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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 ( talk · contribs) 01:13, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
Comments by Dunkleosteus77
- I feel there are some things missing, like how much did construction cost? Who owned the land before? Why's it called "Mignot Memorial"? Who owned the land before? Did the States of Guernsey fund the construction? Why's it so significant that it has an X-ray (is it the only one in the general area?) User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk 01:13, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
- "Women giving birth to children in Alderney are generally taken to Guernsey," doesn't have a ref User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk 01:13, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
- You sometimes reference other hospitals, you might just wanna list all the hospitals in the general area, but you don't have to User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk 01:13, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
- Everything you say in the lead is not repeated in the rest of the article and likewise everything said there all need refs User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk 01:13, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
- Just to announce it, I will be failing this article in 3 days if you do not respond User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk 15:38, 14 September 2018 (UTC)
Comments by PeaBrainC
Agree with Dunkleosteus suggestions. In addition:
- How about some images - at least one of the hospital for the infobox
- Add section on History e.g. Oregon State Hospital
- Consider including some information on quality assessment - is there a Care Quality Commission rating for the hospital?
- The section on modern equipment looks out of place and it reads more like an advertisement for Siemens. Consider a rewriting and putting into the section on services
- Expand the section on services to list more thoroughly the range of specialities dealt with in the hospital - maybe look at some of the hospital GAs like Forth Valley Royal Hospital, Mount Carmel East or Miami Valley Hospital South for ideas
- Add section on Transport e.g. Forth Valley Royal Hospital, Mount Carmel East or Miami Valley Hospital South
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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 ( talk · contribs) 01:13, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
Comments by Dunkleosteus77
- I feel there are some things missing, like how much did construction cost? Who owned the land before? Why's it called "Mignot Memorial"? Who owned the land before? Did the States of Guernsey fund the construction? Why's it so significant that it has an X-ray (is it the only one in the general area?) User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk 01:13, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
- "Women giving birth to children in Alderney are generally taken to Guernsey," doesn't have a ref User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk 01:13, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
- You sometimes reference other hospitals, you might just wanna list all the hospitals in the general area, but you don't have to User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk 01:13, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
- Everything you say in the lead is not repeated in the rest of the article and likewise everything said there all need refs User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk 01:13, 29 August 2018 (UTC)
- Just to announce it, I will be failing this article in 3 days if you do not respond User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk 15:38, 14 September 2018 (UTC)
Comments by PeaBrainC
Agree with Dunkleosteus suggestions. In addition:
- How about some images - at least one of the hospital for the infobox
- Add section on History e.g. Oregon State Hospital
- Consider including some information on quality assessment - is there a Care Quality Commission rating for the hospital?
- The section on modern equipment looks out of place and it reads more like an advertisement for Siemens. Consider a rewriting and putting into the section on services
- Expand the section on services to list more thoroughly the range of specialities dealt with in the hospital - maybe look at some of the hospital GAs like Forth Valley Royal Hospital, Mount Carmel East or Miami Valley Hospital South for ideas
- Add section on Transport e.g. Forth Valley Royal Hospital, Mount Carmel East or Miami Valley Hospital South