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Make the single release date the third sentence, changing to "It was released the
lead single from the album..." with the wikilink; add the date and labels at the end of the sentence
Remove the set release date of the album and the ref, as that belongs in the first sentence and the exact date is not notable
"Eilish co-wrote it with" → "Eilish co-wrote the song with" making this the second sentence instead for correct order
Remove uptempo from the lead, as the term is not notable for here
"and the effects it had on her outlook on life and the future" this part does not seem to be sourced plus having so much lyrical description is excessive; you should keep the preceding and succeeding parts
The first sentence of the second para should be one about the reception of the song not the accolades
"in 2020 year-end lists by" → "on 2020 year-end lists by multiple publications, including"
Remove introduction to Andrew Onorato, as doing so in the body is sufficient enough
"was praised by music critics for" → "was praised by critics for"
Background and release
None of the first sentence is backed up by the sources, but maybe you could mention from them that Eilish had recorded for the 007 soundtrack?
The post is not sourced since the article does not display the Insta post; either use a different source or add a working archive
Yes it does. The Billboard source shows Eilish's post...
"On July 27, Eilish" → "On July 28, 2020, Eilish" per the source
"the cover art, which features a drawing of herself" → "the
animated cover art, which depicts her" with the pipe, per the source
The tomorrow caption is not backed up; again, either add a different source or use an appropriate archive
"Eilish states: "We" → "Eilish stated: "We"
"this is the most" → "This is the most" per the source
"pouring rain. It was" → "pouring rain. [...] [I]t was" for correct paraphrasing
Pipe Finneas to
Finneas O'Connell since this is the first mention of him
[9] should be at the end of the other sentence not the one with [8], as it backs up the later one's comments alongside [10]
"Eilish added: "it was" → "Eilish added that "it was"
"along with her brother
Finneas O'Connell," → "alongside her brother Finneas O'Connell, who has the stage name of Finneas,"
"both of whom also served as" → "both of whom served as"
Either mention the song being the lead single in the download and streaming sentence if you can find a source, or add a sentence afterwards about it being set for release on the album
[14][15][16][17][18] is too many refs at the end of the sentence, so move appropriate ones to after the comma that only back up those parts and the ones that are used for both, well keep them at the end
Sabrina Claudio is not one of the artists mentioned in the vocal stylists quote
"in current trends."" → "in current trends"." per
MOS:QUOTE
Wikilink
upbeat plus move [20] to being at the end of that sentence as well as the other one
"mentions the track beat" → "mentioned that the track"
"voices [by] [Finneas]" and that "My Future"," → "voices", contributed by Finneas, further saying "My Future"" but the Finneas vocals part is unsourced, also why is [21] here?
"it is about a powerful ode" → "the song serves as a powerful ode"
"and her future first." → "and her future first:"
The quote should actually be "I've changed my plans/Cause I/I'm in love/With my future" towards the end, plus add [26] at the end of the sentence too since it backs up the a cappella part
"But by the time song gets to a minute and 45 seconds, a percussive beat" → "Later on in the song, a percussive beat" but the part about speeding up is not sourced
The "Know I'm supposed to..." line is sourced as starting the part afterwards, while the previous line is not mentioned so remove
"as a" recently household name adjusting to fame", but" → "as a recent household name adjusting to fame, but"
Remove speech marks around as an evolving songwriter
The penultimate quote should start with a double speech mark rather than an exclamation
"know myself". Eilish" → "know myself", Eilish"
"as a "funky" bass line also appears." → "before a "funky"
bassline appears." with the wikilink
"with the lyrics:" → "with the line:"
"in a couple years."" → "in a couple years"."
Critical reception
"received critical acclaim" → "was met with critical acclaim"
"which he describes has "reflect[ed]" → "which he described as "reflecting"
Remove or replace Hollywood Life because that is an unreliable gossip site
"the track has a starts off slow, with a "shimmering" intro, and" → "the track starts off slow with a "shimmering" intro and" plus move this to being part of the second para instead
Not done it's fine in the 3rd para
You are supposed to have split the rankings into the accolades sub-section, rendering this para too short once done. --
K. Peake08:31, 13 May 2021 (UTC)reply
The list placement should be under accolades instead
Insider is not spelt correctly
"and further praised" → "further praising"
"gentle", and never" → "gentle" and never"
"She concludes saying" → "She concluded by saying"
Year-end lists
Retitle to Accolades, as the ranking on Eilish's songs can be moved here
Write this out in prose since five is not really enough for a table; you don't need to use comments for every ranking though
Commercial performance
Add release year of "Bad Guy" in brackets
"to number one during" → "to the summit during"
"Eilish's first number one hit on that chart." → "Eilish's first track to top the chart."
It also topped the
Hot Alternative Songs chart says the source, not Alternative Rock
"on the Alternative Digital Song Sales charts history.[44]
Imagine Dragons" → "in the chart's history,[44] while
Imagine Dragons"
"through July 31 and Aug" → "from July 31 to August"
"It ranked up to" → "The song ranked up to"
"dated Aug 9, 2020." → "dated August 9, 2020."
"of 40,000 units." → "of 40,000 units in Canada."
Are you sure there is supposed to be a dash in top-20 like is done for top-10 and top-five?
Yes, I am pretty sure.
Music video
Background and synopsis
Pipe animated to
Animation on the img text, but remove the pipe in prose since this should have been done earlier
"the same day the single" → "the same day as the single"
Ian Ballantyne, João Monteiro, Josh Trotter, Keith Kavanagh, Maddie Brewer and Sean Anderson are not sourced as animators
"The video has been" → "The visual has been"
Eilish wearing a necklace with a logo and the neon part of her green hair are not sourced
"as she contemplates about" → "while contemplating about"
The part about a sign of her hopeful future is not sourced, unless I missed something?
Critical reception
"positively received by music critics upon its release." → ""positively received by critics upon release."
NPR should not be italicised
"was a "fairy tale heroine" and that the song" → "is a "fairy tale heroine" and that the video"
"Ronia Aniftos writing for Billboard" → "Ronia Aniftos, writing for Billboard,"
Add commas after writing for Bustle magazine like above
"Emma Steen, noted the video "lack[ed]" → "Emma Steen noted the video "lack[s]"
"said it was a" → "said it is a"
Live performances
This section is fine since like last time, there will probably be more performances in the future but shouldn't you mention Eilish's speech from before performing the song at the DNC?
I am going to try and find more live performances to add after I get my second covid vaccine.
She performed the song at 2020 Jingle Bells iHeart Studio, NPR, Tiny Desk, and Sirus Xm from what I found. Miley Cyrus cover in the Live Lounge should also be mentioned. Cheers,
MarioSoulTruthFan (
talk)
09:09, 12 May 2021 (UTC)reply
Fix
MOS:CAPS issues with ref 92 and add publisher or work/website
Final comments and verdict
On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but unfortunately this was a bit more messy than your previous works. --
K. Peake08:57, 6 May 2021 (UTC)reply
Kyle Peake Please give me a day or to finish up the article. This is my last week of high school before I graduate and start getting ready for college. It's also very hard to use any computer when I'm around my parents who despise electronics and always want me to be studying or working.
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05:43, 17 May 2021 (UTC)reply
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Make the single release date the third sentence, changing to "It was released the
lead single from the album..." with the wikilink; add the date and labels at the end of the sentence
Remove the set release date of the album and the ref, as that belongs in the first sentence and the exact date is not notable
"Eilish co-wrote it with" → "Eilish co-wrote the song with" making this the second sentence instead for correct order
Remove uptempo from the lead, as the term is not notable for here
"and the effects it had on her outlook on life and the future" this part does not seem to be sourced plus having so much lyrical description is excessive; you should keep the preceding and succeeding parts
The first sentence of the second para should be one about the reception of the song not the accolades
"in 2020 year-end lists by" → "on 2020 year-end lists by multiple publications, including"
Remove introduction to Andrew Onorato, as doing so in the body is sufficient enough
"was praised by music critics for" → "was praised by critics for"
Background and release
None of the first sentence is backed up by the sources, but maybe you could mention from them that Eilish had recorded for the 007 soundtrack?
The post is not sourced since the article does not display the Insta post; either use a different source or add a working archive
Yes it does. The Billboard source shows Eilish's post...
"On July 27, Eilish" → "On July 28, 2020, Eilish" per the source
"the cover art, which features a drawing of herself" → "the
animated cover art, which depicts her" with the pipe, per the source
The tomorrow caption is not backed up; again, either add a different source or use an appropriate archive
"Eilish states: "We" → "Eilish stated: "We"
"this is the most" → "This is the most" per the source
"pouring rain. It was" → "pouring rain. [...] [I]t was" for correct paraphrasing
Pipe Finneas to
Finneas O'Connell since this is the first mention of him
[9] should be at the end of the other sentence not the one with [8], as it backs up the later one's comments alongside [10]
"Eilish added: "it was" → "Eilish added that "it was"
"along with her brother
Finneas O'Connell," → "alongside her brother Finneas O'Connell, who has the stage name of Finneas,"
"both of whom also served as" → "both of whom served as"
Either mention the song being the lead single in the download and streaming sentence if you can find a source, or add a sentence afterwards about it being set for release on the album
[14][15][16][17][18] is too many refs at the end of the sentence, so move appropriate ones to after the comma that only back up those parts and the ones that are used for both, well keep them at the end
Sabrina Claudio is not one of the artists mentioned in the vocal stylists quote
"in current trends."" → "in current trends"." per
MOS:QUOTE
Wikilink
upbeat plus move [20] to being at the end of that sentence as well as the other one
"mentions the track beat" → "mentioned that the track"
"voices [by] [Finneas]" and that "My Future"," → "voices", contributed by Finneas, further saying "My Future"" but the Finneas vocals part is unsourced, also why is [21] here?
"it is about a powerful ode" → "the song serves as a powerful ode"
"and her future first." → "and her future first:"
The quote should actually be "I've changed my plans/Cause I/I'm in love/With my future" towards the end, plus add [26] at the end of the sentence too since it backs up the a cappella part
"But by the time song gets to a minute and 45 seconds, a percussive beat" → "Later on in the song, a percussive beat" but the part about speeding up is not sourced
The "Know I'm supposed to..." line is sourced as starting the part afterwards, while the previous line is not mentioned so remove
"as a" recently household name adjusting to fame", but" → "as a recent household name adjusting to fame, but"
Remove speech marks around as an evolving songwriter
The penultimate quote should start with a double speech mark rather than an exclamation
"know myself". Eilish" → "know myself", Eilish"
"as a "funky" bass line also appears." → "before a "funky"
bassline appears." with the wikilink
"with the lyrics:" → "with the line:"
"in a couple years."" → "in a couple years"."
Critical reception
"received critical acclaim" → "was met with critical acclaim"
"which he describes has "reflect[ed]" → "which he described as "reflecting"
Remove or replace Hollywood Life because that is an unreliable gossip site
"the track has a starts off slow, with a "shimmering" intro, and" → "the track starts off slow with a "shimmering" intro and" plus move this to being part of the second para instead
Not done it's fine in the 3rd para
You are supposed to have split the rankings into the accolades sub-section, rendering this para too short once done. --
K. Peake08:31, 13 May 2021 (UTC)reply
The list placement should be under accolades instead
Insider is not spelt correctly
"and further praised" → "further praising"
"gentle", and never" → "gentle" and never"
"She concludes saying" → "She concluded by saying"
Year-end lists
Retitle to Accolades, as the ranking on Eilish's songs can be moved here
Write this out in prose since five is not really enough for a table; you don't need to use comments for every ranking though
Commercial performance
Add release year of "Bad Guy" in brackets
"to number one during" → "to the summit during"
"Eilish's first number one hit on that chart." → "Eilish's first track to top the chart."
It also topped the
Hot Alternative Songs chart says the source, not Alternative Rock
"on the Alternative Digital Song Sales charts history.[44]
Imagine Dragons" → "in the chart's history,[44] while
Imagine Dragons"
"through July 31 and Aug" → "from July 31 to August"
"It ranked up to" → "The song ranked up to"
"dated Aug 9, 2020." → "dated August 9, 2020."
"of 40,000 units." → "of 40,000 units in Canada."
Are you sure there is supposed to be a dash in top-20 like is done for top-10 and top-five?
Yes, I am pretty sure.
Music video
Background and synopsis
Pipe animated to
Animation on the img text, but remove the pipe in prose since this should have been done earlier
"the same day the single" → "the same day as the single"
Ian Ballantyne, João Monteiro, Josh Trotter, Keith Kavanagh, Maddie Brewer and Sean Anderson are not sourced as animators
"The video has been" → "The visual has been"
Eilish wearing a necklace with a logo and the neon part of her green hair are not sourced
"as she contemplates about" → "while contemplating about"
The part about a sign of her hopeful future is not sourced, unless I missed something?
Critical reception
"positively received by music critics upon its release." → ""positively received by critics upon release."
NPR should not be italicised
"was a "fairy tale heroine" and that the song" → "is a "fairy tale heroine" and that the video"
"Ronia Aniftos writing for Billboard" → "Ronia Aniftos, writing for Billboard,"
Add commas after writing for Bustle magazine like above
"Emma Steen, noted the video "lack[ed]" → "Emma Steen noted the video "lack[s]"
"said it was a" → "said it is a"
Live performances
This section is fine since like last time, there will probably be more performances in the future but shouldn't you mention Eilish's speech from before performing the song at the DNC?
I am going to try and find more live performances to add after I get my second covid vaccine.
She performed the song at 2020 Jingle Bells iHeart Studio, NPR, Tiny Desk, and Sirus Xm from what I found. Miley Cyrus cover in the Live Lounge should also be mentioned. Cheers,
MarioSoulTruthFan (
talk)
09:09, 12 May 2021 (UTC)reply
Fix
MOS:CAPS issues with ref 92 and add publisher or work/website
Final comments and verdict
On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but unfortunately this was a bit more messy than your previous works. --
K. Peake08:57, 6 May 2021 (UTC)reply
Kyle Peake Please give me a day or to finish up the article. This is my last week of high school before I graduate and start getting ready for college. It's also very hard to use any computer when I'm around my parents who despise electronics and always want me to be studying or working.
Shoot for the Stars 💫 (
talk)
05:43, 17 May 2021 (UTC)reply