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... and diverse flora and fauna inhabit the area. ' - without mentioning any flora or fauna, this segment just sorta sits there as filler. I'd remove it from where it is, tack the "The mountain forms part of the Mount Jefferson Wilderness" onto the sentence before, and reconstitute mention of flora/fauna elsewhere in lead with some specific organisms.
It has been studied a number of times since its discovery, including field work during the 20th century. - without extra info doesn't add anything useful. Maybe remove it?
.. though mountain hemlock has also invaded into subalpine meadows at Mount Jefferson - as someone interested in ecology, my immediate thought is "why"?
The Ecology section comes over as listy - any details on any particularly rare organisms that are found there, or any extremely common or unusual organisms are good to discuss as well.
ok, just try scouring google scholar for mentions of the area and see what comes up. It's not a deal-breaker for GA but might be for FA - also things like "southernmost/northernmost occurrence of..." are possibilities.
Cas Liber (
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07:52, 31 January 2018 (UTC)reply
Jefferson's main come ranges from 58 to 64 percent silicon dioxide, and is mostly made up of andesite and dacite - should this be "cone"?
and it is relatively unknown compared to other features near the Willamette Valley - well, it ain't unknown, is it? "poorly/little known, little-explored" or somesuch.
''Jefferson Park, on the northern slope of the mountain, can be reached by foot - from where? Also, any land area can be reached on foot..this doesn't help me understand how far it is...from...wherever.
Mount Jefferson has a remote location, and can usually only be reached on foot or by horse. - I don't follow...later it says it has a ski field??? Also "has" a location sounds odd.
Turns out it was a different Mount Jefferson. Removed, and will make sure to keep an eye out for future mistakes of that nature. ceranthor17:45, 31 January 2018 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
... and diverse flora and fauna inhabit the area. ' - without mentioning any flora or fauna, this segment just sorta sits there as filler. I'd remove it from where it is, tack the "The mountain forms part of the Mount Jefferson Wilderness" onto the sentence before, and reconstitute mention of flora/fauna elsewhere in lead with some specific organisms.
It has been studied a number of times since its discovery, including field work during the 20th century. - without extra info doesn't add anything useful. Maybe remove it?
.. though mountain hemlock has also invaded into subalpine meadows at Mount Jefferson - as someone interested in ecology, my immediate thought is "why"?
The Ecology section comes over as listy - any details on any particularly rare organisms that are found there, or any extremely common or unusual organisms are good to discuss as well.
ok, just try scouring google scholar for mentions of the area and see what comes up. It's not a deal-breaker for GA but might be for FA - also things like "southernmost/northernmost occurrence of..." are possibilities.
Cas Liber (
talk·contribs)
07:52, 31 January 2018 (UTC)reply
Jefferson's main come ranges from 58 to 64 percent silicon dioxide, and is mostly made up of andesite and dacite - should this be "cone"?
and it is relatively unknown compared to other features near the Willamette Valley - well, it ain't unknown, is it? "poorly/little known, little-explored" or somesuch.
''Jefferson Park, on the northern slope of the mountain, can be reached by foot - from where? Also, any land area can be reached on foot..this doesn't help me understand how far it is...from...wherever.
Mount Jefferson has a remote location, and can usually only be reached on foot or by horse. - I don't follow...later it says it has a ski field??? Also "has" a location sounds odd.
Turns out it was a different Mount Jefferson. Removed, and will make sure to keep an eye out for future mistakes of that nature. ceranthor17:45, 31 January 2018 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.