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Reviewer: Mujinga ( talk · contribs) 19:36, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
Over the next few days I will review this article
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Undiscouraged, she continued to strive for social equality, Polish independence, and cooperation between Poles and Ukrainians- this sentence could do with some blue links, perhaps social equality and Ukrainians.
The nature of their relationship has not been conclusively settled by academics,[2][7][8][9] in part, because after their deaths letters were burned by family members,[8] but also because Konopnicka was aware official censors might read her correspondence and rarely wrote about family matters even in her published works.[4][7]
In 1900, at the international Paris art exhibition.the wikilinked page says Exposition Universelle of 1900, better known in English as the 1900 Paris Exposition, so perhaps that's a better name for it here as well (same for other mentions in activism section and lead).
she was given a home as a national gift in Żarnowiec- i would suggest she was given a home in Żarnowiec as a national gift reads better.
Agrarian party- going on Polish_People's_Party#Before_1945 this was the Polskie Stronnictwo Ludowe so perhaps worth adding the link.
Galician Sjem- although this phrase is used in some of the sources, it is a bit confusing here for me since unless Galician Sjem is well known in English, from the link it seems to be the Diet of Galicia and Lodomeria in English or Sejm Krajowy in Polish. Górny says Galician Parliament.
The funeral was widely attended as a patriotic event, attracting women activists, single mothers, residents of shelters she had established, as well as their guardians. Part of this sentence might be better phrased as women's movement activists and single mothers, plus residents of shelters and the residents’ guardians
In 2018, a film, Siłaczki by Marta Dzido and Piotr Śliwowski was released, describing the struggle of Polish women to gain rights- I feel this sentence deserves a new paragraph and perhaps could be edited to something like: The film Siłaczki by Marta Dzido and Piotr Śliwowski was released in 2018. it describes the struggle of Polish women to gain equal rights.
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Mujinga I think I have addressed all your concerns, but if something needs further discussion or fixing, please ping me. Thank you so much for doing the review, many times my "foreign source" bios wait a much longer time before someone picks them up. SusunW ( talk) 16:43, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
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Over the next few days I will review this article
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19:36, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
Undiscouraged, she continued to strive for social equality, Polish independence, and cooperation between Poles and Ukrainians- this sentence could do with some blue links, perhaps social equality and Ukrainians.
The nature of their relationship has not been conclusively settled by academics,[2][7][8][9] in part, because after their deaths letters were burned by family members,[8] but also because Konopnicka was aware official censors might read her correspondence and rarely wrote about family matters even in her published works.[4][7]
In 1900, at the international Paris art exhibition.the wikilinked page says Exposition Universelle of 1900, better known in English as the 1900 Paris Exposition, so perhaps that's a better name for it here as well (same for other mentions in activism section and lead).
she was given a home as a national gift in Żarnowiec- i would suggest she was given a home in Żarnowiec as a national gift reads better.
Agrarian party- going on Polish_People's_Party#Before_1945 this was the Polskie Stronnictwo Ludowe so perhaps worth adding the link.
Galician Sjem- although this phrase is used in some of the sources, it is a bit confusing here for me since unless Galician Sjem is well known in English, from the link it seems to be the Diet of Galicia and Lodomeria in English or Sejm Krajowy in Polish. Górny says Galician Parliament.
The funeral was widely attended as a patriotic event, attracting women activists, single mothers, residents of shelters she had established, as well as their guardians. Part of this sentence might be better phrased as women's movement activists and single mothers, plus residents of shelters and the residents’ guardians
In 2018, a film, Siłaczki by Marta Dzido and Piotr Śliwowski was released, describing the struggle of Polish women to gain rights- I feel this sentence deserves a new paragraph and perhaps could be edited to something like: The film Siłaczki by Marta Dzido and Piotr Śliwowski was released in 2018. it describes the struggle of Polish women to gain equal rights.
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Mujinga I think I have addressed all your concerns, but if something needs further discussion or fixing, please ping me. Thank you so much for doing the review, many times my "foreign source" bios wait a much longer time before someone picks them up. SusunW ( talk) 16:43, 3 July 2019 (UTC)