Hello, Nikkimaria! Thanks for the review! Unfortunately, you could not have chosen a worse time to review this; I have exams this coming week! I will do what I can in between study sessions, but please be patient! --
J.L.W.S. The Special One (
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11:59, 20 March 2010 (UTC)reply
Writing and formatting
What is "bai jin"? Since it's a redlink, a short explanation would probably be appropriate, unless it has a Wiktionary article you could link to
While your prose is mostly grammatically correct, it could use some editing for flow and clarity (would I be correct in assuming that English is not your first language?)
"Disappearance, search and community reaction" - seems a bit inaccurate and lengthy. While the section does discuss her disappearance, the search and the community reaction, it also talks about the arrest, interrogation and escape of Took, and the discovery of Huang Na's body. Obviously you can't include all of that in a section title; is there a more concise title that still encompasses all of the section's topics?
How about just "Disappearance and reaction", since "reaction" would emcompass the search for her (both by the police and the community), the arrest of Took and the community reaction after her death. --
J.L.W.S. The Special One (
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14:13, 21 March 2010 (UTC)reply
"TODAY" is a rather ambiguous publication name, as is "The New Paper"; while I appreciate the wikilinks, it would also be helpful to list publisher and possibly location
Given that there is no separate article on Huang Na or Took, it's good to have some detail on each. You've got a bit, but are missing some - for example, when was Huang Na born? What was Took's execution date?
More detail in general would probably be helpful; this appears to be a high-profile case in Singapore, surely more details are available?
Singapore is a
little red dot with a population of less than five million people. There are only a few major Singaporean newspapers, all of which are by
Singapore Press Holdings. Hence information is scarce, even for "a high-profile case". Some information was omitted due to BLP concerns (I know Huang Na and Took are both dead, but their family members are still alive, so I opted to err on the side of caution). --
J.L.W.S. The Special One (
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12:33, 16 April 2010 (UTC)reply
Neutrality
No issues noted
Stability
No recent major edits to the article; however, I note a history of rolling back good-faith edits. Please keep in mind that such behaviour is discouraged. However, that was far enough in the past to be ignored in consideration of the article's current stability.
Hi, i think personally that the article is almost GA ready. With the few exceptions pointed out by the reviewer. But i would say that it is GA ready when those fixes had been made.--
Bödeln (
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14:02, 8 April 2010 (UTC)reply
I posted an initial reply and was waiting for the reviewer to respond to it, but she did not, so I forgot about the review as I was busy with school. Now I am back and will continue addressing the issues she raised, but I hope she will be back too. --
J.L.W.S. The Special One (
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11:03, 16 April 2010 (UTC)reply
I doubt so, considering how short the article is and that most Singaporeans are not native speakers of English (the key difference between the GA criteria and FA criteria is the prose standards). --
J.L.W.S. The Special One (
talk)
12:37, 27 July 2011 (UTC)reply
Hello, Nikkimaria! Thanks for the review! Unfortunately, you could not have chosen a worse time to review this; I have exams this coming week! I will do what I can in between study sessions, but please be patient! --
J.L.W.S. The Special One (
talk)
11:59, 20 March 2010 (UTC)reply
Writing and formatting
What is "bai jin"? Since it's a redlink, a short explanation would probably be appropriate, unless it has a Wiktionary article you could link to
While your prose is mostly grammatically correct, it could use some editing for flow and clarity (would I be correct in assuming that English is not your first language?)
"Disappearance, search and community reaction" - seems a bit inaccurate and lengthy. While the section does discuss her disappearance, the search and the community reaction, it also talks about the arrest, interrogation and escape of Took, and the discovery of Huang Na's body. Obviously you can't include all of that in a section title; is there a more concise title that still encompasses all of the section's topics?
How about just "Disappearance and reaction", since "reaction" would emcompass the search for her (both by the police and the community), the arrest of Took and the community reaction after her death. --
J.L.W.S. The Special One (
talk)
14:13, 21 March 2010 (UTC)reply
"TODAY" is a rather ambiguous publication name, as is "The New Paper"; while I appreciate the wikilinks, it would also be helpful to list publisher and possibly location
Given that there is no separate article on Huang Na or Took, it's good to have some detail on each. You've got a bit, but are missing some - for example, when was Huang Na born? What was Took's execution date?
More detail in general would probably be helpful; this appears to be a high-profile case in Singapore, surely more details are available?
Singapore is a
little red dot with a population of less than five million people. There are only a few major Singaporean newspapers, all of which are by
Singapore Press Holdings. Hence information is scarce, even for "a high-profile case". Some information was omitted due to BLP concerns (I know Huang Na and Took are both dead, but their family members are still alive, so I opted to err on the side of caution). --
J.L.W.S. The Special One (
talk)
12:33, 16 April 2010 (UTC)reply
Neutrality
No issues noted
Stability
No recent major edits to the article; however, I note a history of rolling back good-faith edits. Please keep in mind that such behaviour is discouraged. However, that was far enough in the past to be ignored in consideration of the article's current stability.
Hi, i think personally that the article is almost GA ready. With the few exceptions pointed out by the reviewer. But i would say that it is GA ready when those fixes had been made.--
Bödeln (
talk)
14:02, 8 April 2010 (UTC)reply
I posted an initial reply and was waiting for the reviewer to respond to it, but she did not, so I forgot about the review as I was busy with school. Now I am back and will continue addressing the issues she raised, but I hope she will be back too. --
J.L.W.S. The Special One (
talk)
11:03, 16 April 2010 (UTC)reply
I doubt so, considering how short the article is and that most Singaporeans are not native speakers of English (the key difference between the GA criteria and FA criteria is the prose standards). --
J.L.W.S. The Special One (
talk)
12:37, 27 July 2011 (UTC)reply