I'll take this article. I know that it's discouraged to review newly queued articles like this, but it seems an interesting article.
I got a few preliminary comments:
No broken links
No obvious copyvio.
Rationale for fair use and captions explaining the picture.
wiki-links appropriate items, though I wouldn't think that you should've have linked "dead-on" for the "In Other Media section.
Done. Unlinked the term.
More comments will be coming tomorrow.
Jerry (
talk) 02:06, 28 May 2017 (UTC)reply
"Tommorow." Sorry for that, I forgot about this review.
You mention in this article that Mr. Krabs is in a relationship with Ms. Puff. I've done some poking around and looked through the sources mentioning, and their relationship is mostly from that one-off episode, and if at all mentioned, is mentioned in passing. Episodes mostly seem to hint at it, them dancing together, etc. I think that the relationship is canonically referenced in that one episode.
While it's true that their relationship was toned down for several years, it has taken more of a prominent role in
the most recent season. In the episode "Whirly Brains," Mr. Krabs and Mrs. Puff go on a date and Krabs states that he and Mrs. Puff have been "dating for sixteen years." I figured the relationship would be necessary to mention as it affects the plots of various episodes.
Reference number two is a book, so it should be in the bibliography, IIRC.
Done.
Hyphenate "low cost" in "because of their low cost and positive impact on his finances"
Fixed sentence by rephrasing, as I realized it was a little confusing. I intended to write that he appreciates how little his employees work for (low cost) and how much money they make for him (positive impact on his finances), but I see that the earlier phrasing looks like low cost is being used as an adjective to describe the impact.
"Bottom line" sounds like a cliche.
I agree that it is a cliched phrase, but it's part of a quotation from SpongeBob's voice actor, so I don't think we need to change it.
I've gone over the article again, and I found nothing noteworthy to fix, except that the ISBN for the Arthur Brown book seems to be wrong. After that, I will pass the article.
Jerry (
talk) 15:51, 10 July 2017 (UTC)reply
I'll take this article. I know that it's discouraged to review newly queued articles like this, but it seems an interesting article.
I got a few preliminary comments:
No broken links
No obvious copyvio.
Rationale for fair use and captions explaining the picture.
wiki-links appropriate items, though I wouldn't think that you should've have linked "dead-on" for the "In Other Media section.
Done. Unlinked the term.
More comments will be coming tomorrow.
Jerry (
talk) 02:06, 28 May 2017 (UTC)reply
"Tommorow." Sorry for that, I forgot about this review.
You mention in this article that Mr. Krabs is in a relationship with Ms. Puff. I've done some poking around and looked through the sources mentioning, and their relationship is mostly from that one-off episode, and if at all mentioned, is mentioned in passing. Episodes mostly seem to hint at it, them dancing together, etc. I think that the relationship is canonically referenced in that one episode.
While it's true that their relationship was toned down for several years, it has taken more of a prominent role in
the most recent season. In the episode "Whirly Brains," Mr. Krabs and Mrs. Puff go on a date and Krabs states that he and Mrs. Puff have been "dating for sixteen years." I figured the relationship would be necessary to mention as it affects the plots of various episodes.
Reference number two is a book, so it should be in the bibliography, IIRC.
Done.
Hyphenate "low cost" in "because of their low cost and positive impact on his finances"
Fixed sentence by rephrasing, as I realized it was a little confusing. I intended to write that he appreciates how little his employees work for (low cost) and how much money they make for him (positive impact on his finances), but I see that the earlier phrasing looks like low cost is being used as an adjective to describe the impact.
"Bottom line" sounds like a cliche.
I agree that it is a cliched phrase, but it's part of a quotation from SpongeBob's voice actor, so I don't think we need to change it.
I've gone over the article again, and I found nothing noteworthy to fix, except that the ISBN for the Arthur Brown book seems to be wrong. After that, I will pass the article.
Jerry (
talk) 15:51, 10 July 2017 (UTC)reply