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Under plural marriage, I edited the block quote to show that the second paragraph was not part of the quoted text. Jaj243 ( talk) 19:11, 2 December 2016 (UTC)
I work at BYU library and am using the resources of the library to add information on Cannon and add in-text citations. If there's an issue please let me know. Gandhi (BYU) ( talk) 14:28, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
Also, I can't find a source for the dates the Hughes family left England or arrived in New York. I don't have a source for the family traveling in the Underwriter either.
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I'll copyedit as I read through; please revert if I make any mistakes.
With the rapid advancement of medicine, Brigham Young began recommending that church members become doctors. In a October 1873 General Conference address, Brigham Young encouraged women, specifically, to enter the medical field and become doctors: repetitive.
On August 13, 1878, Cannon was one of four women set apart for medical studies and practice by the Mormon Church. President John Taylor and his counselor George Q. Cannon set them apart. The four women were Romania B. Pratt, Ellis R. Shipp, Maggie Shipp, and Martha Hughes Cannon.Repetitive; just say "the other three women"; no need to list Cannon twice. And shouldn't we still be calling her Hughes at this point? Although if the sources we're using use "Cannon" for her early years we can go along with that.
Romania and Ellis had already received their medical degrees while Maggie and Martha were heading out to earn theirs: Generally you use last names; any reason to use first names here? I see two are surnamed Shipp, but we could make it "Pratt and Ellis Shipp had...while Cannon and Maggie Shipp".
her letters to Angus grow with jealousy and resentment: suggest "show increasing jealousy and resentment".
30th annual convention at the American Woman Suffrage Association: shouldn't this be "of the", rather than "at the"?
The influence of newspaper and religious leaders: either "newspapers", or if it's just the Deseret News, then "the newspaper".
-- Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 14:01, 18 February 2018 (UTC)
Mike Christie, thank you for your review! I will finish up your suggested edits this week. Gandhi (BYU) ( talk) 20:40, 1 March 2018 (UTC)
Mike Christie, I have finished my edits. If there is anything else that needs work please let me know. Thank you for reviewing this article! Gandhi (BYU) ( talk) 21:03, 8 March 2018 (UTC)
Guidelines for biographies suggest the opening sentence should establish notability, and one would assume being the first female to be elected state senator is an accomplishment notable enough to include.
From Lead guidelines:
"The first sentence should usually state:
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Under plural marriage, I edited the block quote to show that the second paragraph was not part of the quoted text. Jaj243 ( talk) 19:11, 2 December 2016 (UTC)
I work at BYU library and am using the resources of the library to add information on Cannon and add in-text citations. If there's an issue please let me know. Gandhi (BYU) ( talk) 14:28, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
Also, I can't find a source for the dates the Hughes family left England or arrived in New York. I don't have a source for the family traveling in the Underwriter either.
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I'll review this. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 00:20, 18 February 2018 (UTC)
I'll copyedit as I read through; please revert if I make any mistakes.
With the rapid advancement of medicine, Brigham Young began recommending that church members become doctors. In a October 1873 General Conference address, Brigham Young encouraged women, specifically, to enter the medical field and become doctors: repetitive.
On August 13, 1878, Cannon was one of four women set apart for medical studies and practice by the Mormon Church. President John Taylor and his counselor George Q. Cannon set them apart. The four women were Romania B. Pratt, Ellis R. Shipp, Maggie Shipp, and Martha Hughes Cannon.Repetitive; just say "the other three women"; no need to list Cannon twice. And shouldn't we still be calling her Hughes at this point? Although if the sources we're using use "Cannon" for her early years we can go along with that.
Romania and Ellis had already received their medical degrees while Maggie and Martha were heading out to earn theirs: Generally you use last names; any reason to use first names here? I see two are surnamed Shipp, but we could make it "Pratt and Ellis Shipp had...while Cannon and Maggie Shipp".
her letters to Angus grow with jealousy and resentment: suggest "show increasing jealousy and resentment".
30th annual convention at the American Woman Suffrage Association: shouldn't this be "of the", rather than "at the"?
The influence of newspaper and religious leaders: either "newspapers", or if it's just the Deseret News, then "the newspaper".
-- Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 14:01, 18 February 2018 (UTC)
Mike Christie, thank you for your review! I will finish up your suggested edits this week. Gandhi (BYU) ( talk) 20:40, 1 March 2018 (UTC)
Mike Christie, I have finished my edits. If there is anything else that needs work please let me know. Thank you for reviewing this article! Gandhi (BYU) ( talk) 21:03, 8 March 2018 (UTC)
Guidelines for biographies suggest the opening sentence should establish notability, and one would assume being the first female to be elected state senator is an accomplishment notable enough to include.
From Lead guidelines:
"The first sentence should usually state: