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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 ( talk · contribs) 19:36, 1 September 2020 (UTC) reply


  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b ( MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a ( reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c ( OR): d ( copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a ( major aspects): b ( focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b ( appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall: Pass
    Pass/Fail:

Review

Lead

  • You mention the Dodgers twice in the lead

Amateur career

  • Birthday unsourced
  • Prior attended the University of San Diego High School is a really short sentence. Even adding "Growing up" would help

Professional career

  • teammate should be capitalized.
  • You use the "days later" in two sentences, maybe change the wording and expand on his hamstring (ie. include that he was 16-for-35 (.457) in his last nine games)
  • Why is ref 18 needed for the last sentence?
  • I don't think the use of the word "nasty" is NPOV
  • Are four refs needed to prove Selected as National League All-Stars in 2003?
  • He finished 2006, how about He finished the 2006 season
  • I suggest merging the two sentences on the 2007 season with the one below it
  • Please spell out General manager instead of just using GM since this is the first time it is used
  • Reference 64 needs the author
  • Reference 67 has the wrong author
  • What does Used out of the bullpen for the team mean?
  • Reference 73 needs an author
  • Reference 77 needs an author (Aaron Gleeman)
  • Instead of using ref 18 for free agency, you can use this one
  • Reference 78 is dead and not an WP:RS. You can just use ref 79 for both sentences
  • Reference 80 needs an author (Teddy Mitrosilis)
  • Reference 81 needs an author (Gary Schatz)
  • Reference 83 needs an author (Jeff Passan)
  • I suggest changing it to "Personal life" not just "personal"
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

Article ( | visual edit | history) · Article talk ( | history) · Watch

Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 ( talk · contribs) 19:36, 1 September 2020 (UTC) reply


  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b ( MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a ( reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c ( OR): d ( copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a ( major aspects): b ( focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b ( appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall: Pass
    Pass/Fail:

Review

Lead

  • You mention the Dodgers twice in the lead

Amateur career

  • Birthday unsourced
  • Prior attended the University of San Diego High School is a really short sentence. Even adding "Growing up" would help

Professional career

  • teammate should be capitalized.
  • You use the "days later" in two sentences, maybe change the wording and expand on his hamstring (ie. include that he was 16-for-35 (.457) in his last nine games)
  • Why is ref 18 needed for the last sentence?
  • I don't think the use of the word "nasty" is NPOV
  • Are four refs needed to prove Selected as National League All-Stars in 2003?
  • He finished 2006, how about He finished the 2006 season
  • I suggest merging the two sentences on the 2007 season with the one below it
  • Please spell out General manager instead of just using GM since this is the first time it is used
  • Reference 64 needs the author
  • Reference 67 has the wrong author
  • What does Used out of the bullpen for the team mean?
  • Reference 73 needs an author
  • Reference 77 needs an author (Aaron Gleeman)
  • Instead of using ref 18 for free agency, you can use this one
  • Reference 78 is dead and not an WP:RS. You can just use ref 79 for both sentences
  • Reference 80 needs an author (Teddy Mitrosilis)
  • Reference 81 needs an author (Gary Schatz)
  • Reference 83 needs an author (Jeff Passan)
  • I suggest changing it to "Personal life" not just "personal"

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