Lead section: "The recording sessions marked the Oregon Symphony's first performances ...", why are they called "recording sessions", they were live performances that happened to have been recorded?
Lead section: "... the recording debuted at number 31 on Billboard's Classical Albums chart. The album made several lists of the best classical recordings of 2011.", suggest joining these two sentences, "... Billboard's Classical Albums chart, and made several lists ...".
Program: "The existential composition ...", I think "existential" should be quoted, just as "ambiguous" is, to show it is
the source's interpretation of the work, otherwise it could be seen as
POV; but I'm open to suggestion.
Program: "Boult considered this dissonant work ...", as above, I think "dissonant" should be quoted, or say that the program described the work as "dissonant"; again I'm open to suggestion.
Performances and broadcasts/Reception: The section refers to Sylvan's vocals – did he sing (or recite), the Personnel section makes no mention of this?
Album: "John Newton and Jesse Lewis were the recording engineers mastering and authoring was conducted by Jesse Brayman.", should there be a comma or semicolon between "engineers" and "mastering"?
Close paraphrasing/
copyright violations: everything seems fine, except for one small thing – the article uses the phrase "emotional engagement", which is also used in
the source, which could be seen as a little too close.
Done. Hmm, that does not seem like something I would write without including quotation marks. I won't take the time to determine if that was my mistake or if a change was made to the article by another editor. Thanks! --
Another Believer(
Talk)16:17, 20 February 2013 (UTC)reply
1B.
I think the Lead section could be expanded a little by adding the live radio broadcasts on
KQAC and
WQXR-FM.
At first glance it bothered me that the article heaps so much praise on the Oregon Symphony, which could be seen as being biased towards them. But most of this praise is supported by reliable secondary sources, and if there just wasn't any bad press, I guess then the article can't be seen as being biased.
Done. Image licenses and copyright rules are not my specialty, but images were addressed in the peer review article, so please take a look for context. I copied over the license tags from the Adams image page to the collage image page. --
Another Believer(
Talk)16:28, 20 February 2013 (UTC)reply
I believe I have addressed all of your concerns. Please review my changes and let me know if you have any other comments or concerns. Again, thank you so much. More work on this article remains, but I am so proud of its current state and have several Wikipedians to thank for their assistance, yourself included. --
Another Believer(
Talk)16:49, 20 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Everything looks fine now, I've promoted it to GA. Thanks for your fixes and all your hard work on this article. I've enjoyed doing this review and it's been a pleasure working with you. —
Bruce1eetalk06:39, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Lead section: "The recording sessions marked the Oregon Symphony's first performances ...", why are they called "recording sessions", they were live performances that happened to have been recorded?
Lead section: "... the recording debuted at number 31 on Billboard's Classical Albums chart. The album made several lists of the best classical recordings of 2011.", suggest joining these two sentences, "... Billboard's Classical Albums chart, and made several lists ...".
Program: "The existential composition ...", I think "existential" should be quoted, just as "ambiguous" is, to show it is
the source's interpretation of the work, otherwise it could be seen as
POV; but I'm open to suggestion.
Program: "Boult considered this dissonant work ...", as above, I think "dissonant" should be quoted, or say that the program described the work as "dissonant"; again I'm open to suggestion.
Performances and broadcasts/Reception: The section refers to Sylvan's vocals – did he sing (or recite), the Personnel section makes no mention of this?
Album: "John Newton and Jesse Lewis were the recording engineers mastering and authoring was conducted by Jesse Brayman.", should there be a comma or semicolon between "engineers" and "mastering"?
Close paraphrasing/
copyright violations: everything seems fine, except for one small thing – the article uses the phrase "emotional engagement", which is also used in
the source, which could be seen as a little too close.
Done. Hmm, that does not seem like something I would write without including quotation marks. I won't take the time to determine if that was my mistake or if a change was made to the article by another editor. Thanks! --
Another Believer(
Talk)16:17, 20 February 2013 (UTC)reply
1B.
I think the Lead section could be expanded a little by adding the live radio broadcasts on
KQAC and
WQXR-FM.
At first glance it bothered me that the article heaps so much praise on the Oregon Symphony, which could be seen as being biased towards them. But most of this praise is supported by reliable secondary sources, and if there just wasn't any bad press, I guess then the article can't be seen as being biased.
Done. Image licenses and copyright rules are not my specialty, but images were addressed in the peer review article, so please take a look for context. I copied over the license tags from the Adams image page to the collage image page. --
Another Believer(
Talk)16:28, 20 February 2013 (UTC)reply
I believe I have addressed all of your concerns. Please review my changes and let me know if you have any other comments or concerns. Again, thank you so much. More work on this article remains, but I am so proud of its current state and have several Wikipedians to thank for their assistance, yourself included. --
Another Believer(
Talk)16:49, 20 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Everything looks fine now, I've promoted it to GA. Thanks for your fixes and all your hard work on this article. I've enjoyed doing this review and it's been a pleasure working with you. —
Bruce1eetalk06:39, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.