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19:50, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
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Will be reviewing this article as part of the
GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020 .
MWright96
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19:50, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
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It is reasonably well written .
a (prose) : b (
MoS for
lead ,
layout ,
word choice ,
fiction , and
lists ) :
It is factually accurate and
verifiable .
a (
reference section ) : b (citations to
reliable sources ) : c (
OR ) :
It is broad in its coverage .
a (
major aspects ) : b (
focused ) :
It follows the
neutral point of view policy .
Fair representation without bias :
It is stable .
No edit wars, etc. :
It is illustrated by
images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have
fair use rationales ) : b (
appropriate use with
suitable captions ) :
Overall :
Pass/Fail :
Background history
"David Stiffler (an architect) and Dean Junker (a mechanical engineer)" - reword this portion of text without using parentheses
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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"started a hobby in the 1970s of collecting and restoring antique musical instruments." - began a hobby of collecting and restoring antique musical instruments in the 1970s.
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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"as a venture for the collecting, restoring and displaying of antique musical instruments." - how about collection, restoration and display
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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"In 1979, they decided to create a formal display to show off their hobby to friends and others. " - for friends and others to see their collection.
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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"in the summer of 1983 ." - try not to use seasons per
MOS:SEASON
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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"in the fall of 1983." - same issue as above
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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"It eventually opened in May 1984 to the general public " - to the general public in May 1984 might be better
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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"Work was then started in remodeling the 12,000 square-foot " - use the convert template on the text in bold
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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"The granary originally was where the farm’s workers lived and slept. They called the granary the old farmhouse, from which the music museum received its "house" name." - think these two sentences can be made into one and shortened accordingly
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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Current museum
Theatre organ doesn't need to begin with a capital letter
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:35, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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"that is thirty feet wide and eighteen feet high." - use the convert template in the words in bold
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:35, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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References
Reference 2 is missing the access date
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:49, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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Reference 5 (City-data.com) is a blacklisted source that should be replaced with another reliable source that cites the information it verifies
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Doug Coldwell (
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19:49, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above.
MWright96
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17:16, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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MWright96 : All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --
Doug Coldwell (
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19:49, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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@
Doug Coldwell : Now promoting to GA class.
MWright96
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20:47, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
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