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Reviewer: Vami IV ( talk · contribs) 17:55, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
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She was very close to her father, a local Pemex laborer, and identified mostly with him. Her relationship with her mother was also strong and dependent, but she was closer to her father.Condense.
and a worry for being successfulChange "for" to "about".
The details of Ramírez Olvera's case was basedwere based.
The FBI reportedly confirmed that Ramírez Olvera was wanted on marijuana possession, drug conspiracy and money laundering.Add "charges" to the end.
FBI supervisor Rogelio de la Garza also backed up the state police's story saying that Rodríguez Mata and Cárdenas Gutiérrez acted professionally.by saying.
On 10 August, she was extradited to the U.S. to face drug trafficking and money laundering charges in S.D. Tex.What year, and the S.D. Tex.
Former U.S. Ambassador to Mexico Tony Garza said that Rodríguez Mata's extradition was a sign of collaboration between justice officials in Mexico and the U.S. He reiterated that any person, including police officers, who violate the law and abuse citizens' trust would be brought to justice.Overly long, and superfluous. The article is not about Garza.
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Reviewer: Vami IV ( talk · contribs) 17:55, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use Done,
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17:55, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
She was very close to her father, a local Pemex laborer, and identified mostly with him. Her relationship with her mother was also strong and dependent, but she was closer to her father.Condense.
and a worry for being successfulChange "for" to "about".
The details of Ramírez Olvera's case was basedwere based.
The FBI reportedly confirmed that Ramírez Olvera was wanted on marijuana possession, drug conspiracy and money laundering.Add "charges" to the end.
FBI supervisor Rogelio de la Garza also backed up the state police's story saying that Rodríguez Mata and Cárdenas Gutiérrez acted professionally.by saying.
On 10 August, she was extradited to the U.S. to face drug trafficking and money laundering charges in S.D. Tex.What year, and the S.D. Tex.
Former U.S. Ambassador to Mexico Tony Garza said that Rodríguez Mata's extradition was a sign of collaboration between justice officials in Mexico and the U.S. He reiterated that any person, including police officers, who violate the law and abuse citizens' trust would be brought to justice.Overly long, and superfluous. The article is not about Garza.
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