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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna ( talk · contribs) 05:41, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
Will review tomorrow (2 August
UTC).
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- On hold; over to you!
ツ LunaEatsTuna (
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- Nice work on the changes. Happy now to pass. Congrats on yet another short but sweet GA! ツ LunaEatsTuna ( 💬)— 02:16, 14 August 2023 (UTC)
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Prose
- Wikilink basketball in the lead as is standard for basketball player articles.
- I did not realize this was standard.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:32, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- In § High school, recommend opening with his full name as it is his first mention in the body.
- O.K.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:33, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- Wikilink 8th grade, basketball and varsity team for unfamiliar readers.
- You already asked me to link basketball above. Others linked.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:46, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- "In 2007, the Chicago Sun-Times has dubbed" – remove has. Relatedly:
- Thx.-- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:48, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- Wikilink West Aurora.
- Linked above.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:49, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- "Hicks (who went by the nickname Skip at that time)" – recommend "Hicks, who went by the nickname Skip at that time," instead to avoid a repetition of parentheses with the next sentence.
- OK- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:50, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- § DePaul is missing details on the DePaul Blue Demons men's basketball team and when he transferred there. Also, DePaul should be wikilinked here as first mention in the body.
- Fixed. I think.--~
- Wikilink Northern Illinois University.
- Linked above.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:52, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- "All-American by
Associated Press" – recommend the
Associated Press.
- Thx.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:54, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- The second paragraph in § Northern Illinois reads a lot like a sport statistics website instead of an encyclopaedic entry IMO. How about instead writing it like "all-time leader in career points with 1,513 scored, single-season points scored with 682, single-MAC conference game points with 42 against Kent State on March 7, 1977," etc.? The parentheses for the MAC player of the week sentence are fine.
- I'm kind of indifferent to that change.-
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- Fair enough. ツ LunaEatsTuna ( 💬)— 02:16, 14 August 2023 (UTC)
- I'm kind of indifferent to that change.-
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05:14, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
Refs
- Ref 14 appears to be a dead URL.
Passes spotcheck on refs 5, 13 and 16.
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna ( talk · contribs) 05:41, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
Will review tomorrow (2 August
UTC).
ツ LunaEatsTuna (
💬)—
05:41, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
- On hold; over to you!
ツ LunaEatsTuna (
💬)—
19:13, 2 August 2023 (UTC)
- Nice work on the changes. Happy now to pass. Congrats on yet another short but sweet GA! ツ LunaEatsTuna ( 💬)— 02:16, 14 August 2023 (UTC)
Copyvio check
Earwig gives no concerns.
Prose
- Wikilink basketball in the lead as is standard for basketball player articles.
- I did not realize this was standard.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:32, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- In § High school, recommend opening with his full name as it is his first mention in the body.
- O.K.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:33, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- Wikilink 8th grade, basketball and varsity team for unfamiliar readers.
- You already asked me to link basketball above. Others linked.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:46, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- "In 2007, the Chicago Sun-Times has dubbed" – remove has. Relatedly:
- Thx.-- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:48, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- Wikilink West Aurora.
- Linked above.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:49, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- "Hicks (who went by the nickname Skip at that time)" – recommend "Hicks, who went by the nickname Skip at that time," instead to avoid a repetition of parentheses with the next sentence.
- OK- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:50, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- § DePaul is missing details on the DePaul Blue Demons men's basketball team and when he transferred there. Also, DePaul should be wikilinked here as first mention in the body.
- Fixed. I think.--~
- Wikilink Northern Illinois University.
- Linked above.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:52, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- "All-American by
Associated Press" – recommend the
Associated Press.
- Thx.- TonyTheTiger ( T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:54, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- The second paragraph in § Northern Illinois reads a lot like a sport statistics website instead of an encyclopaedic entry IMO. How about instead writing it like "all-time leader in career points with 1,513 scored, single-season points scored with 682, single-MAC conference game points with 42 against Kent State on March 7, 1977," etc.? The parentheses for the MAC player of the week sentence are fine.
- I'm kind of indifferent to that change.-
TonyTheTiger (
T /
C /
WP:FOUR /
WP:CHICAGO /
WP:WAWARD)
05:14, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- Fair enough. ツ LunaEatsTuna ( 💬)— 02:16, 14 August 2023 (UTC)
- I'm kind of indifferent to that change.-
TonyTheTiger (
T /
C /
WP:FOUR /
WP:CHICAGO /
WP:WAWARD)
05:14, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
Refs
- Ref 14 appears to be a dead URL.
Passes spotcheck on refs 5, 13 and 16.
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.