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Reviewer: DanielleTH ( talk · contribs) 01:39, 29 December 2018 (UTC)
As I'm familiar with this topic and the series as a whole for nearly three years now (wow!) I'll take a look at this article. I'll review
Adrien Agreste too once
Flowerpiep completes this one. I'll also mention that I have a
GA nominated article as well, if you are interested in reviewing it.
DanielleTH
(Say hi!) 01:39, 29 December 2018 (UTC)
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Sorry for the wait, Flowerpiep, I wanted to ensure I had enough time to do this review throughly.
Everything else looks great! Awaiting your changes. DanielleTH (Say hi!) 06:05, 15 January 2019 (UTC)
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DanielleTH: Hello and thank you for providing the review! I have tried to address all of the comments listed above, with a few mentions:
- Yes, Astruc had used Spider-Man as a means of comparison, so I changed "similar" to "comparable";
- I could not see the suggestion regarding the verb "saying" from the "Voice" subsection, so for now I changed it to "describing her as [one of her favorite characters that she voiced]";
- In the "Voice" subsection, I left the fact that Vee voices Marinette in the English version of the series and Vee's comments in the first paragraph, placed what Wolfson had said in regard to Vee's voice acting in the second paragraph, and put the fact that Hautbois voices Marinette in French and Astruc's comment regarding her and the rest of the French cast in the third paragraph; if I had placed Wolfson's comments in the first paragraph as well, that paragraph would have become too crowded and the difference in size between the first and second paragraphs would have been too big;
- I left "French-Chinese" linked;
- I reviewed the references and made sure that there are at most two references side by side in almost all places; where there are three references, this is because each of those references contains something unique; also, I believe the reference from the caption should be kept;
- I added a paragraph regarding Marinette's relationship with her parents (briefly mentioned), Tikki (briefly mentioned), and her classmates (with Alya, Nino, and Chloé in particular) in the "Appearances" section; her relationship with Adrien is mentioned in the paragraph above this one; I believe Lila should not be mentioned at the moment since she has not appeared in many episodes;
- I placed the comments related to ZAG from the "Popularity" subsection in the "Concept and creation" subsection; still, I could not find exactly how fans reacted to Marinette's character (except for what had already been mentioned - that they made cosplays based on her and that she served as inspiration for meet-and-greet sessions); since both the "Popularity" subsection and "Merchandise" subsection were smaller in size, I decided to combine them and create a "Popularity and merchandise" subsection; this way, every section composed of prose contains exactly two subsections;
- I believe the size of the image set by you is good. Flowerpiep ( talk) 18:55, 17 January 2019 (UTC)Flowerpiep
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Reviewer: DanielleTH ( talk · contribs) 01:39, 29 December 2018 (UTC)
As I'm familiar with this topic and the series as a whole for nearly three years now (wow!) I'll take a look at this article. I'll review
Adrien Agreste too once
Flowerpiep completes this one. I'll also mention that I have a
GA nominated article as well, if you are interested in reviewing it.
DanielleTH
(Say hi!) 01:39, 29 December 2018 (UTC)
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not) |
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Sorry for the wait, Flowerpiep, I wanted to ensure I had enough time to do this review throughly.
Everything else looks great! Awaiting your changes. DanielleTH (Say hi!) 06:05, 15 January 2019 (UTC)
@
DanielleTH: Hello and thank you for providing the review! I have tried to address all of the comments listed above, with a few mentions:
- Yes, Astruc had used Spider-Man as a means of comparison, so I changed "similar" to "comparable";
- I could not see the suggestion regarding the verb "saying" from the "Voice" subsection, so for now I changed it to "describing her as [one of her favorite characters that she voiced]";
- In the "Voice" subsection, I left the fact that Vee voices Marinette in the English version of the series and Vee's comments in the first paragraph, placed what Wolfson had said in regard to Vee's voice acting in the second paragraph, and put the fact that Hautbois voices Marinette in French and Astruc's comment regarding her and the rest of the French cast in the third paragraph; if I had placed Wolfson's comments in the first paragraph as well, that paragraph would have become too crowded and the difference in size between the first and second paragraphs would have been too big;
- I left "French-Chinese" linked;
- I reviewed the references and made sure that there are at most two references side by side in almost all places; where there are three references, this is because each of those references contains something unique; also, I believe the reference from the caption should be kept;
- I added a paragraph regarding Marinette's relationship with her parents (briefly mentioned), Tikki (briefly mentioned), and her classmates (with Alya, Nino, and Chloé in particular) in the "Appearances" section; her relationship with Adrien is mentioned in the paragraph above this one; I believe Lila should not be mentioned at the moment since she has not appeared in many episodes;
- I placed the comments related to ZAG from the "Popularity" subsection in the "Concept and creation" subsection; still, I could not find exactly how fans reacted to Marinette's character (except for what had already been mentioned - that they made cosplays based on her and that she served as inspiration for meet-and-greet sessions); since both the "Popularity" subsection and "Merchandise" subsection were smaller in size, I decided to combine them and create a "Popularity and merchandise" subsection; this way, every section composed of prose contains exactly two subsections;
- I believe the size of the image set by you is good. Flowerpiep ( talk) 18:55, 17 January 2019 (UTC)Flowerpiep