Article lacks any sense of the subject's personality or style, or specifics of his riding abilities.
I have a suggestion. Since the article is a little dry - no images - nothing about his personality, riding style etc., it would help to give quotes by others about him. e.g. from
[2] which has a number of quotes by others (or by him) that give a flavor of his riding style and insight into his effect on others.
This would also give the article a dimension that is missing: there is no "feel" for the man.
Hi again Mathew - I have looked over your edits and they look good. Between
User:Montanabw and I, I think we have cooked up a paragraph (which I have put in the "Other" section for now) about his personality. Let us know if this was what you had in mind, or if you think there is a better place in the article for this information. Thanks,
Dana boomer (
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02:13, 10 January 2012 (UTC)reply
All problems fixed. I changed the heading to "Influence" but if you don't like that, feel free to change it back.
Influence is good - I wasn't really fond of "Other" but didn't have any bright ideas for what to change it to. Thanks again for the review and pass!
Dana boomer (
talk)
20:45, 10 January 2012 (UTC)reply
Article lacks any sense of the subject's personality or style, or specifics of his riding abilities.
I have a suggestion. Since the article is a little dry - no images - nothing about his personality, riding style etc., it would help to give quotes by others about him. e.g. from
[2] which has a number of quotes by others (or by him) that give a flavor of his riding style and insight into his effect on others.
This would also give the article a dimension that is missing: there is no "feel" for the man.
Hi again Mathew - I have looked over your edits and they look good. Between
User:Montanabw and I, I think we have cooked up a paragraph (which I have put in the "Other" section for now) about his personality. Let us know if this was what you had in mind, or if you think there is a better place in the article for this information. Thanks,
Dana boomer (
talk)
02:13, 10 January 2012 (UTC)reply
All problems fixed. I changed the heading to "Influence" but if you don't like that, feel free to change it back.
Influence is good - I wasn't really fond of "Other" but didn't have any bright ideas for what to change it to. Thanks again for the review and pass!
Dana boomer (
talk)
20:45, 10 January 2012 (UTC)reply