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Reviewer: Kent G. Budge ( talk · contribs) 16:46, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
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Hello, I just wanted to introduce myself and let you know I am glad to be reviewing the article
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I like the article and believe it is well on its way to being a good article. I do have some objections that need to be addressed before I pass the article. These are spelled out below.
In the second paragraph of the Evidence section, it is unclear what the two highstands mentioned refer to. Highstands of which? Great Salt Lake? Pyramid Lake? Or both?
In what way? I think this needs to be elaborated a bit more for the article to be fully informative.
Awkward. Does this mean "forest", "scrubland", or something else?
There was a lowering of upper tree lines, anincrease of woodlands at mid to lower elevations; anda reduction of desert shrub vegetation.does not specify much. Jo-Jo Eumerus ( talk) 20:13, 25 June 2020 (UTC)
After thinking about it a moment, I understood what you mean, but you might want to spell it out. Is there a published explanation for this that prevents this observation from falsifying the hypothesis?
This section is a bit unreadable, being a long recitation of dates. Is there a way to organize it for easier readability? Also, as a reader, I would appreciate a discussion of the methods of dating used to date these events, if only to convince me that the scatter is real and not just an artifact of imperfect dating methods.
Would appreciate an explanation for what caused this. Increased cloud cover? Orbital cycles?
This seems like a nice, focused topic, but the brief mention that the term is also used for what seems to be a different event in Texas opens a whole new can of worms and then doesn't examine it. Is this considered part of the western Neopluvial or is it a completely different event? If this is in dispute, are there sources to cite?
Thanks for the comments. I'll respond to these tomorrow if I may. Jo-Jo Eumerus ( talk) 19:00, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
I've revisited the evaluation. I accept that there aren't any licensable images available and, as I noted, this topic may not lend itself to that in any case. All my other concerns have been addressed except one: The chronology section is still one long paragraph that is difficult to read. There should be a way to break this up a bit and make it more readable. -- Kent G. Budge ( talk) 14:47, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
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Hello, I just wanted to introduce myself and let you know I am glad to be reviewing the article
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criteria. This process may take up to 7 days. Feel free to [[User_talk:|contact me]] with any questions or comments you might have during this period. Kent G. Budge ( talk) 16:46, 24 June 2020 (UTC) |
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I like the article and believe it is well on its way to being a good article. I do have some objections that need to be addressed before I pass the article. These are spelled out below.
In the second paragraph of the Evidence section, it is unclear what the two highstands mentioned refer to. Highstands of which? Great Salt Lake? Pyramid Lake? Or both?
In what way? I think this needs to be elaborated a bit more for the article to be fully informative.
Awkward. Does this mean "forest", "scrubland", or something else?
There was a lowering of upper tree lines, anincrease of woodlands at mid to lower elevations; anda reduction of desert shrub vegetation.does not specify much. Jo-Jo Eumerus ( talk) 20:13, 25 June 2020 (UTC)
After thinking about it a moment, I understood what you mean, but you might want to spell it out. Is there a published explanation for this that prevents this observation from falsifying the hypothesis?
This section is a bit unreadable, being a long recitation of dates. Is there a way to organize it for easier readability? Also, as a reader, I would appreciate a discussion of the methods of dating used to date these events, if only to convince me that the scatter is real and not just an artifact of imperfect dating methods.
Would appreciate an explanation for what caused this. Increased cloud cover? Orbital cycles?
This seems like a nice, focused topic, but the brief mention that the term is also used for what seems to be a different event in Texas opens a whole new can of worms and then doesn't examine it. Is this considered part of the western Neopluvial or is it a completely different event? If this is in dispute, are there sources to cite?
Thanks for the comments. I'll respond to these tomorrow if I may. Jo-Jo Eumerus ( talk) 19:00, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
I've revisited the evaluation. I accept that there aren't any licensable images available and, as I noted, this topic may not lend itself to that in any case. All my other concerns have been addressed except one: The chronology section is still one long paragraph that is difficult to read. There should be a way to break this up a bit and make it more readable. -- Kent G. Budge ( talk) 14:47, 20 July 2020 (UTC)