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Hi @ Damian jalali: I'm providing online support for your course at UMD and I have a few comments on your draft:
Please let me know if you have any questions or need any help regarding the above. Thank you. Adam (Wiki Ed) ( talk) 00:17, 6 November 2014 (UTC)
I would start by attempting to compile more information on Nasrin Rahimieh, you mention that Rahimieh attended the University of Alberta, but was she born in Canada or did she immigrate there? I understand that she is currently alive but are there any sources that go more in depth regarding her personal life? Do they mention if she attended the University of Alberta for undergraduate and what degree she completed? Is that any information regarding the subject of her dissertation?
I would also be careful regarding diction, I would start the first paragraph off with "Nasrin Rahimieh attended the University of Alberta and in 1988 earned her Ph.D. in Comparative Literature". I would just try to focus on word choice and choosing words that flow within your sentences to convey a clear message. What do you mean by "past-President"? Is that a role she had or does that indicate she once was president, if the latter the hyphen can be taken out.
I like that you added the "Works" section, it shows the significant amount of literature she has contributed to and how she could impact others. The other thing would be to insert your own analysis of why Rahimieh had a positive impact on women's culture, why was her writing significant? What impact did it have on society? Kfruiz ( talk) 00:35, 21 November 2014 (UTC)@kfruiz
First of all, I didn't really like your word choices. What exactly is a past-president? You need to pick better words, so that your wiki page is better to understand. I personally liked how you showed a lot his works, so that I people have an idea on what he wrote about, but I feel as if there is not enough information on this page overall. You should talk more about his personal life. Did she have a lot of family members? What kind of environment was she was raised in? Where is she from? You said she went to the University of Alberta; is she from Canada? These are some of the questions that you need to answer, when making a wiki page on someone, so that people can have a better understanding on who she is. ~ Cjumeh11 ( talk) 21:36, 25 November 2014 (UTC)
I really liked how you showed off all the works that Rahimieh. I agree with the above reviewers that you should add how Rahimieh had an impact on Womens literature and culture? What do her works consist of that are so significant and need to be recognized? I also agree that your word choice for the page was a bit awkward. I went in and changed some sentences around to make them less choppy, but I would go back in and edit words like "past president." I understand what you mean by past president but you should use words like "former president," or something a little more formal. I also think that you should look into more about her personal life. What university in Alberta was she a professor at? Where did she immigrate to Canada from? Who influenced her to become the author she is today? Samgriff ( talk) 23:14, 25 November 2014 (UTC)
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Hi @ Damian jalali: I'm providing online support for your course at UMD and I have a few comments on your draft:
Please let me know if you have any questions or need any help regarding the above. Thank you. Adam (Wiki Ed) ( talk) 00:17, 6 November 2014 (UTC)
I would start by attempting to compile more information on Nasrin Rahimieh, you mention that Rahimieh attended the University of Alberta, but was she born in Canada or did she immigrate there? I understand that she is currently alive but are there any sources that go more in depth regarding her personal life? Do they mention if she attended the University of Alberta for undergraduate and what degree she completed? Is that any information regarding the subject of her dissertation?
I would also be careful regarding diction, I would start the first paragraph off with "Nasrin Rahimieh attended the University of Alberta and in 1988 earned her Ph.D. in Comparative Literature". I would just try to focus on word choice and choosing words that flow within your sentences to convey a clear message. What do you mean by "past-President"? Is that a role she had or does that indicate she once was president, if the latter the hyphen can be taken out.
I like that you added the "Works" section, it shows the significant amount of literature she has contributed to and how she could impact others. The other thing would be to insert your own analysis of why Rahimieh had a positive impact on women's culture, why was her writing significant? What impact did it have on society? Kfruiz ( talk) 00:35, 21 November 2014 (UTC)@kfruiz
First of all, I didn't really like your word choices. What exactly is a past-president? You need to pick better words, so that your wiki page is better to understand. I personally liked how you showed a lot his works, so that I people have an idea on what he wrote about, but I feel as if there is not enough information on this page overall. You should talk more about his personal life. Did she have a lot of family members? What kind of environment was she was raised in? Where is she from? You said she went to the University of Alberta; is she from Canada? These are some of the questions that you need to answer, when making a wiki page on someone, so that people can have a better understanding on who she is. ~ Cjumeh11 ( talk) 21:36, 25 November 2014 (UTC)
I really liked how you showed off all the works that Rahimieh. I agree with the above reviewers that you should add how Rahimieh had an impact on Womens literature and culture? What do her works consist of that are so significant and need to be recognized? I also agree that your word choice for the page was a bit awkward. I went in and changed some sentences around to make them less choppy, but I would go back in and edit words like "past president." I understand what you mean by past president but you should use words like "former president," or something a little more formal. I also think that you should look into more about her personal life. What university in Alberta was she a professor at? Where did she immigrate to Canada from? Who influenced her to become the author she is today? Samgriff ( talk) 23:14, 25 November 2014 (UTC)