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Reviewer: Royroydeb ( talk · contribs) 09:17, 26 March 2014 (UTC)
RRD13 ( talk) 08:08, 27 March 2014 (UTC)
RRD13 ( talk) 12:43, 29 March 2014 (UTC)
Alex ( talk) 15:21, 17 April 2014 (UTC) RRD13 ( talk) 07:14, 2 April 2014 (UTC)
RRD13 ( talk) 07:59, 21 April 2014 (UTC)
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An informative and attractively written and well sourced article. My quibbles are more to do with over-enthusiasm that anything else. Put simply: too many images and too much text. The article would benefit from some trimming. There is a chatty and informal style about the article, and it is those phrases which could be looked at first for trimming, that is, those phrases which are not informative and encyclopedic, but are adding human colouring, such as "Early on the morning of 10 October, Marie received a telephone call from Prince Știrbey, who informed her that she had become queen. Although she had been mentally preparing herself for her ascension for some time, the news came as a "colossal shock" to her." There is nothing essential there. The following sentence could be adjusted to read: "On 11 October 1914, Marie and Ferdinand were acclaimed as king and queen...." In the Domestic life section there is a lot of quoting from her diary in order to convey the nuances of the relationship. For readers who want such nuances, they can go to the diary themselves; the role of this Wikipedia article is to provide a concise overview of the topic. Wikipedia:Writing better articles gives some good advice. I'll put on hold for the standard initial seven days. I'm quite happy to expand that as long as progress is being made. And I'm quite willing to help out on trimming the text and images if needed. SilkTork ✔Tea time 14:47, 3 May 2014 (UTC)
I have done the main points indicated above. There is still some trimming needed to be done to ensure the article is more focused in order to encourage more readers to engage with it, and to make it more manageable and enjoyable for those readers who do engage with it.; however, I'll not hold the listing up while waiting for that to be done. That can be part of ongoing development. In essence this is a very decent article. Listing as a Good Article. SilkTork ✔Tea time 09:40, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Royroydeb ( talk · contribs) 09:17, 26 March 2014 (UTC)
RRD13 ( talk) 08:08, 27 March 2014 (UTC)
RRD13 ( talk) 12:43, 29 March 2014 (UTC)
Alex ( talk) 15:21, 17 April 2014 (UTC) RRD13 ( talk) 07:14, 2 April 2014 (UTC)
RRD13 ( talk) 07:59, 21 April 2014 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
An informative and attractively written and well sourced article. My quibbles are more to do with over-enthusiasm that anything else. Put simply: too many images and too much text. The article would benefit from some trimming. There is a chatty and informal style about the article, and it is those phrases which could be looked at first for trimming, that is, those phrases which are not informative and encyclopedic, but are adding human colouring, such as "Early on the morning of 10 October, Marie received a telephone call from Prince Știrbey, who informed her that she had become queen. Although she had been mentally preparing herself for her ascension for some time, the news came as a "colossal shock" to her." There is nothing essential there. The following sentence could be adjusted to read: "On 11 October 1914, Marie and Ferdinand were acclaimed as king and queen...." In the Domestic life section there is a lot of quoting from her diary in order to convey the nuances of the relationship. For readers who want such nuances, they can go to the diary themselves; the role of this Wikipedia article is to provide a concise overview of the topic. Wikipedia:Writing better articles gives some good advice. I'll put on hold for the standard initial seven days. I'm quite happy to expand that as long as progress is being made. And I'm quite willing to help out on trimming the text and images if needed. SilkTork ✔Tea time 14:47, 3 May 2014 (UTC)
I have done the main points indicated above. There is still some trimming needed to be done to ensure the article is more focused in order to encourage more readers to engage with it, and to make it more manageable and enjoyable for those readers who do engage with it.; however, I'll not hold the listing up while waiting for that to be done. That can be part of ongoing development. In essence this is a very decent article. Listing as a Good Article. SilkTork ✔Tea time 09:40, 8 May 2014 (UTC)