Most of the references seem appropriate. What caught my eye was no. 42–the article by
Trevor Nelson, which seems to be self-published.
Yes, but he's associated with bbc radio 1, whose listed he republished on his website. per
WP:SPS, "Self-published expert sources may be considered reliable when produced by an established expert on the subject matter, whose work in the relevant field has previously been published by reliable third-party publications"
Dan56 (
talk)
22:14, 27 September 2014 (UTC)reply
Reference 56 is dead link, and obviously from unreliable source (ConcertTour.org), even though the journalist is accredited with name.
There is inconsistency with the "access date" field from the citation template. The majority of the references contain that parameter, but other ones, such as the Chicago Tribune or Billboard, don't.
What page from the McIver book is cited? Also, wasn't he a heavy metal writer?
The title of the book actually lol. I think he's written on other styles as well, and this book in particular is referred to in Larkin's Encylcopedia (
[1])
Dan56 (
talk)
22:39, 27 September 2014 (UTC)reply
The title on ref 46 has "Original Soundtrack" written twice. While that is how it is displayed at Allmusic, I suggest losing the one in brackets.
The 'See also' section should feature other Wikipedia articles, not categories. If
List of neo soul singers existed, then it might have been more appropriate than the category of the same name.
The duration of "Something to Hold on To" is 4:06, which means the maximum portion allowed to use is approximately 24 seconds. The fair use rationale would benefit from some formatting.
Images are under free use. I should note that incorporating image size is not necessarily needed since pictures appear differently at various computers. Alt text could be useful for screen readers.
The first citation could be omitted from the lead. I see that the origin of the term is explained in the 'Etymology' section, so the cite there is redundant. Same for the rest of the references in the lead.
The term "neo soul artists" is overly repeated here. For example, "have viewed neo soul artists' lyrical content" could be trimmed to "have viewed the lyrical content".
Why are Zhané, Groove Theory, Joi, Tony Rich, and Me'Shell NdegéOcello mentioned here? What was their contribution to the genre? Listing them like that seems that they were randomly picked.
Rearranged to introduce them after Farley's quote.
Dan56 (
talk)
The artist should be written with full name and linked only at his/her introduction in the article. For example, R. Kelly is linked more than once; Erykah Badu, Lauryn Hill, Raphael Saadiq, etc. should be mentioned with last name in further discussion.
Most of the references seem appropriate. What caught my eye was no. 42–the article by
Trevor Nelson, which seems to be self-published.
Yes, but he's associated with bbc radio 1, whose listed he republished on his website. per
WP:SPS, "Self-published expert sources may be considered reliable when produced by an established expert on the subject matter, whose work in the relevant field has previously been published by reliable third-party publications"
Dan56 (
talk)
22:14, 27 September 2014 (UTC)reply
Reference 56 is dead link, and obviously from unreliable source (ConcertTour.org), even though the journalist is accredited with name.
There is inconsistency with the "access date" field from the citation template. The majority of the references contain that parameter, but other ones, such as the Chicago Tribune or Billboard, don't.
What page from the McIver book is cited? Also, wasn't he a heavy metal writer?
The title of the book actually lol. I think he's written on other styles as well, and this book in particular is referred to in Larkin's Encylcopedia (
[1])
Dan56 (
talk)
22:39, 27 September 2014 (UTC)reply
The title on ref 46 has "Original Soundtrack" written twice. While that is how it is displayed at Allmusic, I suggest losing the one in brackets.
The 'See also' section should feature other Wikipedia articles, not categories. If
List of neo soul singers existed, then it might have been more appropriate than the category of the same name.
The duration of "Something to Hold on To" is 4:06, which means the maximum portion allowed to use is approximately 24 seconds. The fair use rationale would benefit from some formatting.
Images are under free use. I should note that incorporating image size is not necessarily needed since pictures appear differently at various computers. Alt text could be useful for screen readers.
The first citation could be omitted from the lead. I see that the origin of the term is explained in the 'Etymology' section, so the cite there is redundant. Same for the rest of the references in the lead.
The term "neo soul artists" is overly repeated here. For example, "have viewed neo soul artists' lyrical content" could be trimmed to "have viewed the lyrical content".
Why are Zhané, Groove Theory, Joi, Tony Rich, and Me'Shell NdegéOcello mentioned here? What was their contribution to the genre? Listing them like that seems that they were randomly picked.
Rearranged to introduce them after Farley's quote.
Dan56 (
talk)
The artist should be written with full name and linked only at his/her introduction in the article. For example, R. Kelly is linked more than once; Erykah Badu, Lauryn Hill, Raphael Saadiq, etc. should be mentioned with last name in further discussion.