Hebden played some of the records and began experimenting with sampling Indian playback singer Lata Mangeshkar's voice, looping a sample for three days --> Hebden played some of the records and began experimenting by playing a vocal sample of Indian playback singer Lata Mangeshkar for three days,
Done I went with "looping" here, to avoid repetition of 'play'. I hope that's OK.
and decided to break the album into a --> Not "break", replace it with "divide"
Done
coupled with complex drum programming[5][4] --> Avoid such instances where the ref 5 is coming before ref 4
Done
to emphasise evening's relationship with nightclubs --> add "an" before evening, because you are not referring to evening here as a person, rather any evening's association with the night
No marketing campaign was used --> Such stub sentences are not desriable, why don't join it with the next sentence as a contrast: "Although no marketing campaign was used, Hebden performed... "
Done OK
from his page --> I assume this is a webpage? if so link it
It's linked in the 'external links' section. I didn't see the need to link it in the article, since the cited source #1 covers what is said in the prose. How do you think I should link it - by inserting an external link into the text? Or by using it as a straightforward (primary) source?
The critical response section is Immaculate
Thanks. I had some fantastic help from
Popcornduff!
Remove Guardian news and media from the ref 1 and ref 17 publishers. You don't need to add publisher for same Work parameters
Done
Use en-dash in place of normal dash in the reference titles.
Done I think I've got all of these now...
Please note to make online sources with non-original content like
AllMusic and
Metacritic as non-italicized. Conversely, online sources with original content can remain italicized like Pitchfork Media etc.
I've always been unclear about the guidelines for this. AllMusic qualifies as 'original content' though, surely? Not done (yet)
Done Actually, I think these are done now.
Please note that you can actually remove all the publisher parameters, since it is now depreciated.
Done I didn't know that. I've left one in for the liner notes cite - should this be removed also? Thanks!
Hebden played some of the records and began experimenting with sampling Indian playback singer Lata Mangeshkar's voice, looping a sample for three days --> Hebden played some of the records and began experimenting by playing a vocal sample of Indian playback singer Lata Mangeshkar for three days,
Done I went with "looping" here, to avoid repetition of 'play'. I hope that's OK.
and decided to break the album into a --> Not "break", replace it with "divide"
Done
coupled with complex drum programming[5][4] --> Avoid such instances where the ref 5 is coming before ref 4
Done
to emphasise evening's relationship with nightclubs --> add "an" before evening, because you are not referring to evening here as a person, rather any evening's association with the night
No marketing campaign was used --> Such stub sentences are not desriable, why don't join it with the next sentence as a contrast: "Although no marketing campaign was used, Hebden performed... "
Done OK
from his page --> I assume this is a webpage? if so link it
It's linked in the 'external links' section. I didn't see the need to link it in the article, since the cited source #1 covers what is said in the prose. How do you think I should link it - by inserting an external link into the text? Or by using it as a straightforward (primary) source?
The critical response section is Immaculate
Thanks. I had some fantastic help from
Popcornduff!
Remove Guardian news and media from the ref 1 and ref 17 publishers. You don't need to add publisher for same Work parameters
Done
Use en-dash in place of normal dash in the reference titles.
Done I think I've got all of these now...
Please note to make online sources with non-original content like
AllMusic and
Metacritic as non-italicized. Conversely, online sources with original content can remain italicized like Pitchfork Media etc.
I've always been unclear about the guidelines for this. AllMusic qualifies as 'original content' though, surely? Not done (yet)
Done Actually, I think these are done now.
Please note that you can actually remove all the publisher parameters, since it is now depreciated.
Done I didn't know that. I've left one in for the liner notes cite - should this be removed also? Thanks!