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Reviewer: Coemgenus ( talk · contribs) 11:47, 5 April 2017 (UTC)
- I'll review this one over the next several days. -- Coemgenus ( talk) 11:47, 5 April 2017 (UTC)
Checklist
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and
verifiable.
- a (
reference section):
b (citations to
reliable sources): c (
OR): d (
copyvio and
plagiarism):
- a (
reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (
major aspects): b (
focused):
- a (
major aspects):
- It follows the
neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by
images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have
fair use rationales):
b (
appropriate use with
suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have
fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Comments
- This is mostly fine, an excellent article. A few points below:
- Thank you.
- "In 1937 she volunteered to fight in the Spanish Civil War with the International Brigade; however, she was turned down, because she did not have medical experience." Did she volunteer as a nurse? It's not clear how medical experience has to do with fighting.
- True, but I'm afraid that's a limitation of the source, which says the same thing in slightly different words. It doesn't say what role she volunteered for.
- In the paragraph that begins "She remained a member of the Communist Party for 70 years..." you have a lot of "she"s, which gets repetative. Maybe use her name a few more times.
- Switched a couple of uses
- "Her trip to the Soviet Union led to several prospective employers rejecting her after her return." This sentence repeats what was just said a sentence earlier, doesn't it?
- You're right. Removed the duplication.
- Are any images available? You might be able to use a fair use image if no free ones exist. -- Coemgenus ( talk) 15:22, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
- I'll take a look...honestly, though, I don't remember seeing any when I wrote this.
- @ Coemgenus: I took a look, but I'm afraid I cannot find anything. There's photos of a few other Mary Dochertys out there, including that of a child criminal in the US...but none of her. Even the interview does not have a picture. And I think that's the lot. Vanamonde ( talk) 17:20, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
- That all looks good. too bad about the image, but it can't be helped sometimes. Nice work! -- Coemgenus ( talk) 18:13, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Coemgenus ( talk · contribs) 11:47, 5 April 2017 (UTC)
- I'll review this one over the next several days. -- Coemgenus ( talk) 11:47, 5 April 2017 (UTC)
Checklist
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and
verifiable.
- a (
reference section): b (citations to
reliable sources): c (
OR): d (
copyvio and
plagiarism):
- a (
reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (
major aspects): b (
focused):
- a (
major aspects):
- It follows the
neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by
images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have
fair use rationales): b (
appropriate use with
suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have
fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Comments
- This is mostly fine, an excellent article. A few points below:
- Thank you.
- "In 1937 she volunteered to fight in the Spanish Civil War with the International Brigade; however, she was turned down, because she did not have medical experience." Did she volunteer as a nurse? It's not clear how medical experience has to do with fighting.
- True, but I'm afraid that's a limitation of the source, which says the same thing in slightly different words. It doesn't say what role she volunteered for.
- In the paragraph that begins "She remained a member of the Communist Party for 70 years..." you have a lot of "she"s, which gets repetative. Maybe use her name a few more times.
- Switched a couple of uses
- "Her trip to the Soviet Union led to several prospective employers rejecting her after her return." This sentence repeats what was just said a sentence earlier, doesn't it?
- You're right. Removed the duplication.
- Are any images available? You might be able to use a fair use image if no free ones exist. -- Coemgenus ( talk) 15:22, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
- I'll take a look...honestly, though, I don't remember seeing any when I wrote this.
- @ Coemgenus: I took a look, but I'm afraid I cannot find anything. There's photos of a few other Mary Dochertys out there, including that of a child criminal in the US...but none of her. Even the interview does not have a picture. And I think that's the lot. Vanamonde ( talk) 17:20, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
- That all looks good. too bad about the image, but it can't be helped sometimes. Nice work! -- Coemgenus ( talk) 18:13, 6 April 2017 (UTC)