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I am sort of new at this, so I am not sure, but it doesn't seem right to copy paragraphs from a copyrighted web site and paste them into Wikipedia. Should the offending paragraphs be reworded and proper citations added, or is the article technically OK as is? Thanks. -- Rochphys 18:50, 20 August 2006 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Le Petit Chat ( talk · contribs) 14:00, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
Some comments before assessing:
Thanks for answering my first comments. Some new remarks:
a. In the introduction, the belligerants of the Rwandan Civil War should be cited. For instance, "Hutu-ruled Rwandan government and Tutsi rebels" or something like that. I will help the reader to understand who are the "Rwandan Armed Force" and the "Rwandan rebels".-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
b. I think the ethnic "division" of Rwanda should be introduced.-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
c. I would also remove the part "[Hutu extremists] moved to seize power". The main point is that these former allies of President Habyarimana started a genocide.
d. "Diagne was born in 1958 in Senegal" Should it be mentionned since his birthdate has already been given?-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
e."... United Nations military observer who served in Rwanda during the 1994 Rwandan genocide. During the genocide he undertook many missions on his own imitative to save the lives of civilians" - twice during the genocide-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
f. "African military observer team" isn't clear enough. Maybe " Organisation of African Unity military observer team"? -- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
g. "Various estimates exists for the number of lives Diagne saved, ranging from dozens to as high as over 1,000." - "dozens" isn't very clear.
h. "Hutu extremists moved to seize power". Weren't they already close to power? The application of the Arusha Accords was delayed because of their alliance with Habyarimana.-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
i. "He came to investigate" Why him? He wasn't a police detective. It was heroic to do so but I don't understand why?-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
j. "...attacked by a government militia armed with machetes." - government-militia is an oxymoron. "Pro-government militia", "Hutu militia", another idea? -- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
k. Dallaire's citation about the media coverage could be moved to this section.-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
m. One image is very few.
@ Indy beetle: From this review, the article meets the GA criteria. Congratulations!-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 21:59, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
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I am sort of new at this, so I am not sure, but it doesn't seem right to copy paragraphs from a copyrighted web site and paste them into Wikipedia. Should the offending paragraphs be reworded and proper citations added, or is the article technically OK as is? Thanks. -- Rochphys 18:50, 20 August 2006 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Le Petit Chat ( talk · contribs) 14:00, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
Some comments before assessing:
Thanks for answering my first comments. Some new remarks:
a. In the introduction, the belligerants of the Rwandan Civil War should be cited. For instance, "Hutu-ruled Rwandan government and Tutsi rebels" or something like that. I will help the reader to understand who are the "Rwandan Armed Force" and the "Rwandan rebels".-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
b. I think the ethnic "division" of Rwanda should be introduced.-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
c. I would also remove the part "[Hutu extremists] moved to seize power". The main point is that these former allies of President Habyarimana started a genocide.
d. "Diagne was born in 1958 in Senegal" Should it be mentionned since his birthdate has already been given?-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
e."... United Nations military observer who served in Rwanda during the 1994 Rwandan genocide. During the genocide he undertook many missions on his own imitative to save the lives of civilians" - twice during the genocide-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
f. "African military observer team" isn't clear enough. Maybe " Organisation of African Unity military observer team"? -- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
g. "Various estimates exists for the number of lives Diagne saved, ranging from dozens to as high as over 1,000." - "dozens" isn't very clear.
h. "Hutu extremists moved to seize power". Weren't they already close to power? The application of the Arusha Accords was delayed because of their alliance with Habyarimana.-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
i. "He came to investigate" Why him? He wasn't a police detective. It was heroic to do so but I don't understand why?-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
j. "...attacked by a government militia armed with machetes." - government-militia is an oxymoron. "Pro-government militia", "Hutu militia", another idea? -- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
k. Dallaire's citation about the media coverage could be moved to this section.-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 23:46, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
m. One image is very few.
@ Indy beetle: From this review, the article meets the GA criteria. Congratulations!-- Le Petit Chat ( talk) 21:59, 17 February 2020 (UTC)