Hamm played sports beginning at a very young age - scans oddly, why not just, "Hamm played sports from a (very) young age". I'd also ditch the "very" as comes across as laboured and redundant.
there was no fully professional women's soccer league in the United States - is the word "fully" needed here? was the predecessor league part professional or amateur?
It'd be good if we could add anything to the Washington Freedom, 2001–03 section to buff it up a bit. Also, try to figure a way to avoid having a one sentence paragraph...
Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with
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Overall:
Pass or Fail: - great, well done. I feel it is within striking distance of FA-hood, if you want to take it to FAC. Only slight quibble is I feel the photo of her taking the corner would be better for the infobox but it's not a big deal...just a great photo.
Cas Liber (
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09:34, 19 June 2017 (UTC)reply
Hamm played sports beginning at a very young age - scans oddly, why not just, "Hamm played sports from a (very) young age". I'd also ditch the "very" as comes across as laboured and redundant.
there was no fully professional women's soccer league in the United States - is the word "fully" needed here? was the predecessor league part professional or amateur?
It'd be good if we could add anything to the Washington Freedom, 2001–03 section to buff it up a bit. Also, try to figure a way to avoid having a one sentence paragraph...
Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with
suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail: - great, well done. I feel it is within striking distance of FA-hood, if you want to take it to FAC. Only slight quibble is I feel the photo of her taking the corner would be better for the infobox but it's not a big deal...just a great photo.
Cas Liber (
talk·contribs)
09:34, 19 June 2017 (UTC)reply