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this page is pretty damn racist. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.43.158.107 ( talk) 08:41, 9 March 2012 (UTC)
"It would be interesting to know when rod was first put on the market, whose idea it was, etc."
biased against menthol? 203.109.167.159 11:00, 1 April 2007 (UTC)
This whole article was taken from http://www.naaapi.org/documents/menthol_factsht.asp
Hello editors, I've some suggested edits for this page, but I thought I would see if anybody else wanted to weigh in or offer advice before I change the page.
First, I think the "Economics and Regulation in the US" section heading is clunky. The first two paragraphs seem to be about menthol cigarettes' use and popularity, so why not give that its own section (titled "Use and Popularity?"). "Regulation" should be its own section.
Also, there has been a lot of news in the last couple of years about the FDA proposed ban on menthol, as well the racial implications of such a proposed ban. I'm not sure if that's fitting for wikipedia or not, but perhaps "proposed ban" should be a subsection under "regulation."
Please let me know what you think either here or on my talk page. Thanks! Balloccoli ( talk) 17:36, 13 July 2011 (UTC)
Hello editors, I've some suggested edits for this page, but I thought I would see if anybody else wanted to weigh in or offer advice before I change the page.
First, I think the "Economics and Regulation in the US" section heading is clunky. The first two paragraphs seem to be about menthol cigarettes' use and popularity, so why not give that its own section (titled "Use and Popularity?"). "Regulation" should be its own section.
Also, there has been a lot of news in the last couple of years about the FDA proposed ban on menthol, as well the racial implications of such a proposed ban. I'm not sure if that's fitting for wikipedia or not, but perhaps "proposed ban" should be a subsection under "regulation."
I've put my draft of these sections in my sandbox. Please let me know what you think either here or on my talk page. Thanks! Balloccoli ( talk) 17:47, 13 July 2011 (UTC)
I removed a DAB link on the page. In addition, December of 2010 should be changed to December 2010 I believe. I believe that the information on KOOL cigarettes is good enough that it should be left in unless someone opposes. I would recommend that you copy it over to the main article space. Then I will compare the two articles and see if anything needs changing. Once it is copied over, you can work on combining some paragraphs. For example, the two sentences about the events in March 2011 could read that "On March 18, 2011 the panel concluded that removing menthol cigarettes from the market would benefit public health in the United States, but stopped short of recommending that the Food and Drug Administration take any specific actions, like restricting or banning the additive. In response, the tobacco industry released a report to the FDA claiming menthol cigarettes are no riskier than regular cigarettes and should not be regulated differently." (I didn't include references but they should be kept) We try to stay away from one sentence paragraphs. Ryan Vesey contribs 04:03, 21 July 2011 (UTC)
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this page is pretty damn racist. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.43.158.107 ( talk) 08:41, 9 March 2012 (UTC)
"It would be interesting to know when rod was first put on the market, whose idea it was, etc."
biased against menthol? 203.109.167.159 11:00, 1 April 2007 (UTC)
This whole article was taken from http://www.naaapi.org/documents/menthol_factsht.asp
Hello editors, I've some suggested edits for this page, but I thought I would see if anybody else wanted to weigh in or offer advice before I change the page.
First, I think the "Economics and Regulation in the US" section heading is clunky. The first two paragraphs seem to be about menthol cigarettes' use and popularity, so why not give that its own section (titled "Use and Popularity?"). "Regulation" should be its own section.
Also, there has been a lot of news in the last couple of years about the FDA proposed ban on menthol, as well the racial implications of such a proposed ban. I'm not sure if that's fitting for wikipedia or not, but perhaps "proposed ban" should be a subsection under "regulation."
Please let me know what you think either here or on my talk page. Thanks! Balloccoli ( talk) 17:36, 13 July 2011 (UTC)
Hello editors, I've some suggested edits for this page, but I thought I would see if anybody else wanted to weigh in or offer advice before I change the page.
First, I think the "Economics and Regulation in the US" section heading is clunky. The first two paragraphs seem to be about menthol cigarettes' use and popularity, so why not give that its own section (titled "Use and Popularity?"). "Regulation" should be its own section.
Also, there has been a lot of news in the last couple of years about the FDA proposed ban on menthol, as well the racial implications of such a proposed ban. I'm not sure if that's fitting for wikipedia or not, but perhaps "proposed ban" should be a subsection under "regulation."
I've put my draft of these sections in my sandbox. Please let me know what you think either here or on my talk page. Thanks! Balloccoli ( talk) 17:47, 13 July 2011 (UTC)
I removed a DAB link on the page. In addition, December of 2010 should be changed to December 2010 I believe. I believe that the information on KOOL cigarettes is good enough that it should be left in unless someone opposes. I would recommend that you copy it over to the main article space. Then I will compare the two articles and see if anything needs changing. Once it is copied over, you can work on combining some paragraphs. For example, the two sentences about the events in March 2011 could read that "On March 18, 2011 the panel concluded that removing menthol cigarettes from the market would benefit public health in the United States, but stopped short of recommending that the Food and Drug Administration take any specific actions, like restricting or banning the additive. In response, the tobacco industry released a report to the FDA claiming menthol cigarettes are no riskier than regular cigarettes and should not be regulated differently." (I didn't include references but they should be kept) We try to stay away from one sentence paragraphs. Ryan Vesey contribs 04:03, 21 July 2011 (UTC)
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