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Reviewer: Sportsguy17 ( talk · contribs) 03:05, 6 December 2013 (UTC)
I will be reviewing the article. It's late where I am (22:10), so I'll pick up on it tomorrow. Sportsguy17 ( talk • contribs • sign) 03:05, 6 December 2013 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Looks good so far, but lead needs some work. The first paragraph immediately jumps in to what it manufactures. CorporateM, mind adding context and a general overview before jumping into its manufacturing. Otherwise, this article is looking good. Sportsguy17 ( talk • contribs • sign) 00:35, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
I have placed the GAN on hold so CorporateM or anyone else has the opportunity to make the necessary changes. First of all, give more introduction to the lead, condense the lead, check the neutrality, make sure everything is appropriately divided into sections, such as "Products", "Company History", or whatever the topic may be. Also, remove any controversies that contradict WP:CRITICISM. Otherwise, the article is looking good. Sportsguy17 ( talk • contribs • sign) 02:49, 9 December 2013 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Sportsguy17 ( talk · contribs) 03:05, 6 December 2013 (UTC)
I will be reviewing the article. It's late where I am (22:10), so I'll pick up on it tomorrow. Sportsguy17 ( talk • contribs • sign) 03:05, 6 December 2013 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Looks good so far, but lead needs some work. The first paragraph immediately jumps in to what it manufactures. CorporateM, mind adding context and a general overview before jumping into its manufacturing. Otherwise, this article is looking good. Sportsguy17 ( talk • contribs • sign) 00:35, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
I have placed the GAN on hold so CorporateM or anyone else has the opportunity to make the necessary changes. First of all, give more introduction to the lead, condense the lead, check the neutrality, make sure everything is appropriately divided into sections, such as "Products", "Company History", or whatever the topic may be. Also, remove any controversies that contradict WP:CRITICISM. Otherwise, the article is looking good. Sportsguy17 ( talk • contribs • sign) 02:49, 9 December 2013 (UTC)