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Some people from the technical committee of MESA are currently reviewing the text of this Wiki. We intend to start editing soon.
-- MarkGiebels ( talk) 14:03, 19 January 2011 (UTC)
I'm in touch with an expert that has volunteered to help improve this Wiki, though his contributions will only be done through Word - hence why I'm here to help. Once we get a draft together, I'll post it on my Talk page first for others to take a look at.
King4057 ( talk) 01:38, 19 January 2011 (UTC)
Link 3 under sources is dead (MES: A guide to getting started; PACE-Australia's Process & Control Engineering website) --
Vikingforties (
talk) 15:05, 10 September 2010 (UTC)
It is live today (15 Oct 2010). —Preceding
unsigned comment added by
206.74.148.2 (
talk) 20:06, 15 October 2010 (UTC)
The opening section is too long and too detailed. Please consider editing it to provide a brief overview, with details moved to the lower below. wcrosbie ( talk), Melbourne, Australia 07:48, 7 March 2013 (UTC)
Can I suggest the opening section's goal is to introduce the topic to a general audience, with relatively jargon free language? To "manage manufacturing operations" is not really much help. I'd like to know the function of the MES, as understood by it's operator, but in the language that the factory HR manager could easily understand.
Can I suggest considering inclusion of some mix of the following? Perhaps:
Or perhaps by completing the following statement: Managers of manufacturing plants use MES to ...
I've had a crack at creating a three sentence opening section. It introduces some of the concepts from further down the article, without going into too much detail. I hope it works for the casual reader. wcrosbie ( talk), Melbourne, Australia 10:25, 7 March 2013 (UTC)
What is the purpose of this section and where is it copied from? Should it just be deleted? 217.92.226.82 ( talk) 13:35, 6 May 2015 (UTC)
The last two bullet points in the list seem like ill-fitting late additions: They reference "log books" that occur nowhere else in the article and they are oddly specific ("the edit lock feature", "the boiler", "cooling tower effectiveness").
Also, they add nothing new: The next-to-last point is about "Digitizing of log books" which would be part of "Collection of production data". The last point is about "The Audit Interface". Of course an MES needs an HMI, but this is orthogonal to this list: The HMI should visiualize all other points.
I think the two bullet points should be removed.
Jpmaterial ( talk) 09:15, 24 June 2015 (UTC)
This article is rated Start-class on Wikipedia's
content assessment scale. It is of interest to the following WikiProjects: | ||||||||||||||
|
Some people from the technical committee of MESA are currently reviewing the text of this Wiki. We intend to start editing soon.
-- MarkGiebels ( talk) 14:03, 19 January 2011 (UTC)
I'm in touch with an expert that has volunteered to help improve this Wiki, though his contributions will only be done through Word - hence why I'm here to help. Once we get a draft together, I'll post it on my Talk page first for others to take a look at.
King4057 ( talk) 01:38, 19 January 2011 (UTC)
Link 3 under sources is dead (MES: A guide to getting started; PACE-Australia's Process & Control Engineering website) --
Vikingforties (
talk) 15:05, 10 September 2010 (UTC)
It is live today (15 Oct 2010). —Preceding
unsigned comment added by
206.74.148.2 (
talk) 20:06, 15 October 2010 (UTC)
The opening section is too long and too detailed. Please consider editing it to provide a brief overview, with details moved to the lower below. wcrosbie ( talk), Melbourne, Australia 07:48, 7 March 2013 (UTC)
Can I suggest the opening section's goal is to introduce the topic to a general audience, with relatively jargon free language? To "manage manufacturing operations" is not really much help. I'd like to know the function of the MES, as understood by it's operator, but in the language that the factory HR manager could easily understand.
Can I suggest considering inclusion of some mix of the following? Perhaps:
Or perhaps by completing the following statement: Managers of manufacturing plants use MES to ...
I've had a crack at creating a three sentence opening section. It introduces some of the concepts from further down the article, without going into too much detail. I hope it works for the casual reader. wcrosbie ( talk), Melbourne, Australia 10:25, 7 March 2013 (UTC)
What is the purpose of this section and where is it copied from? Should it just be deleted? 217.92.226.82 ( talk) 13:35, 6 May 2015 (UTC)
The last two bullet points in the list seem like ill-fitting late additions: They reference "log books" that occur nowhere else in the article and they are oddly specific ("the edit lock feature", "the boiler", "cooling tower effectiveness").
Also, they add nothing new: The next-to-last point is about "Digitizing of log books" which would be part of "Collection of production data". The last point is about "The Audit Interface". Of course an MES needs an HMI, but this is orthogonal to this list: The HMI should visiualize all other points.
I think the two bullet points should be removed.
Jpmaterial ( talk) 09:15, 24 June 2015 (UTC)