'll let the alleged US government image go for now, although it would be good to have a link to the actual source image, but I can't see how the Genzyme one can possibly be PD as it's claimed to be, so I think that must go. The NINDS logo is, I think unnecessary and parochial whatever its status, so no loss if that goes either. There's no rush with this. Jimfbleak - talk to me? 05:39, 27 April 2010 (UTC)
Comment: I see that each of the diseases has its own wikipage. I think that there should be a better balance with the information in this article and the individual disease pages. Perhaps this page should be more of an overview to avoid a lot of repetition. Snowman ( talk) 10:29, 27 April 2010 (UTC)
The cite template is used for some but not all references. Doc James ( talk · contribs · email) 17:55, 2 May 2010 (UTC)
Sasato, I notice that there have been no replies to my comments above, dated 26 April so far Jimfbleak - talk to me? 05:38, 3 May 2010 (UTC)
GA review (see here for criteria)
This article presents detailed information on several conditions that can cause neuroacanthocytosis. The information is excessive here, and better left to the individual main articles which are more likely to be curated and updated. I suggest removing all the detailed individual disease sections and replacing them with very brief summaries. I will do this soon unless there are objections. Dubbin u | t | c 09:01, 7 May 2016 (UTC)
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Wikipedia:Identifying reliable sources (medicine) and are typically
review articles. Here are links to possibly useful sources of information about Neuroacanthocytosis.
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Current status: Good article |
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content assessment scale. It is of interest to the following WikiProjects: | |||||||||||||
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![]() | This article was the subject of an educational assignment that ended on 2010. Further details are available here. |
Some text in this article was originally taken from http://www.ninds.nih.gov/disorders/neuroacanthocytosis/neuroacanthocytosis.htm (public domain)
In several sources "neuroacanthocytosis" is listed as a group term, not a single illness. For example, at eMedicine. At the same time, OMIM link for some reason points to choreoacanthocytosis. I'm baffled a little.. Some specialist attention is needed, IMHO. -- CopperKettle 21:59, 18 December 2009 (UTC)
What I came across when I was researching is that Neuroacanthocytosis is a general term and is comprised of those four disease and is sometimes referred to as choreoacanthocytosis or levine-critchley syndrome. I will look into it some more and see if anyone else can help me out! Thanks for your feedback. Saralo16 ( talk) 22:13, 20 March 2010 (UTC)
Colin° Talk 22:19, 23 March 2010 (UTC)
Adrian Danek seems to be the expert here. This book would appear to be a must read for this topic. His homepage makes some papers available. Colin° Talk 22:19, 23 March 2010 (UTC)
This is Tyler from Class I just wanted to say that the article was extremely well written. You are obviously know your stuff. The article was hard to read at times simply because I knew nothing about the disease coming in, but it did give me a very good idea about what it was like and how it was passed on. Some of the words you used that were linked could have been explained a little bit more, especially the ones like "Botulinium toxin injection" because there is no article to actually link to find out what they are. I think it would be easy to go in and add half sentences to these which would say something like: ",which are injections that help to temporarily paralyze the nerves in the body." (I am totally guessing on the meaning there based on the word Botox :] ) Anyways the article was very informative and well sourced. Your pictures helped the article and the data and percentages are an easy way to learn about the topic. One thing I was unsure about was that you said that the life expectancy was 5-10 years and then you said it was 10-20. I know these were in two different sections, but I couldn't tell the difference between the claim. I think this article will go far and people wondering about this disease will be happy to find the article on Wikipedia. Good Job. Trod17 ( talk) 18:08, 11 April 2010 (UTC)
Hi, This is Kaitlin from class. (I said I'd review your aricle) I think that it is very well written, and very factual and to the point. It almost needs more sentences that aren't just facts to make it easier to read. It would add to the flow and sentence variation would defintely help! I also think that instead of doing a separate section for onset, management, and prognosis for each subset of the disease, it would be better to make them a single paragraph in cases where you don't have a lot of information on each category. Overall, I think you article is really good, and I can tell you have spent a lot of time on it! hersh016 ( hersh016) —Preceding undated comment added 17:59, 16 April 2010 (UTC).
Hi, this is Jake from class, sorry it took me so long to review your article, I've been very busy lately. Your article looks VERY good though, it really seems that you know what your talking about. I only have two suggestions to improve the article and the first would be to add an infobox. My article for Roberts Syndrome has one so you can look at that if you need help with that. Second, I would suggest defining more of the complicated terms better, I know what you are talking about but the average person looking at the article for information may have no clue what things such as spiculated shape mean. I did see that you tried to define some of the more complicated terms, which is good but it can be difficult to determine what people do and don't know. Having said that, the article is great!!! MooreSvn ( talk) 13:20, 22 April 2010 (UTC)
Your reviewer Colin had some interesting sources to use, and I suggest you follow up on the one that is web-based (Danek). (as I suggested before) Otherwise, the article is moving forward well. Be careful with your spelling. Be sure to link to the actual articles, and pipe the word usage you want to use. This [[Napoleon I|Nappy]] gives you Nappy. Otherwise you end up with a lot of redlinks (no article) that actually are there. You might put the two autosomal recessive diseases together, perhaps even under the same heading, or not. But at least sequentially. They have some similarities of transmission. I've moved a few things around, trying to set up the group of diseases up front. Your headers need to follow the wikipedia style: first word is capitalized, subsequent words are not unless they are proper nouns. Auntieruth55 ( talk) 03:41, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
Reviewer: Jimfbleak - talk to me? 07:00, 26 April 2010 (UTC) Comments soon
More comments on text to follow, but I think the article basically needs a good copy-edit Jimfbleak - talk to me? 07:32, 26 April 2010 (UTC)
Jimfbleak, I've read some of your comments on this article. This is the student's first wikipedia article, and some of your wiki-cabulary is beyond her ken. I'll help with the copy edit, but could you help us clean up the images and white space(I don't know how to do that either). Auntieruth55 ( talk) 19:08, 26 April 2010 (UTC)
Saralo16, I added the stub for Bassen Kornzweig's disease, but you'll need to add a stub for the Huntington's Disease-like etc. Auntieruth55 ( talk) 22:23, 26 April 2010 (UTC)
AuntieRuth, thanks for your comments, help and translation, I'll be gentle. I don't know how to fix the whitespace either, and I won't make it a deal-breaker, but it would be good if it could be fixed - I'll ask around. I'll let the alleged US government image go for now, although it would be good to have a link to the actual source image, but I can't see how the Genzyme one can possibly be PD as it's claimed to be, so I think that must go. The NINDS logo is, I think unnecessary and parochial whatever its status, so no loss if that goes either. There's no rush with this. Jimfbleak - talk to me? 05:39, 27 April 2010 (UTC)
Comment: I see that each of the diseases has its own wikipage. I think that there should be a better balance with the information in this article and the individual disease pages. Perhaps this page should be more of an overview to avoid a lot of repetition. Snowman ( talk) 10:29, 27 April 2010 (UTC)
The cite template is used for some but not all references. Doc James ( talk · contribs · email) 17:55, 2 May 2010 (UTC)
Sasato, I notice that there have been no replies to my comments above, dated 26 April so far Jimfbleak - talk to me? 05:38, 3 May 2010 (UTC)
GA review (see here for criteria)
This article presents detailed information on several conditions that can cause neuroacanthocytosis. The information is excessive here, and better left to the individual main articles which are more likely to be curated and updated. I suggest removing all the detailed individual disease sections and replacing them with very brief summaries. I will do this soon unless there are objections. Dubbin u | t | c 09:01, 7 May 2016 (UTC)