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Reviewer: The Rambling Man ( talk · contribs) 17:10, 9 March 2021 (UTC) reply

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• I always avoid single-sentence paragraphs as you have as the opening para of the lead.
  • I've added another sentence. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• Professionalism in association football is a good link for professional in this context.
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "were relegated out of" normally just "from" rather than "out of".
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "free transfer" link.
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• Link "relegated" (to Promotion and relegation).
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "from St James' Park at " the academy don't play there.
  • Looks like this has been done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "Born in Ashington, Northumberland..." this para has seven sentences, six of which start with "He..." mix it up, merge a bit, and throw in the odd "Cullen" instead of he.
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• the "Tigers" - avoid using nicknames unless you've introduced them properly. Applies to "Shakers" and "Hatters" etc.
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• " 2–1 League Cup second " use the specific season League Cup article rather than the general one.
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "that manager Richie Barker left Gigg Lane." sacked or ..?
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "relegated into the" just relegated "to".
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "a free transfer" link here too.
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "stunning" said who?
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "perfect hat-trick" link.
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "transfer fee" link.
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "scored both goals" both of his side's goals.
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• play-off -> link 2017 English Football League play-offs.
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "grade two tear" what's that?
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "longest serving player" longest-serving
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "He was a linked " no need for the a.
  • Done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• " Newcastle United U21 " overlinked.
  • Looks like this has been done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• "over Colchester United" likewise.
  • Looks like this has been done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• Refs 34, 53 and 56 have spaced hyphen, should be spaced en-dash.
  • Looks like this has been done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• Ref 40 vs ref 41 BBC Sport formatting...
  • Looks like this has been done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• Ref 15 vs Ref 26 football club website formatting consistency.
  • Looks like this has been done. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply
• Refs need checking from top to bottom for consistency.
  • They look good now.-- Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply

That's it for now, on hold. The Rambling Man ( Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 17:02, 10 March 2021 (UTC) reply

Okay I've actioned on those now. Thanks. Echetus Xe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply

You're still using nicknames without introducing them. Who knows what "Shakers" or "Bantams" means without saying what they mean? Personally I'd stick with the club names, this is, after all, an encyclopedia. The Rambling Man ( Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:42, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply

Okay I have removed the nicknames.-- Echetus Xe 21:58, 11 March 2021 (UTC) reply

Cool, happy now so passing. The Rambling Man ( Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 07:56, 12 March 2021 (UTC) reply