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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin ( talk · contribs) 11:01, 31 January 2012 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (
MoS for
lead,
layout,
word choice,
fiction, and
lists):
- very good and easy prose
- there should be more information about his religiosity; does he practice Jewish traditions? Or is he more liberal?
- Sources conflict on this point. The "Cammalleri is Jewish" opening line is not my addition but I realize that it isn't going anywhere without an edit war. one source says he observes Jewish holidays. Another says he was raised secular. A third gives no indication of the importance of religion in his life. Lacking a consistent message, I prefer to leave the section as is. Reso lute 18:17, 18 February 2012 (UTC)
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and
verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to
reliable sources): c (
OR):
- the "by whom" tag in the last picture's and the playing style section should be resolved.
- Reworded for clarity. Reso lute 18:17, 18 February 2012 (UTC)
- high-quality sources
- overall good reference formatting, but the dates were inconsistent, so I changed to classic mdy format.
- I fixed one minor error in one reference
- the "by whom" tag in the last picture's and the playing style section should be resolved.
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- no trivia; focused
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the
neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- no bias
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- as semi-protected
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by
images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with
suitable captions):
- high-quality pictures are properly licensed
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales):
- Overall: I see you are a WikiCup entrant, and you have only 10 points :/. Sorry for the delay, I was busy, but also a bit lazy :).
- Pass/Fail:
- No worries on the Wikicup. If I was truly dedicated to it this year, I'dve had several articles queued up. Appreciate the review, and hopefully I have addressed your concerns. Thanks! Reso lute 18:17, 18 February 2012 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin ( talk · contribs) 11:01, 31 January 2012 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (
MoS for
lead,
layout,
word choice,
fiction, and
lists):
- very good and easy prose
- there should be more information about his religiosity; does he practice Jewish traditions? Or is he more liberal?
- Sources conflict on this point. The "Cammalleri is Jewish" opening line is not my addition but I realize that it isn't going anywhere without an edit war. one source says he observes Jewish holidays. Another says he was raised secular. A third gives no indication of the importance of religion in his life. Lacking a consistent message, I prefer to leave the section as is. Reso lute 18:17, 18 February 2012 (UTC)
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and
verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to
reliable sources): c (
OR):
- the "by whom" tag in the last picture's and the playing style section should be resolved.
- Reworded for clarity. Reso lute 18:17, 18 February 2012 (UTC)
- high-quality sources
- overall good reference formatting, but the dates were inconsistent, so I changed to classic mdy format.
- I fixed one minor error in one reference
- the "by whom" tag in the last picture's and the playing style section should be resolved.
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- no trivia; focused
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the
neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- no bias
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- as semi-protected
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by
images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with
suitable captions):
- high-quality pictures are properly licensed
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales):
- Overall: I see you are a WikiCup entrant, and you have only 10 points :/. Sorry for the delay, I was busy, but also a bit lazy :).
- Pass/Fail:
- No worries on the Wikicup. If I was truly dedicated to it this year, I'dve had several articles queued up. Appreciate the review, and hopefully I have addressed your concerns. Thanks! Reso lute 18:17, 18 February 2012 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail: