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Reviewer: Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 10:06, 23 November 2009 (UTC)
Review coming post haste whenever I feel like it. (Hey, not being snarky, it just might be a day, it might be two days, it might be three days. But it probably won't be any more than that ;)
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Proceeding with full review. Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 01:36, 25 November 2009 (UTC)
There are 20 citations in the two-paragraph lead. WP:LEADCITE states Because the lead will usually repeat information also in the body, editors should balance the desire to avoid redundant citations in the lead with the desire to aid readers in locating sources for challengeable material. Leads are usually written at a greater level of generality than the body, and information in the lead section of non-controversial subjects is less likely to be challenged and less likely to require a source Certainly 20 citations in a lead seems an awful lot. Only three are repeated in the body of the article, but are citations in this bounty perhaps redundant to other citations?
Any chance there's a free-use picture of McGraw doing something other than pulling up his shirt and showing off his beer gut?
The first three images being right-aligned seems off, as all face away from the text. Suggest moving two of them to the left Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 01:51, 25 November 2009 (UTC)
It's unlikely that I'd fail the article for any of these matters. If there's no better pic of McGraw, then so be it (a picture of a plaque might run into problems with a FAC). It's just kind of an unintentionally hilarious picture. The article just seems visually unbalanced with almost all the images on the right. In the past, my screen has proven to be different from most people reading Wikipedia (such that alignments that seem weird for me are fine for others, and vice versa), so it's entirely possible there's nothing wrong there.
I'll start with the criteria-based rundown now, but my next edit to this talkpage is probably not going to come for a few hours. Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 02:19, 25 November 2009 (UTC)
I'm actually a little too tired right now to fine-tooth the prose; that'll have to come later
Images all have ALT text - great! I'm no maven when it comes to ALT text, but I do have a handful of suggestions to perfecting it:
Captions are excellent. No suggestions. Licensing also looks good: File:Tug.jpg would probably need a date attached to it at FAC. No problems here for me, but if you're looking down the line, I'd suggest taking care of that.
Overall, looks pretty good. Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 06:27, 25 November 2009 (UTC)
Fairly small number of points for an article of this size. Good job. Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 08:11, 27 November 2009 (UTC)
Went ahead and made the remaining changes myself. Well done, good article. Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 04:22, 28 November 2009 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 10:06, 23 November 2009 (UTC)
Review coming post haste whenever I feel like it. (Hey, not being snarky, it just might be a day, it might be two days, it might be three days. But it probably won't be any more than that ;)
Alex finds herself awake at night (
Talk ¡
What keeps her up)
10:06, 23 November 2009 (UTC)
Proceeding with full review. Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 01:36, 25 November 2009 (UTC)
There are 20 citations in the two-paragraph lead. WP:LEADCITE states Because the lead will usually repeat information also in the body, editors should balance the desire to avoid redundant citations in the lead with the desire to aid readers in locating sources for challengeable material. Leads are usually written at a greater level of generality than the body, and information in the lead section of non-controversial subjects is less likely to be challenged and less likely to require a source Certainly 20 citations in a lead seems an awful lot. Only three are repeated in the body of the article, but are citations in this bounty perhaps redundant to other citations?
Any chance there's a free-use picture of McGraw doing something other than pulling up his shirt and showing off his beer gut?
The first three images being right-aligned seems off, as all face away from the text. Suggest moving two of them to the left Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 01:51, 25 November 2009 (UTC)
It's unlikely that I'd fail the article for any of these matters. If there's no better pic of McGraw, then so be it (a picture of a plaque might run into problems with a FAC). It's just kind of an unintentionally hilarious picture. The article just seems visually unbalanced with almost all the images on the right. In the past, my screen has proven to be different from most people reading Wikipedia (such that alignments that seem weird for me are fine for others, and vice versa), so it's entirely possible there's nothing wrong there.
I'll start with the criteria-based rundown now, but my next edit to this talkpage is probably not going to come for a few hours. Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 02:19, 25 November 2009 (UTC)
I'm actually a little too tired right now to fine-tooth the prose; that'll have to come later
Images all have ALT text - great! I'm no maven when it comes to ALT text, but I do have a handful of suggestions to perfecting it:
Captions are excellent. No suggestions. Licensing also looks good: File:Tug.jpg would probably need a date attached to it at FAC. No problems here for me, but if you're looking down the line, I'd suggest taking care of that.
Overall, looks pretty good. Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 06:27, 25 November 2009 (UTC)
Fairly small number of points for an article of this size. Good job. Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 08:11, 27 November 2009 (UTC)
Went ahead and made the remaining changes myself. Well done, good article. Alex finds herself awake at night ( Talk ¡ What keeps her up) 04:22, 28 November 2009 (UTC)