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Reviewer: L293D ( talk · contribs) 19:51, 13 November 2018 (UTC)
Very nice article - will be doing this in the next couple days. L293D ( ☎ • ✎) 19:51, 13 November 2018 (UTC)
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Regele Ferdinand-class destroyer
and the fire-control system was from Germany- remove "was".
The Regele Ferdinand-class ships had an overall length of 101.9 metres (334 ft 4 in), had a beam of 9.6 metres- remove second had.
and a mean draught of- what does "mean" do here?
named for King Ferdinand I of Romania,- named after King Ferdinand
laid down by Pattison[7] in June 1927 at their Naples, Italy, shipyard.- reword, reads confusingly.
The ship was assigned to the Destroyer Squadron- was there only one destroyer squadron in Romania?
On the nights of 22/23 and 24/25 June, Regele Ferdinand, Regina Maria and the flotilla leader Mărășești covered the laying of defensive minefields off Odessa.- remove "flotilla leader", already defined in preceding para.
Adolf Hitler suspended the evacuation- might want to specify the city being evacuated.
when she was discarded- to my knowledge, discarded is not a nautical term. Stricken might do better.
Thanks for the review. See if my changes are satisfactory.-- Sturmvogel 66 ( talk) 03:43, 19 November 2018 (UTC)
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Reviewer: L293D ( talk · contribs) 19:51, 13 November 2018 (UTC)
Very nice article - will be doing this in the next couple days. L293D ( ☎ • ✎) 19:51, 13 November 2018 (UTC)
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Regele Ferdinand-class destroyer
and the fire-control system was from Germany- remove "was".
The Regele Ferdinand-class ships had an overall length of 101.9 metres (334 ft 4 in), had a beam of 9.6 metres- remove second had.
and a mean draught of- what does "mean" do here?
named for King Ferdinand I of Romania,- named after King Ferdinand
laid down by Pattison[7] in June 1927 at their Naples, Italy, shipyard.- reword, reads confusingly.
The ship was assigned to the Destroyer Squadron- was there only one destroyer squadron in Romania?
On the nights of 22/23 and 24/25 June, Regele Ferdinand, Regina Maria and the flotilla leader Mărășești covered the laying of defensive minefields off Odessa.- remove "flotilla leader", already defined in preceding para.
Adolf Hitler suspended the evacuation- might want to specify the city being evacuated.
when she was discarded- to my knowledge, discarded is not a nautical term. Stricken might do better.
Thanks for the review. See if my changes are satisfactory.-- Sturmvogel 66 ( talk) 03:43, 19 November 2018 (UTC)
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