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Once again, I'd recommend unlinking
video game in the lead due to potential overlinkage
"The dual pack was released through the PlayStation Network and Xbox Live Arcade in September and October 2012." - The dual pack was released through the PlayStation Network and Xbox Live Arcade in September and October 2012, respectively.
"Origins was released to mixed and positive reviews" - how about The game was met with mixed to positive reviews upon release?
"but criticized it for its clunky, outdated gameplay and unbalanced rosters" - I'd remove 'clunky', makes it sound a bit choppy here
I would recommend splitting the Gameplay section into two paragraphs, to improve prose flow
"which had also included online play using GGPO" - unlink GGPO here, it is already linked in gameplay
Once more, I think it would be best to split the reception section into two paragraphs, with a new one starting at "Taylor Cocke of IGN rated the title 8.2/10..."
Nice work on this article, overall it's well written and comprehensive for an online-only game. Sorry for the delay too, I usually review GANs within 24 hours. Once all of the minor issues are out of the way then this can pass. JAGUAR16:06, 3 February 2016 (UTC)reply
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Video games, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of
video games on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join
the discussion and see a list of open tasks.Video gamesWikipedia:WikiProject Video gamesTemplate:WikiProject Video gamesvideo game articles
Once again, I'd recommend unlinking
video game in the lead due to potential overlinkage
"The dual pack was released through the PlayStation Network and Xbox Live Arcade in September and October 2012." - The dual pack was released through the PlayStation Network and Xbox Live Arcade in September and October 2012, respectively.
"Origins was released to mixed and positive reviews" - how about The game was met with mixed to positive reviews upon release?
"but criticized it for its clunky, outdated gameplay and unbalanced rosters" - I'd remove 'clunky', makes it sound a bit choppy here
I would recommend splitting the Gameplay section into two paragraphs, to improve prose flow
"which had also included online play using GGPO" - unlink GGPO here, it is already linked in gameplay
Once more, I think it would be best to split the reception section into two paragraphs, with a new one starting at "Taylor Cocke of IGN rated the title 8.2/10..."
Nice work on this article, overall it's well written and comprehensive for an online-only game. Sorry for the delay too, I usually review GANs within 24 hours. Once all of the minor issues are out of the way then this can pass. JAGUAR16:06, 3 February 2016 (UTC)reply