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Reviewer: Reidgreg ( talk · contribs) 16:33, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
Review forthcoming. I made some minor copy edit to the article; feel free to revert anything you disagree with and we can discuss it as part of the review. – Reidgreg ( talk) 16:33, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
I did a bit more copy edit, tidying of references and the endnote. I came across a lot of copyvio issues while checking the sources, and paraphrased as needed. – Reidgreg ( talk) 13:02, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
I named the references to make discussion a little easier.
In 1983, Marule became an assistant professor of Native American studies in the area of politics and economic development.I see where the source says she became an assistant professor at U of L in 1983, but not that she was an assistant professor of Native American studies in politics and economic development. It doesn't seem to be in "HeraldObit" either.
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to the citation, as that's the page used for this reference. If you broaden the use of this reference, you may have to add additional page numbers.Marule helped plan the 1972 WCIP conference. She used her contacts in the Third World to convince Guyana to host the 1974 preparatory meeting for the conference in Georgetown.It doesn't make sense to have a preparatory meeting in 1974 if the conference is in 1972. The sources note that the conference was held in 1975 with planning beginning in 1972; I adjusted this accordingly.
The GA criteria say that every picture must have a caption, but I feel that can be waived in the case of an infobox image of the article subject where no further details of the image are known. However, if you can determine any details – the year of the photo, where it was taken or the photographer – then you could include that in a caption. (If you want to email the website and ask for attribution, that's always an option.) And you never know, some of the non-profits might release pictures to PD. Caption added.
Although not part of the GA criteria, here are some other areas you might want to improve:
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text for the infobox image, perhaps Portrait photograph of a woman before a clapboard building
@ Thsmi002: I think the only unsourced statement is that her successor at RCC was Roy Weasel Fat. If you can't find a reliable source for that, the easiest thing would be to remove it (I don't especially like to see something like that which is only present in the infobox). – Reidgreg ( talk) 13:02, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
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text and img caption, and added (from a new source) a bit about the recent growth of a program she had initiated. I personally prefer to include the number (or hyperlink if they meet
WP:N) of children when possible. The way I see it, being a parent is a substantial part of a person's life. I can see your point about keeping the infobox succinct, so I won't challenge if editors want it removed in this instance. In regards to the death and legacy section, do you think the mention of where/when her memorial was held should be deleted?
TJMSmith (
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I was unable to check the sources from https://www.newspapers.com – Calgary Herald, Ottawa Journal, Saskatoon Star-Phoenix. Due to the amount of close paraphrasing I came across with the other sources, I feel that it would be prudent for someone to check these. They're only used for small statements in one place each. – Reidgreg ( talk) 13:02, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
@ Reidgreg: Also, since these articles have been clipped on Newspapers.com, I think you can download them without needing a Newspapers.com account. I could be wrong. -- MrLinkinPark333 ( talk) 18:03, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Reidgreg ( talk · contribs) 16:33, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
Review forthcoming. I made some minor copy edit to the article; feel free to revert anything you disagree with and we can discuss it as part of the review. – Reidgreg ( talk) 16:33, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
I did a bit more copy edit, tidying of references and the endnote. I came across a lot of copyvio issues while checking the sources, and paraphrased as needed. – Reidgreg ( talk) 13:02, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
I named the references to make discussion a little easier.
In 1983, Marule became an assistant professor of Native American studies in the area of politics and economic development.I see where the source says she became an assistant professor at U of L in 1983, but not that she was an assistant professor of Native American studies in politics and economic development. It doesn't seem to be in "HeraldObit" either.
|page=192
to the citation, as that's the page used for this reference. If you broaden the use of this reference, you may have to add additional page numbers.Marule helped plan the 1972 WCIP conference. She used her contacts in the Third World to convince Guyana to host the 1974 preparatory meeting for the conference in Georgetown.It doesn't make sense to have a preparatory meeting in 1974 if the conference is in 1972. The sources note that the conference was held in 1975 with planning beginning in 1972; I adjusted this accordingly.
The GA criteria say that every picture must have a caption, but I feel that can be waived in the case of an infobox image of the article subject where no further details of the image are known. However, if you can determine any details – the year of the photo, where it was taken or the photographer – then you could include that in a caption. (If you want to email the website and ask for attribution, that's always an option.) And you never know, some of the non-profits might release pictures to PD. Caption added.
Although not part of the GA criteria, here are some other areas you might want to improve:
|alt=
text for the infobox image, perhaps Portrait photograph of a woman before a clapboard building
@ Thsmi002: I think the only unsourced statement is that her successor at RCC was Roy Weasel Fat. If you can't find a reliable source for that, the easiest thing would be to remove it (I don't especially like to see something like that which is only present in the infobox). – Reidgreg ( talk) 13:02, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
|alt=
text and img caption, and added (from a new source) a bit about the recent growth of a program she had initiated. I personally prefer to include the number (or hyperlink if they meet
WP:N) of children when possible. The way I see it, being a parent is a substantial part of a person's life. I can see your point about keeping the infobox succinct, so I won't challenge if editors want it removed in this instance. In regards to the death and legacy section, do you think the mention of where/when her memorial was held should be deleted?
TJMSmith (
talk)
13:50, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
I was unable to check the sources from https://www.newspapers.com – Calgary Herald, Ottawa Journal, Saskatoon Star-Phoenix. Due to the amount of close paraphrasing I came across with the other sources, I feel that it would be prudent for someone to check these. They're only used for small statements in one place each. – Reidgreg ( talk) 13:02, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
@ Reidgreg: Also, since these articles have been clipped on Newspapers.com, I think you can download them without needing a Newspapers.com account. I could be wrong. -- MrLinkinPark333 ( talk) 18:03, 8 April 2020 (UTC)